Reaper
You cannot change what is to come6 total reviews
Comment from Jimmy2
It is a lovely poem. I think everyone is afraid of death but all fight for their lives and gets the success in life. Someday we all have to die but before that we have to enjoy our life
reply by the author on 10-Jun-2019
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It is a lovely poem. I think everyone is afraid of death but all fight for their lives and gets the success in life. Someday we all have to die but before that we have to enjoy our life
Comment Written 09-Jun-2019
reply by the author on 10-Jun-2019
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I am so glad you liked it. Thank you for your review.
Comment from Alcreator Litt Dear
Death is inevitable, he is to come, today or someday, no one can change it what is to come, you cannot defy his claim of death; well said, well done. Keep writing -- DR ALCREATOR
reply by the author on 10-Jun-2019
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Death is inevitable, he is to come, today or someday, no one can change it what is to come, you cannot defy his claim of death; well said, well done. Keep writing -- DR ALCREATOR
Comment Written 09-Jun-2019
reply by the author on 10-Jun-2019
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I am so glad you liked it. Thank you for your review.
Comment from IndianaIrish
This is a great poem, but I'm afraid you have the wrong syllable count in three lines. If you agree and fix these errors, I'd be happy to raise the rating. Best wishes in in the contest.
Smiles,
Indy :-)
Death
It pledges me...4 syllables and needs to be 3
Since my childhood...4 syllables and needs to be 5
Till this day it still remains
Afraid to sleep and to dream
My eyes stay open
Defeating
Death
Eyes
Stay open
Alert vigilant
Fighting to see the sunrise
A sunrise that holds the key
To keeping me alive...6 syllables and needs to be 7
They do it
Eyes
reply by the author on 10-Jun-2019
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This is a great poem, but I'm afraid you have the wrong syllable count in three lines. If you agree and fix these errors, I'd be happy to raise the rating. Best wishes in in the contest.
Smiles,
Indy :-)
Death
It pledges me...4 syllables and needs to be 3
Since my childhood...4 syllables and needs to be 5
Till this day it still remains
Afraid to sleep and to dream
My eyes stay open
Defeating
Death
Eyes
Stay open
Alert vigilant
Fighting to see the sunrise
A sunrise that holds the key
To keeping me alive...6 syllables and needs to be 7
They do it
Eyes
Comment Written 09-Jun-2019
reply by the author on 10-Jun-2019
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Thank you for your review. I will look into that
Comment from Y. M. Roger
Wow -- now here is an offering that certainly carries with it an aura of loneliness or desertion... one that leaves the reader feeling searching, wanting to find light and hope... Very well delivered as I'm sure that was your intent!! ;) ;) Thanx for sharing and best of luck at the polls! ;)
reply by the author on 10-Jun-2019
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Wow -- now here is an offering that certainly carries with it an aura of loneliness or desertion... one that leaves the reader feeling searching, wanting to find light and hope... Very well delivered as I'm sure that was your intent!! ;) ;) Thanx for sharing and best of luck at the polls! ;)
Comment Written 08-Jun-2019
reply by the author on 10-Jun-2019
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Thank you for your review I am so glad you liked it. It was indeed I pondered over that piece all day and even down to the last minute before I posted it.
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
Unfortunately we all walk the same path and the secret is to enjoy every waking moment before it is all over. There is much sadness in these words, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 10-Jun-2019
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Unfortunately we all walk the same path and the secret is to enjoy every waking moment before it is all over. There is much sadness in these words, love Dolly x
Comment Written 08-Jun-2019
reply by the author on 10-Jun-2019
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Thank you for your review I am so glad you liked it.
Comment from Willie P. Smith
Excellent rhyming poem, but very dismal. You must have been feeling kind of down while writing this. I usually only review strong rhyming poetry, but your picture caught my eye. This is very good but a little scary.
reply by the author on 10-Jun-2019
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Excellent rhyming poem, but very dismal. You must have been feeling kind of down while writing this. I usually only review strong rhyming poetry, but your picture caught my eye. This is very good but a little scary.
Comment Written 07-Jun-2019
reply by the author on 10-Jun-2019
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Well, I am glad you liked it. I am also glad the picture caught your eye. I always try to pick pictures that I have a feel for and that I believe somewhat works with the piece I am writing.
Thank you for your review.
