Angel of Desire
A dream within a dream with life and death10 total reviews
Comment from LyndaS
..in your heavenly hell I die... spoken like a man who is a slave to his passion. This does not make you weak. It does, however, make you (almost painfully) vulnerable. I applaud your efforts here. Sounds like you speak from experience and you do not apologize for it. Refreshing. Truly. I read this like three times. This is a good write and I thank you for sharing this. It was awesome. Lynda
reply by the author on 30-Jun-2019
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..in your heavenly hell I die... spoken like a man who is a slave to his passion. This does not make you weak. It does, however, make you (almost painfully) vulnerable. I applaud your efforts here. Sounds like you speak from experience and you do not apologize for it. Refreshing. Truly. I read this like three times. This is a good write and I thank you for sharing this. It was awesome. Lynda
Comment Written 29-Jun-2019
reply by the author on 30-Jun-2019
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That you Linda. Your writing is fantastic. I'll be reading more from you. :)
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The pleasure is all mine.
Comment from Dean Kuch
I recently read in a scientific journal that more mean cheat on their significant others because of our genetics and heredity.
Men used to be the ones who hunted and foraged for food while women remained passive and took care of the children and dwelling they all lived in.
So, having said that, men are predatory in nature.
Men also seek danger more often that women. At least according to the study they do. And that would include seductive women who possess an element of danger.
A dangerous, fiery female can make you or break you.
They can't be tamed and it's asinine to even try. Best just to roll with the punches and see what happens.
Good rhyming all throughout your poem, especially for having not written poetry in a while.
Good luck to you.
~Dean
reply by the author on 09-Jun-2019
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I recently read in a scientific journal that more mean cheat on their significant others because of our genetics and heredity.
Men used to be the ones who hunted and foraged for food while women remained passive and took care of the children and dwelling they all lived in.
So, having said that, men are predatory in nature.
Men also seek danger more often that women. At least according to the study they do. And that would include seductive women who possess an element of danger.
A dangerous, fiery female can make you or break you.
They can't be tamed and it's asinine to even try. Best just to roll with the punches and see what happens.
Good rhyming all throughout your poem, especially for having not written poetry in a while.
Good luck to you.
~Dean
Comment Written 08-Jun-2019
reply by the author on 09-Jun-2019
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Thank you Dean. I'm glad you enjoyed it. Yet that journal you read needs to be upgraded. :) Women, since the Temperest movement have become more aggressive. More men are sexually abused by women, though many say nothing. Now-a-days women are in command, soon they will be in power. Lets hope it's for the better.
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As I stated, a fiery female cannot be tamed.
Not by man, not by God and not even by the Dark Prince himself.
You're more than welcome.
Comment from Raffaelina Lowcock
Desire! Who can control the attraction that sizzles so blatantly. It happens so suddenly at times we're taken by surprise. Yet other times it is a slow force of nature. However, you have nailed the way it works with your choice of words and very informative poem. Good Luck
reply by the author on 07-Jun-2019
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Desire! Who can control the attraction that sizzles so blatantly. It happens so suddenly at times we're taken by surprise. Yet other times it is a slow force of nature. However, you have nailed the way it works with your choice of words and very informative poem. Good Luck
Comment Written 07-Jun-2019
reply by the author on 07-Jun-2019
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Thank you, Raffaelina. I wanted to write a stimulating poem and I think I did. :) I'm glad you liked it.
Comment from Rachelle Allen
I had to go get an ice pack to put on my chair seat here, Mystery Writer! This is steamy perfection!! You definitely have a knack for the passionate write!! Good luck in the contest! xo
reply by the author on 07-Jun-2019
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I had to go get an ice pack to put on my chair seat here, Mystery Writer! This is steamy perfection!! You definitely have a knack for the passionate write!! Good luck in the contest! xo
Comment Written 07-Jun-2019
reply by the author on 07-Jun-2019
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You made my night, Rachelle. That was my intention. :) I'm glad you liked it.
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Mission accomplished, Mystery Writer!!!! xo
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
This sounds like a dream with a bitter sweet taste, on the one hand the lust is sweet and inviting and on the other hand their is hell to pay, a unique write, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 07-Jun-2019
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This sounds like a dream with a bitter sweet taste, on the one hand the lust is sweet and inviting and on the other hand their is hell to pay, a unique write, love Dolly x
Comment Written 07-Jun-2019
reply by the author on 07-Jun-2019
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Dolly love works in mystifying way. :) I'm glad you liked it.
Comment from Alcreator Litt Dear
Angel of Desire comes every night and dares you die and she does it after lifting and raising you on many terms and turns, maybe to continue dreaming forevermore; well said, well done. Write to inspire, change -- DR ALCREATOR
reply by the author on 07-Jun-2019
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Angel of Desire comes every night and dares you die and she does it after lifting and raising you on many terms and turns, maybe to continue dreaming forevermore; well said, well done. Write to inspire, change -- DR ALCREATOR
Comment Written 06-Jun-2019
reply by the author on 07-Jun-2019
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Thank you Al. The dream is an never-ending story. :) I'm glad you liked it.
Comment from LeannaP
Your smile spins my heart it seems .. So i only gove six stars if i think its worth it. I liked the irony in this poem.
You have a way with gripping your readers.
This was nicely written.
reply by the author on 07-Jun-2019
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Your smile spins my heart it seems .. So i only gove six stars if i think its worth it. I liked the irony in this poem.
You have a way with gripping your readers.
This was nicely written.
Comment Written 06-Jun-2019
reply by the author on 07-Jun-2019
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Thank you Leanna for the stars, but after the first, second, third, write it's time to let the stars put me to sleep. :) I'm glad you liked it.
Comment from Nicole Hawley
Kind of jealous of the power this woman holds, but you also make me question her authenticity. Fools rush in. Better make sure those are angel wings first, I doubt it. Nice rhyme and I like your versus and line breaks. The "obsession" is apparent with your choice of diction.
reply by the author on 06-Jun-2019
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Kind of jealous of the power this woman holds, but you also make me question her authenticity. Fools rush in. Better make sure those are angel wings first, I doubt it. Nice rhyme and I like your versus and line breaks. The "obsession" is apparent with your choice of diction.
Comment Written 06-Jun-2019
reply by the author on 06-Jun-2019
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Ahh, Nicole, when writing poetry one uses the imagination. The "obsession" could come from a picture in a comic book. :) Thank you for reviewing.
Comment from Michele Harber
I'm not sure whether to call this romantic or lascivious, but it's definitely a love poem. It burns with fire and desire, and your rhymes are very well chosen to heighten those feelings. I wish you luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 07-Jun-2019
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I'm not sure whether to call this romantic or lascivious, but it's definitely a love poem. It burns with fire and desire, and your rhymes are very well chosen to heighten those feelings. I wish you luck in the contest.
Comment Written 06-Jun-2019
reply by the author on 07-Jun-2019
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Thank you Michele. I wasn't sure myself I just wrote it. :) I'm glad you liked it.
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Comment from Sandra du Plessis
A very well-written sweet and innocent love poem about the dream a loved one appears in and it is a desire of the dreamer to be raised up by her angel and to dream for evermore.
reply by the author on 07-Jun-2019
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A very well-written sweet and innocent love poem about the dream a loved one appears in and it is a desire of the dreamer to be raised up by her angel and to dream for evermore.
Comment Written 06-Jun-2019
reply by the author on 07-Jun-2019
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Thank you Sandra. :) The dreamer dreams the dream and sleep in heaven. :) I'm glad you liked it.
