Scrolling and Bowling
A contest entry9 total reviews
Comment from susand3022
Hi Author! This is definitely a different take on a bowling poem... and you're 1,000% right... Thank God for Rhymezone! I couldn't live here without it! A very unique offering! :)
reply by the author on 16-Jun-2019
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Hi Author! This is definitely a different take on a bowling poem... and you're 1,000% right... Thank God for Rhymezone! I couldn't live here without it! A very unique offering! :)
Comment Written 15-Jun-2019
reply by the author on 16-Jun-2019
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Thank you for reading and taking the time to comment. One of my reviewers suggested using fanstory was cheating. I see it as a great service to writers
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HA!!! Is about all I've got to say about that! Whomever said that is obviously not a writer, and most likely never will be or they would take advantage of a fantastic teaching tool this can be. I've gotten more from FS than I have from some writing courses. As to things like Rhyme Zone, any writer will use every tool available to them. Just like a warrior. You can't win if you leave your best weapons in the chest!
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
A very well-written poem about bowling the biggest challenge was to find words that rhyme with bowling, but it seems you had a jolly time at rhymezone to find these well-rhyming words.
reply by the author on 16-Jun-2019
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A very well-written poem about bowling the biggest challenge was to find words that rhyme with bowling, but it seems you had a jolly time at rhymezone to find these well-rhyming words.
Comment Written 15-Jun-2019
reply by the author on 16-Jun-2019
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I love rhimezone. My poetry needs all the help it can get. Thank you for stopping by and reviewing my work
Comment from DeborahWrite
Dear Author, I enjoyed your contest entry on "Scrolling and Bowling". Your rhyme was great and your verses worked well! I also take a break from writing from time to time--because of deadlines, and I am happy you are writing again!
My best in the contest, Deborah
reply by the author on 16-Jun-2019
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Dear Author, I enjoyed your contest entry on "Scrolling and Bowling". Your rhyme was great and your verses worked well! I also take a break from writing from time to time--because of deadlines, and I am happy you are writing again!
My best in the contest, Deborah
Comment Written 14-Jun-2019
reply by the author on 16-Jun-2019
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Thank you Deborah. I think we all need a spell from time to time. I know when I've completed a manuscript, I give myself a break by attempting poetry. After about six months I then start tossing ideas around in my brain. A month or two later I start a new work.
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Great, Bob, and it most likely contributes to your success.
Comment from Thomas Bowling
This is very good. Good luck in the contest. I hope you finish in second place. I would say first place, but I also entered this contest so I have a vested interest.
reply by the author on 14-Jun-2019
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This is very good. Good luck in the contest. I hope you finish in second place. I would say first place, but I also entered this contest so I have a vested interest.
Comment Written 13-Jun-2019
reply by the author on 14-Jun-2019
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Thank you Tom. I would be happy with your suggestion, but a whole lot happier if the positions were reversed
Comment from Nanny 6
Ha... you did it! Lots of rhyming with bowling... And you achieve the end point where it's better to score with the girls then the bowling ball... LOL this is a great entry for the writing prompt I wish you good luck :-)
Judy
reply by the author on 14-Jun-2019
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Ha... you did it! Lots of rhyming with bowling... And you achieve the end point where it's better to score with the girls then the bowling ball... LOL this is a great entry for the writing prompt I wish you good luck :-)
Judy
Comment Written 13-Jun-2019
reply by the author on 14-Jun-2019
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Thank you Nanny. My scoring in bowling was low, but my scoring with girls was non-existent. Such is life.
Comment from Y. M. Roger
Such a fun offering for this contest that takes the 'bowling' motif and uses it as both setting and metaphor... fun! ;) ;) Thanx for sharing and best of luck at the polls! ;) :)
my tostesterone --> my testosterone
reply by the author on 14-Jun-2019
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Such a fun offering for this contest that takes the 'bowling' motif and uses it as both setting and metaphor... fun! ;) ;) Thanx for sharing and best of luck at the polls! ;) :)
my tostesterone --> my testosterone
Comment Written 13-Jun-2019
reply by the author on 14-Jun-2019
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Thank you for correcting that spelling. And more so for the lovely comment you posted. I appreciate it.
Comment from Clive Byerley
I like the way your poem undermines itself by admitting to using help - and then flaunts the results. The problem with letting rhymes control the content is that a continuous thought can be hijacked by the available rhyme. Nevertheless it's an original idea. If you read it aloud you may see that there is uneven rhythm in some lines that don't scan. I found they tended to trip up the tongue when reciting it. Most enjoyable. I could see your wry smile in every line. More!
reply by the author on 14-Jun-2019
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I like the way your poem undermines itself by admitting to using help - and then flaunts the results. The problem with letting rhymes control the content is that a continuous thought can be hijacked by the available rhyme. Nevertheless it's an original idea. If you read it aloud you may see that there is uneven rhythm in some lines that don't scan. I found they tended to trip up the tongue when reciting it. Most enjoyable. I could see your wry smile in every line. More!
Comment Written 13-Jun-2019
reply by the author on 14-Jun-2019
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Thank you for reading and reviewing my entry. Personally I don't see using Rhymezone as a flaunting of the rule. To me it's no different to using a dictionary for ensuring accurate spelling.
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
Well you found some unusual words to rhyme with bowling here and made good use of them in your poem, and you included 'bowling,' good luck with the contest . . . . love Dolly x
reply by the author on 13-Jun-2019
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Well you found some unusual words to rhyme with bowling here and made good use of them in your poem, and you included 'bowling,' good luck with the contest . . . . love Dolly x
Comment Written 13-Jun-2019
reply by the author on 13-Jun-2019
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Glad you enjoyed my competition entry. I hope the judges see it the same way. Thank you again.
Comment from tfawcus
Such aids can be consoling, though sometimes quite controlling.
I'd be with you in extolling their worth to catch a rhyme.
I'll often go out trolling, it helps to get things rolling,
My muse finds it amusing, and it doesn't half save time.
reply by the author on 13-Jun-2019
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Such aids can be consoling, though sometimes quite controlling.
I'd be with you in extolling their worth to catch a rhyme.
I'll often go out trolling, it helps to get things rolling,
My muse finds it amusing, and it doesn't half save time.
Comment Written 12-Jun-2019
reply by the author on 13-Jun-2019
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Love your reply. Maybe I should include your verse and make it a joint effort. Thank you for reviewing
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:)) You're welcome to treat it as your own.
