Standing in line for a Passing.
You don't always get what you hope for!43 total reviews
Comment from susand3022
I don't know whether to laugh or to cry...Those teeth are just so nasty it makes me want to puke! So I'm laughing at the recipients because they deserve nothing more if all they're doing is waiting for what they think they can get. On the other hand... I'm finding something similar going on behind the scenes in parts of my own family now and it's revolting.
reply by the author on 21-Jun-2019
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I don't know whether to laugh or to cry...Those teeth are just so nasty it makes me want to puke! So I'm laughing at the recipients because they deserve nothing more if all they're doing is waiting for what they think they can get. On the other hand... I'm finding something similar going on behind the scenes in parts of my own family now and it's revolting.
Comment Written 19-Jun-2019
reply by the author on 21-Jun-2019
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I want to express my appreciation for your taking the time to read and rate my poem. Thank you so very much for your five beautiful stars and your kind words about my contest entry "Standing in line for a Passing."
Comment from Janice Canerdy
It DOES happen (I read your note)--"loved ones" who have shown little care for an aging parent/grandparent, etc., who suddenly show up--showing an interest. Your poem is very well-written and amusing--with what could be taken as a serious undertone.
reply by the author on 21-Jun-2019
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It DOES happen (I read your note)--"loved ones" who have shown little care for an aging parent/grandparent, etc., who suddenly show up--showing an interest. Your poem is very well-written and amusing--with what could be taken as a serious undertone.
Comment Written 19-Jun-2019
reply by the author on 21-Jun-2019
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I want to express my appreciation for your taking the time to read and rate my poem. Thank you so very much for your five beautiful stars and your kind words about my contest entry "Standing in line for a Passing."
Comment from Dorothy Farrell
Hi anon - this is a good one, a fine take on the contest requirements. The picture is rather disgusting LOL, but the poem is amusing with good abcb rhyme maintained throughout. A really good entry to the contest. Good luck. Dorothy
reply by the author on 21-Jun-2019
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Hi anon - this is a good one, a fine take on the contest requirements. The picture is rather disgusting LOL, but the poem is amusing with good abcb rhyme maintained throughout. A really good entry to the contest. Good luck. Dorothy
Comment Written 19-Jun-2019
reply by the author on 21-Jun-2019
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I want to express my appreciation for your taking the time to read and rate my poem. Thank you so very much for your five beautiful stars and your kind words about my contest entry "Standing in line for a Passing."
Comment from mmonaghan777
Amen!!! I only wanted to use that one word. You can't take them with you and when watching you sink into the sunset is their only thought, then so be it.
reply by the author on 21-Jun-2019
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Amen!!! I only wanted to use that one word. You can't take them with you and when watching you sink into the sunset is their only thought, then so be it.
Comment Written 19-Jun-2019
reply by the author on 21-Jun-2019
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I want to express my appreciation for your taking the time to read and rate my poem. Thank you so very much for your five beautiful stars and your kind words about my contest entry "Standing in line for a Passing."
Comment from Ms. Snyder
A fantastic entry for the False Teeth contest - I would say one of the best that I've read! I really enjoyed this entry. Thank you for making me laugh as well as commiserate with you. You clearly, if older, have made some observations about how the people around you have only one reason to spend time with you. I feel exactly the same way at times. Cheers, Fonda
reply by the author on 21-Jun-2019
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A fantastic entry for the False Teeth contest - I would say one of the best that I've read! I really enjoyed this entry. Thank you for making me laugh as well as commiserate with you. You clearly, if older, have made some observations about how the people around you have only one reason to spend time with you. I feel exactly the same way at times. Cheers, Fonda
Comment Written 19-Jun-2019
reply by the author on 21-Jun-2019
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I want to express my appreciation for your taking the time to read and rate my poem. Thank you so very much for your five beautiful stars and your kind words about my contest entry "Standing in line for a Passing."
Comment from TPAC
A rough look being these teeth are false given set still look better than the one I have remaining in my mouth finding this write humorous in its given composition. A pure delightful read in my given opinion.
reply by the author on 21-Jun-2019
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A rough look being these teeth are false given set still look better than the one I have remaining in my mouth finding this write humorous in its given composition. A pure delightful read in my given opinion.
Comment Written 19-Jun-2019
reply by the author on 21-Jun-2019
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I want to express my appreciation for your taking the time to read and rate my poem. Thank you so very much for your five beautiful stars and your kind words about my contest entry "Standing in line for a Passing."
Comment from tfawcus
This is a legacy that should bite the little money grabbers in the bum. Question is - what are you going to do with the bulk of your estate? I know of a worthy cause...
reply by the author on 21-Jun-2019
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This is a legacy that should bite the little money grabbers in the bum. Question is - what are you going to do with the bulk of your estate? I know of a worthy cause...
Comment Written 19-Jun-2019
reply by the author on 21-Jun-2019
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I want to express my appreciation for your taking the time to read and rate my poem. Thank you so very much for your five beautiful stars and your kind words about my contest entry "Standing in line for a Passing."
Comment from C. Gale Burnett
So, so funny. I'm glad it is 'true fiction', but, you are right, it could happen and I've seen it happen (except for the last line).
I really enjoyed the humor in the poem, the overall presentation and the rhyme.
This is an awesome contest entry!
reply by the author on 21-Jun-2019
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So, so funny. I'm glad it is 'true fiction', but, you are right, it could happen and I've seen it happen (except for the last line).
I really enjoyed the humor in the poem, the overall presentation and the rhyme.
This is an awesome contest entry!
Comment Written 19-Jun-2019
reply by the author on 21-Jun-2019
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I want to express my appreciation for your taking the time to read and rate my poem. Thank you so very much for your five beautiful stars and your kind words about my contest entry "Standing in line for a Passing."
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Even the title was clever. I truly enjoyed your poem. Thought it was awesome.
Comment from kiwisteveh
Not too much truth I hope. You set this up quite nicely for the punch-line, but I'm afraid you've given it away with the artwork which signals what is coming.
The reading of the will has always been an inspiration for humorists. Let's just hope those heirs don't scrap too much over who gets the dainty molars!
Steve
reply by the author on 21-Jun-2019
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Not too much truth I hope. You set this up quite nicely for the punch-line, but I'm afraid you've given it away with the artwork which signals what is coming.
The reading of the will has always been an inspiration for humorists. Let's just hope those heirs don't scrap too much over who gets the dainty molars!
Steve
Comment Written 19-Jun-2019
reply by the author on 21-Jun-2019
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I want to express my appreciation for your taking the time to read and rate my poem. Thank you so very much for your five beautiful stars and your kind words about my contest entry "Standing in line for a Passing."
Comment from Michele Harber
This is very funny (and sadly real), and definitely makes me happy I'm not one of your heirs! While there are a couple of areas where the meter is slightly off, your rhymes are spot on, and your story rolls out well. I wish you luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 21-Jun-2019
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This is very funny (and sadly real), and definitely makes me happy I'm not one of your heirs! While there are a couple of areas where the meter is slightly off, your rhymes are spot on, and your story rolls out well. I wish you luck in the contest.
Comment Written 18-Jun-2019
reply by the author on 21-Jun-2019
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I want to express my appreciation for your taking the time to read and rate my poem. Thank you so very much for your five beautiful stars and your kind words about my contest entry "Standing in line for a Passing."
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It's my absolute pleasure.
