Just Another Friday Night
50-word story offering11 total reviews
Comment from Mrs. KT
Pretty certain I know all of these fine gents, Yvette!
Went to college with all of them. They would have made great fishermen with their stories of conquests. And now? "Grandkid're here!" Such pious souls they be... :)
Thanks for the smile!
diane
(Bit behind = too much fun in the gardens! But so far, no poison ivy!) :)
reply by the author on 07-Jun-2019
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Pretty certain I know all of these fine gents, Yvette!
Went to college with all of them. They would have made great fishermen with their stories of conquests. And now? "Grandkid're here!" Such pious souls they be... :)
Thanks for the smile!
diane
(Bit behind = too much fun in the gardens! But so far, no poison ivy!) :)
Comment Written 07-Jun-2019
reply by the author on 07-Jun-2019
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Thanx for the review, Lady Diane -- and I'm so glad to here that gardening is taking over your days WITHOUT the big P-I!! ;) ;) LOL! ;) You take care up there! :) Yvette
Comment from Richard J
Ohhh, yeah!
When good ole' friends gather ... I love it!
With a bit of attention to grammar, this touching little tale of brotherly jibing should catch the judges' eye just right.
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"Final Call!' Dan hollered through his small-town tavern.
The lifelong friends approached the bar, "Who and how many times?"
"Felicity," Dan smirked, knowingly, "Four!"
Hank winced, sighing, "Grandkids're here."
Everyone nodded their understanding. Definitely, final call - Hank had to go home.
"Next round's for you, bud!"
Laughter followed Hank out.
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Love the imagery and spirited camaraderie you've painted into this one.
I wish you very well in the contest! ~ Richard : )
reply by the author on 06-Jun-2019
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Ohhh, yeah!
When good ole' friends gather ... I love it!
With a bit of attention to grammar, this touching little tale of brotherly jibing should catch the judges' eye just right.
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"Final Call!' Dan hollered through his small-town tavern.
The lifelong friends approached the bar, "Who and how many times?"
"Felicity," Dan smirked, knowingly, "Four!"
Hank winced, sighing, "Grandkids're here."
Everyone nodded their understanding. Definitely, final call - Hank had to go home.
"Next round's for you, bud!"
Laughter followed Hank out.
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Love the imagery and spirited camaraderie you've painted into this one.
I wish you very well in the contest! ~ Richard : )
Comment Written 06-Jun-2019
reply by the author on 06-Jun-2019
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Thank you for your review.
Hey, Yvette! : )
You're sincerely welcome, and I thank you, as-well.
Comment from Dawn Munro
His wife called? She wanted him home because the grandchildren were visiting? I am 'thick' today, but I didn't get this one, although I am pretty sure it IS my 'fog'... (LOL) The story sounds just a little too familiar. *grin*
Good luck in the booth.
reply by the author on 06-Jun-2019
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His wife called? She wanted him home because the grandchildren were visiting? I am 'thick' today, but I didn't get this one, although I am pretty sure it IS my 'fog'... (LOL) The story sounds just a little too familiar. *grin*
Good luck in the booth.
Comment Written 06-Jun-2019
reply by the author on 06-Jun-2019
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Yeah... it's funny: some folks completely got it and others did not. :) :) So, don't sweat it.... they can't all be gems (Like yours!! lol!)!! ;) :) Take care, ma'am, and thanx for trying! :) ;)
Comment from Mia Twysted
Friends getting together to have a good time is always a good thing. They all have their inside jokes, but I fail to get this one. There is a message to this piece I am sure it just doesn't jump out to get me.
But then again maybe it just about Hank. As I read it again he is what does jump out to me in this piece. He had himself a good time or maybe too good of a time.
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reply by the author on 05-Jun-2019
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Friends getting together to have a good time is always a good thing. They all have their inside jokes, but I fail to get this one. There is a message to this piece I am sure it just doesn't jump out to get me.
But then again maybe it just about Hank. As I read it again he is what does jump out to me in this piece. He had himself a good time or maybe too good of a time.
This rating does not count towards story rating or author rank.
The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
Comment Written 05-Jun-2019
reply by the author on 05-Jun-2019
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thank you.
Comment from Alex Rosel
A flash fiction piece that sort of mystifies. I've read it a few times, and I still can't get it. I'm notoriously slow sometimes, though. So I'm willing to accept I'm at fault. :)
Good luck with the competition.
reply by the author on 05-Jun-2019
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A flash fiction piece that sort of mystifies. I've read it a few times, and I still can't get it. I'm notoriously slow sometimes, though. So I'm willing to accept I'm at fault. :)
Good luck with the competition.
Comment Written 05-Jun-2019
reply by the author on 05-Jun-2019
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Thank you.
Comment from tfawcus
There's a story inside a story here, within the in-joke. I'm not entirely sure that I get it but it seems as though these old timers are all on leashes of varying lengths.
reply by the author on 05-Jun-2019
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There's a story inside a story here, within the in-joke. I'm not entirely sure that I get it but it seems as though these old timers are all on leashes of varying lengths.
Comment Written 05-Jun-2019
reply by the author on 05-Jun-2019
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Thank you for your review.
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
A joyous write about friends enjoying a beer together, a lads night out and laughter with friends is an ideal subject to write about, much enjoyed, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 05-Jun-2019
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A joyous write about friends enjoying a beer together, a lads night out and laughter with friends is an ideal subject to write about, much enjoyed, love Dolly x
Comment Written 05-Jun-2019
reply by the author on 05-Jun-2019
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Thank you for visiting the tavern, Dolly! :-)
Comment from Sandra Montanino
That's a great picture and it tells a story all by itself. I assume it's one of your own. It adds to the story. Poor Felicity, after all the years and grandkids, the boys are still talking about her. Good luck in your contest.
reply by the author on 05-Jun-2019
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That's a great picture and it tells a story all by itself. I assume it's one of your own. It adds to the story. Poor Felicity, after all the years and grandkids, the boys are still talking about her. Good luck in your contest.
Comment Written 05-Jun-2019
reply by the author on 05-Jun-2019
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Thank you for visiting the tavern, Sandra! ;-)
Comment from Patty Palmer
After reviewing your 50 word entry to the contest, your story fit the criteria set down for this particular contest. There are 59 words exactly. I wish you good luck with the contest which I will not be voting for personal reasons
reply by the author on 04-Jun-2019
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After reviewing your 50 word entry to the contest, your story fit the criteria set down for this particular contest. There are 59 words exactly. I wish you good luck with the contest which I will not be voting for personal reasons
Comment Written 04-Jun-2019
reply by the author on 04-Jun-2019
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The contest is limited to 50 words, Patricia. Maybe you could look at it again in light of that fact? Thank you.
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Yes, I saw that it was only 50 words and I'll apologize for the
review if you think I was unfair. I didn't mean to anger you or hurt your feelings. I'm sorry. Patty
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No feelings hurt or else... just not sure I understand the basis for the below average rating, but thank you for your time.
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Listen, maybe you could explain to me what I should be looking for. Like I said, I'm new at this, Usually if I'm not sure how to take something I just pass it up.
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The rating system is as follows (lifted directly from FanStory's Q & A section where this is addressed):
Six Stars (Exceptional: Simply Outstanding)
Five Stars (Excellent: Enjoyable and no revisions needed)
Four Stars (Good: Adjustments needed)
Three Stars (Below average)
Two Stars (Below Average: Needs lots of work)
One Star (Poor: Major revision required)
5 stars is a well-written piece that meets the prompt requirements and needs no corrections/alterations. Note that 4 stars is actually a good write that meets the requirements but needs some punctuation or grammatical errors. Your review of 3 stars without suggestions/corrections says that you view the write so inferior to your own abilities or that you've read in other entries that you cannot even begin to suggest what to fix .... if that is truly your opinion, I respect that. However, if it is not, I would ask that you, perhaps, take a second look at your rating of this and other pieces. Thank you.
Comment from Robert Zimmerman
Nice piece. Lots of different people in the dialogue and the conversation was not contrived and a real story was told in the 50 word limit. People that have never tried t tell a story in 50 words don't know how hard it is.
-RZ-
reply by the author on 04-Jun-2019
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Nice piece. Lots of different people in the dialogue and the conversation was not contrived and a real story was told in the 50 word limit. People that have never tried t tell a story in 50 words don't know how hard it is.
-RZ-
Comment Written 04-Jun-2019
reply by the author on 04-Jun-2019
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Thank you so much for stopping into the tavern this evening, RZ! ;-)
