Streetcar # 2
Short story about an event in my life.17 total reviews
Comment from Jannypan (Jan)
I enjoyed your story, Henry. Good job telling it. Your lines flow well with a funny ending that readers will probably not be expecting. Good job nd thanks for sharing. Best wises. Jan
reply by the author on 15-Jun-2019
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I enjoyed your story, Henry. Good job telling it. Your lines flow well with a funny ending that readers will probably not be expecting. Good job nd thanks for sharing. Best wises. Jan
Comment Written 15-Jun-2019
reply by the author on 15-Jun-2019
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Jan, thank you for reading my story. Along with the Lion in the Hallway, they are becoming well known even among our great grandchildren. Thank you for your comments and bright stars.
Comment from Ulla
Hi there, this is a great story of what can be termed as a child's or children's adventures and a mother's deep concern of what has happened to them. I'm on your mother's side. Great story, and good luck. All best. Ulla:))
reply by the author on 15-Jun-2019
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Hi there, this is a great story of what can be termed as a child's or children's adventures and a mother's deep concern of what has happened to them. I'm on your mother's side. Great story, and good luck. All best. Ulla:))
Comment Written 15-Jun-2019
reply by the author on 15-Jun-2019
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Thank you very much Ulla for reading my story, your comments and wonderful stars. It took until I had children, that I began to see my mother's side.
Comment from royowen
All that trouble for a little temptation, mothers can be most unreasonable when they're worried about their children,as my mother was. I was born opinion October 1942, so I would be your sister's age. I loved this story, (I can remember walking 5 miles as a teen...it's long way.) beautifully written, my friend, blessings, Roy
reply by the author on 15-Jun-2019
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All that trouble for a little temptation, mothers can be most unreasonable when they're worried about their children,as my mother was. I was born opinion October 1942, so I would be your sister's age. I loved this story, (I can remember walking 5 miles as a teen...it's long way.) beautifully written, my friend, blessings, Roy
Comment Written 15-Jun-2019
reply by the author on 15-Jun-2019
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Roy, thank you very much for reading my story, your comments and wonderful stars. This story along with the Lion in the Hallway are favorites among our great-grandchildren.
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Well done
Comment from estory
It's an interesting tale of the travails of childhood, especially when you're responsible for the younger ones, and when they get into trouble, the parents come down on you. I think the O Henry twist at the end, when your sister finally admits to using the streetcar money to buy candy, is a nice humorous twist and lifts the heavier mood of the story. lots of personal memories of those long ago days serve to deepen the nostalgic mood of fading childhood. I got a kick out of the cheap prices of the candy. When I was in elementary school in the sixties, I remember good humor ice cream for 25 cents. estory
reply by the author on 15-Jun-2019
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It's an interesting tale of the travails of childhood, especially when you're responsible for the younger ones, and when they get into trouble, the parents come down on you. I think the O Henry twist at the end, when your sister finally admits to using the streetcar money to buy candy, is a nice humorous twist and lifts the heavier mood of the story. lots of personal memories of those long ago days serve to deepen the nostalgic mood of fading childhood. I got a kick out of the cheap prices of the candy. When I was in elementary school in the sixties, I remember good humor ice cream for 25 cents. estory
Comment Written 15-Jun-2019
reply by the author on 15-Jun-2019
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Thank you very much story for your comments, stars and your taking the time to read the story.
Comment from damommy
For goodness sake! She never said a word in your defense. I guess she was too scared after seeing you happened to you. This is a great story, full of details that take this reader right to it.
reply by the author on 13-Jun-2019
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For goodness sake! She never said a word in your defense. I guess she was too scared after seeing you happened to you. This is a great story, full of details that take this reader right to it.
Comment Written 13-Jun-2019
reply by the author on 13-Jun-2019
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Thank you damommy for reading my story, commenting and those bright stars. She more than made up for it as she grew older.
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It's a memory you two share.
Yvonne
Comment from tfawcus
What wonderful reminiscences and related with such a nice touch of humour. You have caught the perspective of the six-year old perfectly.
Your last sentence is a bit of a tangle - there must be a typo or two in it: "Mom, when she told the that story said, 'I bought a Baby Ruth and was ashamed to confess.'"
I laughed because it reminded me of a story my wife tells, of when she and her sister persuaded her mum to give them six individual pennies for the church collection, so they could hear "the pennies dropping from heaven" (five for the collection and one for the sweet shop). I gather they only got away with it once. Raspberry tongues are a dead giveaway!
reply by the author on 13-Jun-2019
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What wonderful reminiscences and related with such a nice touch of humour. You have caught the perspective of the six-year old perfectly.
Your last sentence is a bit of a tangle - there must be a typo or two in it: "Mom, when she told the that story said, 'I bought a Baby Ruth and was ashamed to confess.'"
I laughed because it reminded me of a story my wife tells, of when she and her sister persuaded her mum to give them six individual pennies for the church collection, so they could hear "the pennies dropping from heaven" (five for the collection and one for the sweet shop). I gather they only got away with it once. Raspberry tongues are a dead giveaway!
Comment Written 13-Jun-2019
reply by the author on 13-Jun-2019
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Thank you for reading my story tfawcus. I will go back and check the ending again. The rating you gave me is awesome, thank you. I corrected it. Thank you.
Comment from Robert Zimmerman
Henry: I was fascinated by this story. So many of the things I knew about as a child in the early 50's rang like an echo. In reference the Pope Pius reference, I remember when the school had fish for lunch on Friday because of the Catholic kids. Everyone got the fish sticks. This was a public school but no one complained. The descriptive events in the story tugged at my hard old heart. I remember these things so well as your graphic description revived my memories, Great piece. -Robert-
reply by the author on 12-Jun-2019
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Henry: I was fascinated by this story. So many of the things I knew about as a child in the early 50's rang like an echo. In reference the Pope Pius reference, I remember when the school had fish for lunch on Friday because of the Catholic kids. Everyone got the fish sticks. This was a public school but no one complained. The descriptive events in the story tugged at my hard old heart. I remember these things so well as your graphic description revived my memories, Great piece. -Robert-
Comment Written 12-Jun-2019
reply by the author on 12-Jun-2019
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Thank you Robert for reading my story. Your comments are special to me, plus those bright stars added a lot to your review.
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You're welcome.
Comment from susand3022
Hahahahahahaha!!! That's funny, Henry! It reminds me of my parents' engagement story (that's in my portfolio.) You always get two different stories... I grew up knowing my mom's story. Then recently I heard the story from my dad... what a difference! Together, they make a great story! LOL
reply by the author on 12-Jun-2019
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Hahahahahahaha!!! That's funny, Henry! It reminds me of my parents' engagement story (that's in my portfolio.) You always get two different stories... I grew up knowing my mom's story. Then recently I heard the story from my dad... what a difference! Together, they make a great story! LOL
Comment Written 12-Jun-2019
reply by the author on 12-Jun-2019
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Susand3022, thank you very much for reading my story, your comments and wonderful and wonderful stars.
Comment from Gloria ....
Let no good deed go unpunished. Honestly and to think your little sister had spent the money on a chocolate bar and rather than confessing the truth, let you take all that flak.
This is a well told story, Henry. You give us a real flavour of the surroundings and attitudes back in those days and I think your answer I don't know is perfect as my guess is you were a little stressed not knowing what to do, being just a kid yourself.
Well done and best of luck to you with the Contest Committee. :)
Gloria
reply by the author on 12-Jun-2019
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Let no good deed go unpunished. Honestly and to think your little sister had spent the money on a chocolate bar and rather than confessing the truth, let you take all that flak.
This is a well told story, Henry. You give us a real flavour of the surroundings and attitudes back in those days and I think your answer I don't know is perfect as my guess is you were a little stressed not knowing what to do, being just a kid yourself.
Well done and best of luck to you with the Contest Committee. :)
Gloria
Comment Written 12-Jun-2019
reply by the author on 12-Jun-2019
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Thank you Gloria for reading my story, your wonderful stars and your comments. You guessed it right.
Comment from Cindy Warren
It sounds like you grew up with a lot of love. And the obvious solution isn't always obvious to kids. Of course you couldn't let your little sister walk home alone. I think your parents would have been twice as mad if you had.
reply by the author on 12-Jun-2019
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It sounds like you grew up with a lot of love. And the obvious solution isn't always obvious to kids. Of course you couldn't let your little sister walk home alone. I think your parents would have been twice as mad if you had.
Comment Written 12-Jun-2019
reply by the author on 12-Jun-2019
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Thank you Cindy for reading my story, your comments and wonderful stars. I still be in the doghouse, if I let her walk home by herself. And, my parents have been dead and buried for a couple of decades.
