Obsessive Tendencies
Viewing comments for Chapter 1 "Her Obsession"An Unlikely Journey Toward Reconstruction
38 total reviews
Comment from lyenochka
So is the narrator human or a fairy? Of course, I don't know if the handsome motorbike dude is human either.
You described everything really well right on the border between reality and fantasy.
I didn't know what this sentence meant:
"until I hear Ariel's song of call to shelter for the night."
reply by the author on 10-Jun-2019
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So is the narrator human or a fairy? Of course, I don't know if the handsome motorbike dude is human either.
You described everything really well right on the border between reality and fantasy.
I didn't know what this sentence meant:
"until I hear Ariel's song of call to shelter for the night."
Comment Written 10-Jun-2019
reply by the author on 10-Jun-2019
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The call that would have all the fairies gather in for the night... I guess there's too much danger for such petite beings out after dark.. :) ;) ;) The picture tells you exactly who they are - although it's there in the text, as well. :) ;) ;Thanx for the review, Helen -- always enjoy hearing from you! ;) ;) Take care!
Comment from Colin John
Hi Yvette , slow of the mark today , do this is how it's done . I lovely well written story and you break up the sentences really nicely . Great write , kind regards Colin x
reply by the author on 10-Jun-2019
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Hi Yvette , slow of the mark today , do this is how it's done . I lovely well written story and you break up the sentences really nicely . Great write , kind regards Colin x
Comment Written 10-Jun-2019
reply by the author on 10-Jun-2019
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O, Colin, you so ROCK!! :) ;) Thank you for these awesome stars... and I'm glad you enjoyed this next idea... really hadn't intended on starting this yet, but I was hesitant to enter the first chapter of the one I already had going.. .:) ;) Aaaaand... here it is! ;) ;) Thanx again for those lovely stars, sir, and have a great evening! ;) ;) Yvette
Comment from Debbie Pope
I'm going to love this one, Yvette. You had my rapt attention from the get go. I love your humming skin and singing hair, but my favorite description is that of the laughter. "A smile that came from deep inside of me and could only escape after it splashed itself all over my face." That is just fun to read.
The thing that I like the very best though is how you tease the reader with your plot. I know you, and I know this is fantasy, so I kept thinking what is going on. This is not a girl out jogging.
I can't believe you have the complex plot of two books in you. Well, I know you, and I guess that I do believe it. You are awesome, and I look forward to reading this second book in the future.
reply by the author on 10-Jun-2019
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I'm going to love this one, Yvette. You had my rapt attention from the get go. I love your humming skin and singing hair, but my favorite description is that of the laughter. "A smile that came from deep inside of me and could only escape after it splashed itself all over my face." That is just fun to read.
The thing that I like the very best though is how you tease the reader with your plot. I know you, and I know this is fantasy, so I kept thinking what is going on. This is not a girl out jogging.
I can't believe you have the complex plot of two books in you. Well, I know you, and I guess that I do believe it. You are awesome, and I look forward to reading this second book in the future.
Comment Written 10-Jun-2019
reply by the author on 10-Jun-2019
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Hello Beautiful B'ham Friend!! I am just taking time to breathe again... did some writing on Maggie today and had to make myself stop to fix some supper for the ones still home!! ;) :) Thank you so very much for this AWESOME review... and, you're not gonna believe this (or maybe you will since you know how my mind does strange things sometimes - lol!), but when I first 'paid to enter' this contest, I was thinking I could use it as a way to sortof 'advertise' my one already in work (Maggie)... but, as I went to post late Friday night, I thought: "you know, they always say you're note supposed to 're-post' anything... hmmm." So, instead, I let my fingers fly on the next idea I've got swimming around in my blonde brain and here it is (you'll note I haven't even named the characters yet!)! Just as soon as I finish Renaissance of Enchantment for Maggie, this one's next....who knows? Now that Chapter One's on paper, I could take a 'brain break' once in while (Maggie's is very 'epic' in the number of characters I have to keep track of - lol!) and write another chapter on this one! :) ;)
I do hope this means you're feeling better...? When's the wedding? I'll check in in the morning before I launch into another marathon writing session! ;);) Take care, ma'am! ;) ;) Yvette
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I'll check on your posts everyday my prolific friend. It boggles my mind how much you could write if you had no other obligations.
Comment from Dorothy Day
Wow-excellent beginning- your first poetic words drew me into your story. This is not a genre I have experienced since very early years. However, you have managed to put in setting, dialogue, tension, and suspense. Great beginning.
reply by the author on 10-Jun-2019
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Wow-excellent beginning- your first poetic words drew me into your story. This is not a genre I have experienced since very early years. However, you have managed to put in setting, dialogue, tension, and suspense. Great beginning.
Comment Written 10-Jun-2019
reply by the author on 10-Jun-2019
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Thanx so much for dropping by for the review and for your time, Dorothy -- both are much appreciated! ;) ;) Yvette
Comment from Bucketlist
Well, Ma'am is there anything you can't do expertly?!! I don't review chapters for anyone, but I can tell this would be the start of a 6 star book. You have literary talent in my view.
Hugs, Trisha
reply by the author on 10-Jun-2019
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Well, Ma'am is there anything you can't do expertly?!! I don't review chapters for anyone, but I can tell this would be the start of a 6 star book. You have literary talent in my view.
Hugs, Trisha
Comment Written 10-Jun-2019
reply by the author on 10-Jun-2019
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Oh, Trisha, you are too kind, Beautiful soul! And I'm certainly glad you reviewed this one - THANK YOU!!! You know me and my crazy fantasy wanderings!! :) :) And you're not gonna believe this, but when I first 'paid to enter' this contest, I was thinking I could use it as a way to sortof 'advertise' my one already in work... but, as I went to post late Friday night, I thought: "you know, they always say you're note supposed to 're-post' anything... hmmm." So, instead, I let my fingers fly on the next idea I've got swimming around in my blonde brain and here it is! Just as soon as I finish Renaissance of Enchantment for Maggie, this one's next....who knows? Now that Chapter One's on paper, I could take a 'brain break' once in while and write another chapter on it! :) ;) Thanx again for your review, ma'am, and for those wonderful stars -- be sure to take good care of you!! :) ;) Yvette
Comment from susand3022
Oh! This is going to be AWESOME!!!! Hurry up and get back to Maddie though... or we'll never, ever get anything done by September, then I'll be all hung up again! LOL Oh, My Grand Lady of the South... What you do to me!!! LOL
reply by the author on 10-Jun-2019
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Oh! This is going to be AWESOME!!!! Hurry up and get back to Maddie though... or we'll never, ever get anything done by September, then I'll be all hung up again! LOL Oh, My Grand Lady of the South... What you do to me!!! LOL
Comment Written 09-Jun-2019
reply by the author on 10-Jun-2019
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O Lady of the Northeast, you have started my day off right! And I'm certainly glad I got you hooked' (lol!) -- you know me and my crazy fantasy wanderings!! :) :) And you're not gonna believe this, but when I first 'paid to enter' this contest, I was thinking I could use it as a way to sortof 'advertise' my one already in work... but, as I went to post late Friday night, I thought: "you know, they always say you're note supposed to 're-post' anything... hmmm." So, instead, I let my fingers fly on the next idea I've got swimming around in my blonde brain and here it is (you'll note I haven't even named the characters yet!)! Just as soon as I finish Renaissance of Enchantment for Maggie, this one's next....who knows? Now that Chapter One's on paper, I could take a 'brain break' once in while and write another chapter on it! :) ;) Thanx again for your review, ma'am, and for those wonderful stars -- be sure to send me an email (see P-M) and let me know how graduation went with a pic of the two of you!! :) ;) Yvette
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Poem coming out soon!!! I have to get the pics of the two of us,,, Nana took those and I haven't received them yet! She promised to send them all! (still waiting... tap, tap, tap...) lol (I don't have your e-mail! send me a note and I'll have it! susand3022@gmail.com)
Comment from Mrs. KT
Hello Yvette!
You, my friend, are an incredibly talented writer! Is there any genre you have not explored?
I am hooked! And I am not certain that is a good thing, as I have loads of perennials to plant and weeds to pull! :)
Your well-crafted work flows well and engages the reader from the very beginning.
So enjoyable!
Kudos!
diane
reply by the author on 10-Jun-2019
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Hello Yvette!
You, my friend, are an incredibly talented writer! Is there any genre you have not explored?
I am hooked! And I am not certain that is a good thing, as I have loads of perennials to plant and weeds to pull! :)
Your well-crafted work flows well and engages the reader from the very beginning.
So enjoyable!
Kudos!
diane
Comment Written 09-Jun-2019
reply by the author on 10-Jun-2019
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Oh, Lady Diane, you have started my day off right! And you put a lump in my throat with your review - THANK YOU! :) And I'm certainly glad I got you hooked' (lol!) -- you know me and my crazy fantasy wanderings!! :) :) And you're not gonna believe this, but when I first 'paid to enter' this contest, I was thinking I could use it as a way to sortof 'advertise' my one already in work... but, as I went to post late Friday night, I thought: "you know, they always say you're note supposed to 're-post' anything... hmmm." So, instead, I let my fingers fly on the next idea I've got swimming around in my blonde brain and here it is (you'll note I haven't even named the characters yet!)! Just as soon as I finish Renaissance of Enchantment for Maggie, this one's next....who knows? Now that Chapter One's on paper, I could take a 'brain break' once in while and write another chapter on it! :) ;) Thanx again for your review, ma'am, and for those wonderful stars -- send me a pick of your gardens (sending you my email in a P-M)!! :) ;) Yvette
Comment from royowen
I like that you like the escape that comes from writing in another realm. Motivated by entering a fantasy world, I've always loved other worlds, with strange, magical creatures inhabiting them, I've read all the the very great science fiction and fantasy masters, I once had the best collection of these stories ever conceived, Tolkien, CS Lewis, Wyndham Asimov, Herbert and co, and yet my own personal writing genre is completely different, you ought to read a lady onsite called by the pen name of scongove, (Shana) she'll curl your buns. Well done Yvette, an excellent story, blessings Roy. ,
reply by the author on 09-Jun-2019
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I like that you like the escape that comes from writing in another realm. Motivated by entering a fantasy world, I've always loved other worlds, with strange, magical creatures inhabiting them, I've read all the the very great science fiction and fantasy masters, I once had the best collection of these stories ever conceived, Tolkien, CS Lewis, Wyndham Asimov, Herbert and co, and yet my own personal writing genre is completely different, you ought to read a lady onsite called by the pen name of scongove, (Shana) she'll curl your buns. Well done Yvette, an excellent story, blessings Roy. ,
Comment Written 09-Jun-2019
reply by the author on 09-Jun-2019
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Thanx so much for your wonderful comments, Roy -- always appreciated! ;) Yvette :)
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Most welcome
Comment from Sally Law
Romantic, magical and otherworldly, Miss Yvette. I liked this and so unlike most of your writing, but yet, full of the creative style I see in you. I liked this very much and look forward to the continuing contributions.
Always my best,
Sal xo
reply by the author on 10-Jun-2019
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Romantic, magical and otherworldly, Miss Yvette. I liked this and so unlike most of your writing, but yet, full of the creative style I see in you. I liked this very much and look forward to the continuing contributions.
Always my best,
Sal xo
Comment Written 09-Jun-2019
reply by the author on 10-Jun-2019
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Oh, I am so very glad you enjoyed this one, Lady Sal -- your words here mean a lot coming from you.... just a bit of the romantic in me coming out in this one! ;) :) Shhhhh... don't tell my husband that part of me exists - LOL! ;) ;) Take care! ;) ;) Yvette
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Youqr secret is safe with me... for now. He he he....
Comment from damommy
Well, don't stop now! I MUST know what happens next. I'm hooked! I felt a bit mesmerized by your writing, it drew me in so. This is a wonderful first chapter.
reply by the author on 10-Jun-2019
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Well, don't stop now! I MUST know what happens next. I'm hooked! I felt a bit mesmerized by your writing, it drew me in so. This is a wonderful first chapter.
Comment Written 09-Jun-2019
reply by the author on 10-Jun-2019
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Wow, Yvonne! So glad I've got you hooked already -- you know me and my crazy fantasy wanderings!! :) :) And you're not gonna believe this, but when I first 'paid to enter' the contest, I was thinking I could use it as a way to sortof 'advertise' my one already in work... but, as I went to post late Friday night, I thought: "you know, they always say you're note supposed to 're-post' anything... hmmm." So, instead, I let my fingers fly on the next idea I've got swimming around in my blonde brain and here it is (you'll note I haven't named them yet!)! Just as soon as I finish Renaissance of Enchantment for Maggie, this one's next....who knows? Now that Chapter One's on paper, I could take a 'brain break' once in while and write another chapter on it! :) ;) Thanx again for your review, ma'am, and for those wonderful stars -- you be sure to have a great week ahead!! :) ;) Yvette
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Inspiration comes at the oddest times and in the oddest way sometimes. 8-)
