Obsessive Tendencies
Viewing comments for Chapter 1 "Her Obsession"An Unlikely Journey Toward Reconstruction
38 total reviews
Comment from Roxanna Andrews
Okay, I'm hooked. Love the writing, all the descriptive words that make you curious as to who and what is going on here. I didn't see any errors and looking forward to reading the next.
reply by the author on 15-Nov-2020
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Okay, I'm hooked. Love the writing, all the descriptive words that make you curious as to who and what is going on here. I didn't see any errors and looking forward to reading the next.
Comment Written 13-Nov-2020
reply by the author on 15-Nov-2020
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Hooray!! ;) I'm so very glad you're hooked on Celeste and Gregor's story -- it is certainly paved wwith problems ahead... LOL!! ;) :) Thanx so much for jumping on board, my lady - take care out there! ;) Yvette
Comment from dmt1967
This is the start of a good story but... the start hook didn't do its job by drawing me in and I was very confused until the end. I think, with the start hook, it was too telling. Maybe show her attraction more and opt out some of the 'was' as this made it very repetitive. Thank you for sharing and stay safe.
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reply by the author on 11-Nov-2020
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This is the start of a good story but... the start hook didn't do its job by drawing me in and I was very confused until the end. I think, with the start hook, it was too telling. Maybe show her attraction more and opt out some of the 'was' as this made it very repetitive. Thank you for sharing and stay safe.
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Comment Written 11-Nov-2020
reply by the author on 11-Nov-2020
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Comment from Alchera
Wow! The enchantment of first sight love of two fantastic creatures belonging to two different worlds: natural (the Alpha wolf) and the imaginative ( the fairy or a member of Prospero's Ariel's clan). A future wonder world great successful book not only for adults for its intriguing unusual love story but above all for young people. Its perfect use of vocabulary, flowing simplicity of style and level reading will encapsulate them easily , once read the first chapter! Chapeau Yvette!
reply by the author on 20-Oct-2020
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Wow! The enchantment of first sight love of two fantastic creatures belonging to two different worlds: natural (the Alpha wolf) and the imaginative ( the fairy or a member of Prospero's Ariel's clan). A future wonder world great successful book not only for adults for its intriguing unusual love story but above all for young people. Its perfect use of vocabulary, flowing simplicity of style and level reading will encapsulate them easily , once read the first chapter! Chapeau Yvette!
Comment Written 17-Oct-2020
reply by the author on 20-Oct-2020
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Oh, Tony, i cannot tell you what an awesome review this is, sir - you have made my entire week over here!! ;) :) I am so very glad you enjoyed the first Chapter with the introduction of our fated mates and I do hope you continue to keep up with them! Thanx for the awesome smile this afternoon and you be sure to make the most of the cooling weather these days, my friend!! ;) Take care! ;) Yvette
Comment from robyn corum
Yvette,
Again, I don't know how I missed this one. Ugh! This tale is delightful - the descriptions and explanations and subtle injections of those things that make this story more than ... 'human'. I enjoyed the slow discovery.
A lot!
There were certain points that made me really smile - when all the critters abandoned her - such a small thing, but so realistic - and it's those kinds of tiny but important details that separate the best writing.
*smile* I'm moving on --
reply by the author on 23-Sep-2020
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Yvette,
Again, I don't know how I missed this one. Ugh! This tale is delightful - the descriptions and explanations and subtle injections of those things that make this story more than ... 'human'. I enjoyed the slow discovery.
A lot!
There were certain points that made me really smile - when all the critters abandoned her - such a small thing, but so realistic - and it's those kinds of tiny but important details that separate the best writing.
*smile* I'm moving on --
Comment Written 23-Sep-2020
reply by the author on 23-Sep-2020
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Hooray -- glad to have you on board!! And thank you so much for the wonderful compliment... I'm blushing! (but damn it feels good to be writing again!) Take care! ;) Yvette
Comment from Rosemary Everson1
You mentioned Maggie's Story? I have to read the chapters so I can catch up on that book. But this story is captivating. Love it even though I like fairies but not sure about wolves. They are very beautiful animals.
reply by the author on 29-Mar-2020
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You mentioned Maggie's Story? I have to read the chapters so I can catch up on that book. But this story is captivating. Love it even though I like fairies but not sure about wolves. They are very beautiful animals.
Comment Written 27-Mar-2020
reply by the author on 29-Mar-2020
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Oh, Maggie's story is another book --- this one is our Celeste and Gregor. Maggie's over there in Renaissance of Enchantment... that's a pretty cool fantasy as well.... always an open invitation to get yourself comfortable 'midst all this quarantine and lose yourself in other worlds!! ;) Thank you and take care of you! ;) Yvette
Comment from Fonda Little
My favorite part was, "Unlike them, we have to concentrate more on keeping our true nature concealed. It takes a full awareness of our actions at all times not to be 'so very light on our feet' and to keep just the right amount of magic wrapped around us to curve our ears and hide our wings", because the detail you put into it and how they camouflaged themselves! Very clever!
reply by the author on 26-Mar-2020
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My favorite part was, "Unlike them, we have to concentrate more on keeping our true nature concealed. It takes a full awareness of our actions at all times not to be 'so very light on our feet' and to keep just the right amount of magic wrapped around us to curve our ears and hide our wings", because the detail you put into it and how they camouflaged themselves! Very clever!
Comment Written 24-Mar-2020
reply by the author on 26-Mar-2020
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Hooray! you've already begun finding yourself in this fun little fantasy.... these two certainly have an interesting road ahead of them, but it's gonna be fun!! :) Thanx so much for throwing your hat in with me, Fonda - hang on!! ;) :) Yvette :)
Comment from Iza Deleanu
Cute and exciting little chapter. A fairy in love with a wolf? I like the descriptions you use in this chapter. They are so...soozing and mysterious. Thank you for sharing
reply by the author on 22-Mar-2020
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Cute and exciting little chapter. A fairy in love with a wolf? I like the descriptions you use in this chapter. They are so...soozing and mysterious. Thank you for sharing
Comment Written 20-Mar-2020
reply by the author on 22-Mar-2020
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Hooray!! So you're joining in on Celeste and Gregor, too -- the next installment in their saga should be out this week so be sure to 'catch up'!! ;) Thanx so much for all your support, Iza! ;) Yvette
Comment from Aaqib Naeem
Wow! Such a good start to a story! I love how you took time to set in the scenes and the story before going into interactions straightaway! I love reading about the thoughts of protagonists!
Also...dragon flies...you should probably stick the two words together because I confused them with massive dragons flying around for a second there! :-)
reply by the author on 26-Feb-2020
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Wow! Such a good start to a story! I love how you took time to set in the scenes and the story before going into interactions straightaway! I love reading about the thoughts of protagonists!
Also...dragon flies...you should probably stick the two words together because I confused them with massive dragons flying around for a second there! :-)
Comment Written 25-Feb-2020
reply by the author on 26-Feb-2020
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Hooray!! :) I am so very glad that you are hopping on board, Aaqib!! Thanx for the pointer on the dragonflies as well! ;) Take care and glad you're following! :) Yvette
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Your fantasy world is quite unique and I want more of it! :-)
Comment from ciliverde
wow, Yvonne! This is so magical, I am entranced by your story. At the beginnings there were glimmerings that this wasn't a story about humans, but I knew for sur the instant I saw this: "Unlike them, we have to concentrate more on keeping our true nature concealed."
This is so good, I am following for sure!!
Carol
reply by the author on 24-Feb-2020
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wow, Yvonne! This is so magical, I am entranced by your story. At the beginnings there were glimmerings that this wasn't a story about humans, but I knew for sur the instant I saw this: "Unlike them, we have to concentrate more on keeping our true nature concealed."
This is so good, I am following for sure!!
Carol
Comment Written 23-Feb-2020
reply by the author on 24-Feb-2020
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HOORAY!! Oh, Carol, I am so very glad you're hopping on board here, my lady -- and I'm even more thrilled that you're enjoying!! You know, these characters just appear in my mind and I'm spinning yarns about them before I can stop... but I love them all - lol!! And I try to make them as real for the reader as they are in my head... so welcome to my imagination - LOL!! ;) Thank you for those awesome stars - they will help with the 'star shine' around here this week since the sun's on hiatus til Friday - LOL!! :) Take care! :) Yvette
Comment from Raffaelina Lowcock
While you are obsessed, I am mesmerized. This is a mysterious tale of an obsession that has engulfed the protagonist in this story. Although I am reading this with rapt interest, I am not sure we are talking about one human being or two, or none. When he asks, "Do you all glow like this?" I am immediately alert to something alien. So I have to keep reading this enigmatic story.
reply by the author on 24-Feb-2020
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While you are obsessed, I am mesmerized. This is a mysterious tale of an obsession that has engulfed the protagonist in this story. Although I am reading this with rapt interest, I am not sure we are talking about one human being or two, or none. When he asks, "Do you all glow like this?" I am immediately alert to something alien. So I have to keep reading this enigmatic story.
Comment Written 23-Feb-2020
reply by the author on 24-Feb-2020
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Oh, Rafy, THANK YOU for those awesome stars, my lady -- and the fact that you are mesmerized has me grinning from ear to ear and then some: I am so very glad to hear that!! ;) You know, all of my crazy characters 'take up residence' until I can put them on paper and then they just help out along the way.... glad you could join us!! ;) Thanx so much, my lady, and enjoy getting caught up! Next month, we have to see what else Celeste is up to!! ;) Yvette
