Our Legacy
All the positives we pass to the next generation56 total reviews
Comment from evesayshi
In my opinion - wow, a Six Star write indeed - "Exceptional" for sure! I loved it - a perfect poem for Independence Day - dramatic, clever and emotionally expressive - smoothly flowing rhyming rhythm and perfectly chosen and rendered verse, with a striking image of our Flag to complement the write - so great! Thank you for sharing! It certainly complies with the prompt, and I wish you a bunch of luck in the contest with this marvelous write, though I'm certain you won't need it...
reply by the author on 22-Jun-2019
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In my opinion - wow, a Six Star write indeed - "Exceptional" for sure! I loved it - a perfect poem for Independence Day - dramatic, clever and emotionally expressive - smoothly flowing rhyming rhythm and perfectly chosen and rendered verse, with a striking image of our Flag to complement the write - so great! Thank you for sharing! It certainly complies with the prompt, and I wish you a bunch of luck in the contest with this marvelous write, though I'm certain you won't need it...
Comment Written 22-Jun-2019
reply by the author on 22-Jun-2019
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Thank you for these generous and encouraging words, evesayshi. I could not appreciate them more.
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You are very welcome, Rachelle - what a splendid tribute to July 4th. Thank you again for sharing such an outstanding patriotic offering for the holiday...Eve
Comment from Gail Denham
And we give thanks to God for allowing us to live in this free land. To keep it free we must take part - vote, speak out - watch for needs of others, but also keep our govt in tune with what's right.
All this in your poem - good job.
reply by the author on 22-Jun-2019
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And we give thanks to God for allowing us to live in this free land. To keep it free we must take part - vote, speak out - watch for needs of others, but also keep our govt in tune with what's right.
All this in your poem - good job.
Comment Written 22-Jun-2019
reply by the author on 22-Jun-2019
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This is true, Gail. Thank you for this strong, encouraging review. xo
Comment from Y. M. Roger
Well, if I had a 6-er left, it would be yours for this patriotic and proud offering, ma'am!! :) Because I've been 'out' with mom visiting, I haven't seen the other offerings, but THIS, Lady Rachelle, is a winner in my eyes!! ;) ;) So much of the basics covered in so few of words... the word choices/rhythm just 'does it'!! ;) :) Good luck at the polls! ;) ;) Yvette
reply by the author on 22-Jun-2019
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Well, if I had a 6-er left, it would be yours for this patriotic and proud offering, ma'am!! :) Because I've been 'out' with mom visiting, I haven't seen the other offerings, but THIS, Lady Rachelle, is a winner in my eyes!! ;) ;) So much of the basics covered in so few of words... the word choices/rhythm just 'does it'!! ;) :) Good luck at the polls! ;) ;) Yvette
Comment Written 22-Jun-2019
reply by the author on 22-Jun-2019
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Thank you, my always-encouraging friend. I appreciate your kind words very much. xo
Comment from flylikeaneagle
Rachelle: In God we trust. We need to connect with each
other and stand up for our dreams. We are the land of the
brave with stars and stripes in our flag. I like your colors
and flag. Nice alliteration with your t letters in second thought.
To God be the Glory. flylikeaneagle
reply by the author on 22-Jun-2019
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Rachelle: In God we trust. We need to connect with each
other and stand up for our dreams. We are the land of the
brave with stars and stripes in our flag. I like your colors
and flag. Nice alliteration with your t letters in second thought.
To God be the Glory. flylikeaneagle
Comment Written 22-Jun-2019
reply by the author on 22-Jun-2019
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Thanks very much, flylikeaneagle.
Comment from rjuselius
this is a fine piece of poetry dear Rochelle! however I disagree with you on the matter of the great US.i find so many things to criticize but will leave it like that. Finland is neither a soft haven anymore.
thank you for sharing!
good luck!
blessings and a super squeeze!
rebekka x
reply by the author on 22-Jun-2019
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this is a fine piece of poetry dear Rochelle! however I disagree with you on the matter of the great US.i find so many things to criticize but will leave it like that. Finland is neither a soft haven anymore.
thank you for sharing!
good luck!
blessings and a super squeeze!
rebekka x
Comment Written 22-Jun-2019
reply by the author on 22-Jun-2019
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Thank you for your review, Rebekka. I respect the way you can separate the poem from the message and like it 'anyway.' Not everyone can do that. xo
Comment from Hugh McDowell
Excellent. Even with our faults as a country, the opportunities afforded us are so fantastic. And it indeed a cooperative effort; no one person makes it all happen by itself. Nice pacing and sequencing. I liked the rhyming as it didn't seem forced. Hugh
reply by the author on 21-Jun-2019
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Excellent. Even with our faults as a country, the opportunities afforded us are so fantastic. And it indeed a cooperative effort; no one person makes it all happen by itself. Nice pacing and sequencing. I liked the rhyming as it didn't seem forced. Hugh
Comment Written 21-Jun-2019
reply by the author on 21-Jun-2019
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Thank you, Hugh; I appreciate this really nice review. xo
Comment from Roxanna Andrews
For all our many flaws we are still a great country. I have friends who have lived in all around the world, and they have all said, there is no place like the USA. Well done, I hope you do well in the contest. Rox
reply by the author on 21-Jun-2019
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For all our many flaws we are still a great country. I have friends who have lived in all around the world, and they have all said, there is no place like the USA. Well done, I hope you do well in the contest. Rox
Comment Written 21-Jun-2019
reply by the author on 21-Jun-2019
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It's so true, Rox; people seem to lose sight of the fact that ALL countries have 'issues,' but our country's are far less than its virtues. Thanks for the validating review. I appreciate it very much. xo
Comment from juliaSjames
Great patriotic write in line with the prompt.
I agree with the points you underscore and with the positive spin of your author notes. After all a country is more than the leaders who come and go.
In the final stanza you might wish to consider using the simple future rather than past tense.
For continuity!
Best wishes
reply by the author on 21-Jun-2019
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Great patriotic write in line with the prompt.
I agree with the points you underscore and with the positive spin of your author notes. After all a country is more than the leaders who come and go.
In the final stanza you might wish to consider using the simple future rather than past tense.
For continuity!
Best wishes
Comment Written 21-Jun-2019
reply by the author on 21-Jun-2019
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Thanks for all the great feedback, Julia. xo
Comment from jusylee72
We truly live in a wonderful world where we are allowed to make our own decisions and decide who we are. I often wonder what it would be like to be in another country where our lives were dictated and controlled. Your poem did a great job of expressing those feelings.
reply by the author on 21-Jun-2019
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We truly live in a wonderful world where we are allowed to make our own decisions and decide who we are. I often wonder what it would be like to be in another country where our lives were dictated and controlled. Your poem did a great job of expressing those feelings.
Comment Written 21-Jun-2019
reply by the author on 21-Jun-2019
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I appreciate that very much. And you are so right, Jusylee72! It's easy to think the grass is greener, but EVERY country has minuses as well as pluses. But here the pluses are FAR in the lead!
Wonderful review. Thank you very much.
Comment from Dean Kuch
I really liked how you started off this poem made up of couplets with a play on the initials, "U.S.", Rachelle.
You're also right, there is no "I" in U.S. but there IS an "I" in United States.
Having said that, does that mean we're better as an abbreviated version of ourselves as a whole? Do individuals make a greater impact when working in smaller groups that are focused on a specific cause?
Or, is it still "United We Stand, Divided We Fall"?
I think you'll agree when I say I believe it's actually a little of both.
Best wishes to you in the contest.
reply by the author on 21-Jun-2019
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I really liked how you started off this poem made up of couplets with a play on the initials, "U.S.", Rachelle.
You're also right, there is no "I" in U.S. but there IS an "I" in United States.
Having said that, does that mean we're better as an abbreviated version of ourselves as a whole? Do individuals make a greater impact when working in smaller groups that are focused on a specific cause?
Or, is it still "United We Stand, Divided We Fall"?
I think you'll agree when I say I believe it's actually a little of both.
Best wishes to you in the contest.
Comment Written 21-Jun-2019
reply by the author on 21-Jun-2019
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It's definitely a little of both. We need to be individuals working toward a common cause. ( PS Love that you've trained an eagle to write your name with a cross! There's just no end to you talent!!) xo
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You're more than welcome, Rachelle.
Have a wonderful weekend.
~Dean :-)))
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Right back atcha, Dean. xo
