A Box has Many Sides.
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Comment from justafan
Shor of respect ...show?
hull, honest life ...full?
Two typo's I am sure from going so fast.
A wonderful lesson here with the use of a box as the conduit.
Beautiful message
Thank you for sharing
Always
Justafan of yours
Missy
reply by the author on 13-Feb-2022
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Shor of respect ...show?
hull, honest life ...full?
Two typo's I am sure from going so fast.
A wonderful lesson here with the use of a box as the conduit.
Beautiful message
Thank you for sharing
Always
Justafan of yours
Missy
Comment Written 13-Feb-2022
reply by the author on 13-Feb-2022
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I appreciate your review and editing aids, Missy. I will maky the changes.
Jona
Comment from K.L. Rockquemore
I enjoyed reading your poem, especially because of the imagery you created. I actually visualized looking in a box, thanks for that experience. Your pace added to my enjoyment.
reply by the author on 13-Feb-2022
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I enjoyed reading your poem, especially because of the imagery you created. I actually visualized looking in a box, thanks for that experience. Your pace added to my enjoyment.
Comment Written 13-Feb-2022
reply by the author on 13-Feb-2022
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Thanks for the thorough, yet concise review. I am glad you liked the pacing.
Joan
Comment from royowen
Well done Joan, also boxes can hide a bomb, not very salubrious, but praise God, most can house the most delightful gifts, like chocolates, hats, shoes, just to mention a few, beautifully written, blessings Roy
reply by the author on 13-Feb-2022
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Well done Joan, also boxes can hide a bomb, not very salubrious, but praise God, most can house the most delightful gifts, like chocolates, hats, shoes, just to mention a few, beautifully written, blessings Roy
Comment Written 13-Feb-2022
reply by the author on 13-Feb-2022
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Thanks very much, Roy. I try not to think of bombs. I agree with chocolates. But, hats are definitely a poor fashion statment on me. My daughter agrees with me here. I think I am one of the few women who would love a world where no footwear of any kind was every needed.
Joan
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I would get prickles in my feet
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Roy,
A little nervous about walking barefoot, are you. In my world there would be no possible way of walking on something that would hurt the bottom of your feer.
Joan
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Well done
Comment from lyenochka
I like your considerations of all kinds of boxes, from gifts to packages, to secrets. I like how in your last stanza you urge the reader to live a "full and honest life" by not having so many secrets.
Shor of respect and love (Show?)
Have a hull, honest life (full?)
reply by the author on 13-Feb-2022
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I like your considerations of all kinds of boxes, from gifts to packages, to secrets. I like how in your last stanza you urge the reader to live a "full and honest life" by not having so many secrets.
Shor of respect and love (Show?)
Have a hull, honest life (full?)
Comment Written 13-Feb-2022
reply by the author on 13-Feb-2022
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Thanks for reading and reviewing, Helen. I appreciate the five stars.
Joan
Comment from prettybluebirds
What does the word (hull) mean in the last line? Is it supposed to be (whole)? Another word (shor) last line, the first stanza, what does that mean, or is it supposed to be show? Otherwise, this is perfect and well done.
reply by the author on 13-Feb-2022
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What does the word (hull) mean in the last line? Is it supposed to be (whole)? Another word (shor) last line, the first stanza, what does that mean, or is it supposed to be show? Otherwise, this is perfect and well done.
Comment Written 13-Feb-2022
reply by the author on 13-Feb-2022
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Thanks very much
dp
Comment from Eunice Amero
It seems this box Held something bad. Though a box can hold many lovely things. I'd like one with a cake inside. But it can be anything of joy disappointments but be sure it is always filled with love.
reply by the author on 13-Feb-2022
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It seems this box Held something bad. Though a box can hold many lovely things. I'd like one with a cake inside. But it can be anything of joy disappointments but be sure it is always filled with love.
Comment Written 13-Feb-2022
reply by the author on 13-Feb-2022
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Thanks for reading. I am honored by the six-star rating.
Joan
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You are more than welome
Comment from Pearl Edwards
You've shown us the many boxes we can compartmentalise in our life and, as you say, the box of hidden emotions and secrets can be the most damaging. Nice free verse, just one suggestion -
One can use is to travel - I think this line needs editing.
cheers.
reply by the author on 27-Jun-2019
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You've shown us the many boxes we can compartmentalise in our life and, as you say, the box of hidden emotions and secrets can be the most damaging. Nice free verse, just one suggestion -
One can use is to travel - I think this line needs editing.
cheers.
Comment Written 27-Jun-2019
reply by the author on 27-Jun-2019
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Thanks for the review and high rating. I will make the change.
Joan
Comment from Gloria ....
I must admit I am rather fond of boxes myself. A very handy invention. I really like how you have compared both sides, one good and the other not so good.
Excellent entry into the Free Verse Club.
Gloria
reply by the author on 25-Jun-2019
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I must admit I am rather fond of boxes myself. A very handy invention. I really like how you have compared both sides, one good and the other not so good.
Excellent entry into the Free Verse Club.
Gloria
Comment Written 25-Jun-2019
reply by the author on 25-Jun-2019
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Thanks, Gloria, for your positive comments and high rating. Both are much appreciated.
~Joan
Comment from Alcreator Litt Dear
A box has many sides, it can be wondrous thing, it can bring simple joy, and can spark imagination, and also be hazardous thing hiding emotions of secret things inside; well said, well done. Write-Inspire-Change --DR ALCREATOR
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reply by the author on 25-Jun-2019
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A box has many sides, it can be wondrous thing, it can bring simple joy, and can spark imagination, and also be hazardous thing hiding emotions of secret things inside; well said, well done. Write-Inspire-Change --DR ALCREATOR
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Comment Written 24-Jun-2019
reply by the author on 25-Jun-2019
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Thank you, Dr Al
~Joan
Comment from patcelaw
The hurts I experienced when I was young took me to a time that I figuratively created a box of glass around my emotions.
When I became bi-polar the walls of the box shattered, and I felt devastated for some time.
Patricia
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reply by the author on 25-Jun-2019
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The hurts I experienced when I was young took me to a time that I figuratively created a box of glass around my emotions.
When I became bi-polar the walls of the box shattered, and I felt devastated for some time.
Patricia
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Comment Written 24-Jun-2019
reply by the author on 25-Jun-2019
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Thanks for the review. I'm glad the devastation has lessened.
Joan
