On Cedar Creek
A simplistic, yet sad love story53 total reviews
Comment from jusylee72
Truly a simplistic but lovely story. Wanting to go back in time is something many of us wish for, yet I often think about what I have learned from the people I have lost. They are still a part of me. Thank you for your heartfelt words.
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Truly a simplistic but lovely story. Wanting to go back in time is something many of us wish for, yet I often think about what I have learned from the people I have lost. They are still a part of me. Thank you for your heartfelt words.
Comment Written 21-Jun-2019
Comment from A. Willow Bends
I simply want to stand up and applaud this one. Perfection of rhythm and I can almost hear it being read. I love the way you simply lay down a poem as you probably write 99.9 % about REAL life things and there is no guessing to the meaning. I LIKE some mystery in poetry sometimes, but I also like the reality of beauty in real life sometimes and you are the master at writing that type piece. Great job!
Wendy
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I simply want to stand up and applaud this one. Perfection of rhythm and I can almost hear it being read. I love the way you simply lay down a poem as you probably write 99.9 % about REAL life things and there is no guessing to the meaning. I LIKE some mystery in poetry sometimes, but I also like the reality of beauty in real life sometimes and you are the master at writing that type piece. Great job!
Wendy
Comment Written 21-Jun-2019
Comment from Heather Knight
This is beautiful. I am a romantic and I always enjoy love stories.
It is great to find true love (not everybody is that lucky), even though it hurts more when we lose that person.
Thanks so much for sharing.
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This is beautiful. I am a romantic and I always enjoy love stories.
It is great to find true love (not everybody is that lucky), even though it hurts more when we lose that person.
Thanks so much for sharing.
Comment Written 21-Jun-2019
Comment from Mrs. KT
Hello JayBird,
Once again you have penned an offering that is filled with emotion and longing. Beautiful images that speak of a love long ago, but a love for which you still yearn.
Melodic and keen visual images.
Thank you for sharing!
diane
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Hello JayBird,
Once again you have penned an offering that is filled with emotion and longing. Beautiful images that speak of a love long ago, but a love for which you still yearn.
Melodic and keen visual images.
Thank you for sharing!
diane
Comment Written 20-Jun-2019
Comment from Coco Jane
Sweet love poem.
In line 4, consider adding a comma after "lass." Otherwise, "twas" seems to refer to the lass, and she is not an "it."
"'till death did call and I was spared" -- neat understated way to express the loss!
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Sweet love poem.
In line 4, consider adding a comma after "lass." Otherwise, "twas" seems to refer to the lass, and she is not an "it."
"'till death did call and I was spared" -- neat understated way to express the loss!
Comment Written 20-Jun-2019
Comment from Reese Turner
Beautiful story, nice rhyme, and inducing of lovely images of young lovers growing and sharing life. I met mine on the steps of a New York brownstone, but feeling was much the same. Great writing.
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Beautiful story, nice rhyme, and inducing of lovely images of young lovers growing and sharing life. I met mine on the steps of a New York brownstone, but feeling was much the same. Great writing.
Comment Written 20-Jun-2019
Comment from Earl Corp
If this isn't a contest entry it should be. Im sorry I don't have a six star rating left to give you because this poem would have earned it. Very nice job.
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If this isn't a contest entry it should be. Im sorry I don't have a six star rating left to give you because this poem would have earned it. Very nice job.
Comment Written 20-Jun-2019
Comment from Sylvia Page
Hello Jaybird
This is a wonderful narration of how you found your life's partner, but life goes on and we have to someday face our maker. Understand the regrets, but that is life. Beautiful imagery and crafted well.
Sylvia
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Hello Jaybird
This is a wonderful narration of how you found your life's partner, but life goes on and we have to someday face our maker. Understand the regrets, but that is life. Beautiful imagery and crafted well.
Sylvia
Comment Written 20-Jun-2019
Comment from Cedar
Hello Jay: Now, this is what I call a true country romance. From the time you waded cedar creek and touched her hand, things were set for life.
This is one of my favorite kinds of poetry, finding and courting the love of your life in the country. There should be a movie made about this one...Bill
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Hello Jay: Now, this is what I call a true country romance. From the time you waded cedar creek and touched her hand, things were set for life.
This is one of my favorite kinds of poetry, finding and courting the love of your life in the country. There should be a movie made about this one...Bill
Comment Written 20-Jun-2019
Comment from Janice Canerdy
I absolutely love this poem. It flows so sweetly, like that creek where you met the love of your life! Also, I love rhyming couplets, and yours are superb. Aren't you glad God blessed us with memory?
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I absolutely love this poem. It flows so sweetly, like that creek where you met the love of your life! Also, I love rhyming couplets, and yours are superb. Aren't you glad God blessed us with memory?
Comment Written 20-Jun-2019
