Anti-Umbrellas
A Triquatrain40 total reviews
Comment from Joan E.
Thank you for acquainting me with the Triquatrain form. I enjoyed your internal and end rhymes and use of "bumbershoot" that was also unfamiliar to me. I appreciated the "drops that angels kissed" description, but my sciatica doesn't like them! Smiles- Joan
reply by the author on 07-Jun-2019
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Thank you for acquainting me with the Triquatrain form. I enjoyed your internal and end rhymes and use of "bumbershoot" that was also unfamiliar to me. I appreciated the "drops that angels kissed" description, but my sciatica doesn't like them! Smiles- Joan
Comment Written 07-Jun-2019
reply by the author on 07-Jun-2019
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Oh, dear. I know what you mean. Thank you for a lovely review, and I'm glad you liked that last line. It was my favorite. 8-)
Comment from l.raven
Hi Yvonne, this brings back such wonderful memories...as a kid I lived in Florida 21 years...us six kids would run and play in the rain every chance we got...I used to love the feel of the rain on my face...I love your poem my sweet friend...and your picture...perfect...very well written...I have never heard of the Triquatrain form...but I love the way it reads...and thank you for your notes sweet girl...Love you...Linda xxoo
reply by the author on 06-Jun-2019
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Hi Yvonne, this brings back such wonderful memories...as a kid I lived in Florida 21 years...us six kids would run and play in the rain every chance we got...I used to love the feel of the rain on my face...I love your poem my sweet friend...and your picture...perfect...very well written...I have never heard of the Triquatrain form...but I love the way it reads...and thank you for your notes sweet girl...Love you...Linda xxoo
Comment Written 06-Jun-2019
reply by the author on 06-Jun-2019
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Awwww, thank you, Linda. I always appreciate your review. I still like to play in the rain, and I like racing sticks down the gutters. hahaha
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I love the feel of rain...always have...your so welcome Yvonne...always...I'll let you chase the sticks...LOL...love xxoo
Comment from duchessofdrumborg
"Anti-Umbrellas", is an extremely well-written and delightfully descriptive piece. This talented poet's work was a privilege to both read and review. I look forward to seeing your next post.
reply by the author on 06-Jun-2019
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"Anti-Umbrellas", is an extremely well-written and delightfully descriptive piece. This talented poet's work was a privilege to both read and review. I look forward to seeing your next post.
Comment Written 06-Jun-2019
reply by the author on 06-Jun-2019
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Thank you for this wonderful review. You always make me feel so good. 8-)
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damonny, if I do then I'm so very pleased. !(-_-)!
Comment from lyenochka
Loved this, Yvonne! Thank you for teaching me "bumbershoot." My husband knew the word and said it originated from the Pacific NW. I can't find anything that confirms that. But Seattle has a "bumbershoot concert" annually.
Loved the dancing feel of the poem with all those internal rhymes! And here, it rains so much that most people don't use bumbershoots.
reply by the author on 06-Jun-2019
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Loved this, Yvonne! Thank you for teaching me "bumbershoot." My husband knew the word and said it originated from the Pacific NW. I can't find anything that confirms that. But Seattle has a "bumbershoot concert" annually.
Loved the dancing feel of the poem with all those internal rhymes! And here, it rains so much that most people don't use bumbershoots.
Comment Written 06-Jun-2019
reply by the author on 06-Jun-2019
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I hate wrestling with the darn things. It's easier to run and take my chances. I don't mind getting wet.
Comment from Debbie Pope
What a charming poem! I wish that I had a six star rating to award this deserving post. I love your internal rhymes. Cozy/mosey and yield/shield are such exceptional rhymes. And, I adore your disdain of bumbershoots, hat, and boots. Your poem is alive with the love of getting wet. Sounds like fun to me, although I did get wet by the rain today and I was miserable. It's nice to think of it as fun though.
I totally enjoyed this whimsical piece. Thank you.
reply by the author on 06-Jun-2019
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What a charming poem! I wish that I had a six star rating to award this deserving post. I love your internal rhymes. Cozy/mosey and yield/shield are such exceptional rhymes. And, I adore your disdain of bumbershoots, hat, and boots. Your poem is alive with the love of getting wet. Sounds like fun to me, although I did get wet by the rain today and I was miserable. It's nice to think of it as fun though.
I totally enjoyed this whimsical piece. Thank you.
Comment Written 06-Jun-2019
reply by the author on 06-Jun-2019
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You have to be goofy to enjoy getting wet in the rain. hahaha. I hate wrestling with umbrellas and just as soon take my chances. Thank you for this wonderful review. Your comments are worth more to me than any six.
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I hate umbrellas, too. Never use them.
Comment from Janice Canerdy
This is a lovely, exuberant, appealing, and very skillfully-written poem. It practically sang itself to me! Your use of specific details is impressive.
I especially like the last line.
reply by the author on 06-Jun-2019
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This is a lovely, exuberant, appealing, and very skillfully-written poem. It practically sang itself to me! Your use of specific details is impressive.
I especially like the last line.
Comment Written 06-Jun-2019
reply by the author on 06-Jun-2019
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Thank you. I'm glad you enjoyed it. It was fun to write. I hate using umbrellas.
Comment from kahpot
Yes a beautiful read this poem and its form are excellent, flowing smoothly, and advising us to enjoy nature as God intended, very well written with wonderful artwork, very well done****kahpot
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reply by the author on 06-Jun-2019
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Yes a beautiful read this poem and its form are excellent, flowing smoothly, and advising us to enjoy nature as God intended, very well written with wonderful artwork, very well done****kahpot
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Comment Written 06-Jun-2019
reply by the author on 06-Jun-2019
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Thank you. I love being in the rain.
Comment from Phyllis Stewart
Ohhh, darrrn it! I used my last six earlier, and I really need one for this masterpiece. It's as close to a perfect poem as I've ever seen. The wording works beautifully, as do the well-chosen rhymes. This is an awesome piece. Don't know how else to say it, but it's a keeper, and I will bookcase it for future inspiration. :)
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reply by the author on 06-Jun-2019
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Ohhh, darrrn it! I used my last six earlier, and I really need one for this masterpiece. It's as close to a perfect poem as I've ever seen. The wording works beautifully, as do the well-chosen rhymes. This is an awesome piece. Don't know how else to say it, but it's a keeper, and I will bookcase it for future inspiration. :)
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Comment Written 06-Jun-2019
reply by the author on 06-Jun-2019
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What a wonderful compliment. Your lovely remarks are worth more than a six to me.
Comment from Jannypan (Jan)
Yvonne,
You did a super job with your Potlatch contribution. I enjoyed reading it. Your words/lines flow (meter) smoothly. the picture is a perfect pairing with your well-chosen words. You adhered nicely to the structure of the triquatrain. Your author notes are informative and serve as an added bonus for readers. The last verse is awesome--love the line about the rain as being the drops the angels kissed. Thanks for sharing and excellent example of this complex form. Jan
reply by the author on 06-Jun-2019
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Yvonne,
You did a super job with your Potlatch contribution. I enjoyed reading it. Your words/lines flow (meter) smoothly. the picture is a perfect pairing with your well-chosen words. You adhered nicely to the structure of the triquatrain. Your author notes are informative and serve as an added bonus for readers. The last verse is awesome--love the line about the rain as being the drops the angels kissed. Thanks for sharing and excellent example of this complex form. Jan
Comment Written 06-Jun-2019
reply by the author on 06-Jun-2019
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Thank you for this fantastic review. I'm so happy you like it. Thank you for the lovely remarks.
Comment from Thomas Bowling
Excellent. It reminds of the time Carol told that when she was young, she used to go outside and dance naked in the rain. I said that must have been cute. How old were you? She said seventeen.
reply by the author on 06-Jun-2019
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Excellent. It reminds of the time Carol told that when she was young, she used to go outside and dance naked in the rain. I said that must have been cute. How old were you? She said seventeen.
Comment Written 06-Jun-2019
reply by the author on 06-Jun-2019
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Hahaha. My kind of girl. Seventeen's probably are better age than mine was. I wrote a poem a while back about my rain dance. I said I did a naked rain dance, but my neighbors didn't understand. Visiting days are Wednesdays.
