Standing in line for a Passing.
You don't always get what you hope for!43 total reviews
Comment from Brenda Henderson
Wow! Thanks for the chuckle and the smile. I believe they'll be with me for a while. This was indeed great fun to read. I don't think that you could have chosen a better picture unless you found one of those toy false teeth with the spring on the side. I like that the ones that you chose looked worn and old. Good work!
reply by the author on 21-Jun-2019
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Wow! Thanks for the chuckle and the smile. I believe they'll be with me for a while. This was indeed great fun to read. I don't think that you could have chosen a better picture unless you found one of those toy false teeth with the spring on the side. I like that the ones that you chose looked worn and old. Good work!
Comment Written 18-Jun-2019
reply by the author on 21-Jun-2019
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I want to express my appreciation for your taking the time to read and rate my poem. Thank you so very much for your five beautiful stars and your kind words about my contest entry "Standing in line for a Passing."
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You're Welcome!
Comment from Dean Kuch
Yeah, you're right, Anonymous Poet.
It could happen, that's for sure.
While my father was still living, he'd always ask me what I wanted of his when he passed away.
My answer was that I just wanted him to live forever.
And while that obviously didn't happen, I live with the realization of having a clear conscience knowing that I never asked him for a thing.
But my two younger brothers sure did.
Funny ending with a little "bite"!
Good luck to you in the contest.
~Dean
reply by the author on 21-Jun-2019
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Yeah, you're right, Anonymous Poet.
It could happen, that's for sure.
While my father was still living, he'd always ask me what I wanted of his when he passed away.
My answer was that I just wanted him to live forever.
And while that obviously didn't happen, I live with the realization of having a clear conscience knowing that I never asked him for a thing.
But my two younger brothers sure did.
Funny ending with a little "bite"!
Good luck to you in the contest.
~Dean
Comment Written 18-Jun-2019
reply by the author on 21-Jun-2019
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I want to express my appreciation for your taking the time to read and rate my poem. Thank you so very much for your five beautiful stars and your kind words about my contest entry "Standing in line for a Passing."
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My pleasure.
Comment from evesayshi
In my opinion, an amazingly clever write, especially given its smooth rhyming rhythm - the humor builds to its conclusion quite nicely, though it was somewhat anticipated with the image. I would remove that image and place a picture of a grand estate instead. Think of the humorous surprise when your last line is reached. Regardless of anything I said here, it complies fully with the prompt and deserves recognition for both humor and fluid movement...
reply by the author on 21-Jun-2019
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In my opinion, an amazingly clever write, especially given its smooth rhyming rhythm - the humor builds to its conclusion quite nicely, though it was somewhat anticipated with the image. I would remove that image and place a picture of a grand estate instead. Think of the humorous surprise when your last line is reached. Regardless of anything I said here, it complies fully with the prompt and deserves recognition for both humor and fluid movement...
Comment Written 18-Jun-2019
reply by the author on 21-Jun-2019
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I want to express my appreciation for your taking the time to read and rate my poem. Thank you so very much for your five beautiful stars and your kind words about my contest entry "Standing in line for a Passing."
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You are very welcome, Dr. Nad, my pleasure I assure you...Eve
Comment from Earl Corp
Very cool entry into the false teeth contest. I like the twist at the end, that's about as bad as leaving it all to a cat named Rhubarb. Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 21-Jun-2019
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Very cool entry into the false teeth contest. I like the twist at the end, that's about as bad as leaving it all to a cat named Rhubarb. Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 18-Jun-2019
reply by the author on 21-Jun-2019
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I want to express my appreciation for your taking the time to read and rate my poem. Thank you so very much for your five beautiful stars and your kind words about my contest entry "Standing in line for a Passing."
Comment from Gloria ....
HAHA, Your entire poem right up until the very end carried such an air of nobility, even with the greedy heirs waiting to inherit something that isn't theirs. So unique and well done.
I think the false teeth are more than adequate reward for such calumny.
This is terrific and I got a really good laugh from it.
Best of luck in the booth. :)
Gloria
reply by the author on 21-Jun-2019
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HAHA, Your entire poem right up until the very end carried such an air of nobility, even with the greedy heirs waiting to inherit something that isn't theirs. So unique and well done.
I think the false teeth are more than adequate reward for such calumny.
This is terrific and I got a really good laugh from it.
Best of luck in the booth. :)
Gloria
Comment Written 18-Jun-2019
reply by the author on 21-Jun-2019
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I want to express my appreciation for your taking the time to read and rate my poem. Thank you so very much for your five beautiful stars and your kind words about my contest entry "Standing in line for a Passing."
Comment from rspoet
This is an excellent, fun poem and entry for the contest.
Yes, you don't always get what you want,
but sometimes you get the last laugh, at least if you are the bequeath-er.
Pay back time.
Well done
Good luck in the contest
Robert
reply by the author on 21-Jun-2019
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This is an excellent, fun poem and entry for the contest.
Yes, you don't always get what you want,
but sometimes you get the last laugh, at least if you are the bequeath-er.
Pay back time.
Well done
Good luck in the contest
Robert
Comment Written 18-Jun-2019
reply by the author on 21-Jun-2019
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I want to express my appreciation for your taking the time to read and rate my poem. Thank you so very much for your five beautiful stars and your kind words about my contest entry "Standing in line for a Passing."
Comment from Mystic Angel 7777
LOL! Even though the font and background colors made it very hard to read I am glad I stuck with it. This is just too cute. It meets the contest requirements with clever flair. Well done and thank you for sharing it.
reply by the author on 21-Jun-2019
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LOL! Even though the font and background colors made it very hard to read I am glad I stuck with it. This is just too cute. It meets the contest requirements with clever flair. Well done and thank you for sharing it.
Comment Written 18-Jun-2019
reply by the author on 21-Jun-2019
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I want to express my appreciation for your taking the time to read and rate my poem. Thank you so very much for your five beautiful stars and your kind words about my contest entry "Standing in line for a Passing."
Comment from MsPetra
First and foremost I thought your choice of colors (basically) got on my nerves.
The poem itself was barbed enough to not need such bold colors.
It detracted from what you said in the poem. That's not what you want to do. If you choose to put bold colors it should add to or punctuate your work. It wasn't needed.
I am lookiing forward to your next offering.
Thank you for posting this. It does stick out in the mind.
reply by the author on 21-Jun-2019
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First and foremost I thought your choice of colors (basically) got on my nerves.
The poem itself was barbed enough to not need such bold colors.
It detracted from what you said in the poem. That's not what you want to do. If you choose to put bold colors it should add to or punctuate your work. It wasn't needed.
I am lookiing forward to your next offering.
Thank you for posting this. It does stick out in the mind.
Comment Written 18-Jun-2019
reply by the author on 21-Jun-2019
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I want to express my appreciation for your taking the time to read and rate my poem. Thank you so very much for your five beautiful stars and your kind words about my contest entry "Standing in line for a Passing."
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
A very well-written poem about the heritage that awaits the heirs when they stand in line to receive their heritage, and what a surprise they will have to find they will get only his false teeth.
reply by the author on 21-Jun-2019
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A very well-written poem about the heritage that awaits the heirs when they stand in line to receive their heritage, and what a surprise they will have to find they will get only his false teeth.
Comment Written 18-Jun-2019
reply by the author on 21-Jun-2019
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I want to express my appreciation for your taking the time to read and rate my poem. Thank you so very much for your five beautiful stars and your kind words about my contest entry "Standing in line for a Passing."
Comment from Lance S. Loria
Sometimes I feel exactly like this about my situation. The number of calls declines but the Christmas and birthday lists are growing. I can't take it with me but I can spend it. Nice contest entry.
reply by the author on 21-Jun-2019
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Sometimes I feel exactly like this about my situation. The number of calls declines but the Christmas and birthday lists are growing. I can't take it with me but I can spend it. Nice contest entry.
Comment Written 18-Jun-2019
reply by the author on 21-Jun-2019
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I want to express my appreciation for your taking the time to read and rate my poem. Thank you so very much for your five beautiful stars and your kind words about my contest entry "Standing in line for a Passing."
