Let Me Rephrase That
50 Word Story Contest29 total reviews
Comment from William Ross
H, ha, ha well you better get used to it I love that ending. well done on the contest really great humorous piece. Bid you good luck and too have a wonderful day.
reply by the author on 06-Jun-2019
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H, ha, ha well you better get used to it I love that ending. well done on the contest really great humorous piece. Bid you good luck and too have a wonderful day.
Comment Written 06-Jun-2019
reply by the author on 06-Jun-2019
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Thank you, William!
Comment from Gail Denham
Good job for this contest. Hmmm...you mean the husband doesn't read his wife's writing? Neither does mine - hasn't all these 40 plus years. Unless I plunk it in front of him - he's very supportive but what I write really doesn't interest him. Reckon we must get used to it.
reply by the author on 06-Jun-2019
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Good job for this contest. Hmmm...you mean the husband doesn't read his wife's writing? Neither does mine - hasn't all these 40 plus years. Unless I plunk it in front of him - he's very supportive but what I write really doesn't interest him. Reckon we must get used to it.
Comment Written 06-Jun-2019
reply by the author on 06-Jun-2019
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My wife checks both boxes, so I'm fortunate that this was not autobiographical. Thanks, Gail!
Comment from Richard J
Ha-hahhh!
Sounds like the reaction from some of the site's review recipients.
Ah, but that's the way of us ultra-sensitive poetic types, eh?
Imaginative piece, perfect, picture, title (albeit, too late), and a great display of spot-on grammar and expression.
Hope the judges like it as much as I do!
Thanks a basketful for sharing this VERY cute piece (they'll be over it at first kiss ... LOL! ~ Richard : )
reply by the author on 06-Jun-2019
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Ha-hahhh!
Sounds like the reaction from some of the site's review recipients.
Ah, but that's the way of us ultra-sensitive poetic types, eh?
Imaginative piece, perfect, picture, title (albeit, too late), and a great display of spot-on grammar and expression.
Hope the judges like it as much as I do!
Thanks a basketful for sharing this VERY cute piece (they'll be over it at first kiss ... LOL! ~ Richard : )
Comment Written 06-Jun-2019
reply by the author on 06-Jun-2019
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Exactly, Richard. Perhaps her poem was technically solid but left him cold. In that case, it's incumbent upon both of them to chose better words next time;^) Thanks for the kind review!
Comment from Patty Palmer
It's disheartening when you've labored over something and you are totally proud as punch over it then show it to the most important person in your life and they don't get it at all1
reply by the author on 06-Jun-2019
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It's disheartening when you've labored over something and you are totally proud as punch over it then show it to the most important person in your life and they don't get it at all1
Comment Written 05-Jun-2019
reply by the author on 06-Jun-2019
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Thanks, Patricia, I agree.
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you're welcome!
Comment from Mia Twysted
Funny. Would it be better if he would have lied? This is the question I find myself asking. Either way, though, the poor man is done for.
This piece felt like a flight of fancy. There was not much emotion or connection. However, it did leave me wondering what her poem was about.
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reply by the author on 06-Jun-2019
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Funny. Would it be better if he would have lied? This is the question I find myself asking. Either way, though, the poor man is done for.
This piece felt like a flight of fancy. There was not much emotion or connection. However, it did leave me wondering what her poem was about.
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The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
Comment Written 05-Jun-2019
reply by the author on 06-Jun-2019
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True, lying does not serve a writer well, although things can be softened bit, sprinkled with a bit of constructive criticism and encouragement. I think the fact that he reacted that way to "a poem about us" is all you need to know about the poem and her disappointment;^) Fanciful by design, so thanks, Mia!
Comment from davisr (Rhonda)
Oh my gosh that was cute. Yes, men (usually) have a way of saying things they would be better off keeping their mouths shut about. Nothing but trouble on that.
Loved it, and good luck in the contest,
Rhonda
reply by the author on 06-Jun-2019
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Oh my gosh that was cute. Yes, men (usually) have a way of saying things they would be better off keeping their mouths shut about. Nothing but trouble on that.
Loved it, and good luck in the contest,
Rhonda
Comment Written 05-Jun-2019
reply by the author on 06-Jun-2019
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Thanks, Rhonda! (despite the men part;^)
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Lol, my husband is always digging himself into a hole. He usually gives up and says he's going to keep his mouth shut.
Comment from Alex Rosel
Ha, ha. A flash fiction piece that springs the joke on the last line. Most flash fiction pieces depend on a killer last line. A good photo to accompany it as well :)
Good luck with the competition.
reply by the author on 05-Jun-2019
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Ha, ha. A flash fiction piece that springs the joke on the last line. Most flash fiction pieces depend on a killer last line. A good photo to accompany it as well :)
Good luck with the competition.
Comment Written 05-Jun-2019
reply by the author on 05-Jun-2019
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Thanks, Alex!
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Thanks, Alex!
Comment from Jeffrey L. Michaux
This probably happens more times than not I'm sure. I think that he didn't think his response through. He should have come up with something better than that. He should have given her some feedback about some parts that he liked and perhaps in a gentle and constructive way, how she could make it a bit better. The lad is destined to reside in the doghouse I fear. I like the message of this and enjoyed reading this. Great job and well done!
reply by the author on 05-Jun-2019
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This probably happens more times than not I'm sure. I think that he didn't think his response through. He should have come up with something better than that. He should have given her some feedback about some parts that he liked and perhaps in a gentle and constructive way, how she could make it a bit better. The lad is destined to reside in the doghouse I fear. I like the message of this and enjoyed reading this. Great job and well done!
Comment Written 05-Jun-2019
reply by the author on 05-Jun-2019
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Thank you, Jeffrey!
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Thank you, Jeffrey!
Comment from Janice Canerdy
You have risen to the challenge of telling a wee story--in 50 words. For me, 75 and 100 are challenging enough. Yes, we who thrive on poetry and those who don't may find ourselves at odds sometimes!
reply by the author on 05-Jun-2019
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You have risen to the challenge of telling a wee story--in 50 words. For me, 75 and 100 are challenging enough. Yes, we who thrive on poetry and those who don't may find ourselves at odds sometimes!
Comment Written 04-Jun-2019
reply by the author on 05-Jun-2019
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Thanks, Janice.
Comment from Pam (respa)
-A good image for your story.
-Your notes are appreciated.
-Jules is very proud of her
poem and figures that Steve
will like it, too.
-Obviously, he just didn't get it.
-Great ending line, too!
-I don't know if Jules will
write a "scathing re-write."
-Maybe she will show him
the couch or the door, write
poetry and novels, and
win the Pulitzer Prize!
-At the very least,
you can win this contest!
reply by the author on 05-Jun-2019
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-A good image for your story.
-Your notes are appreciated.
-Jules is very proud of her
poem and figures that Steve
will like it, too.
-Obviously, he just didn't get it.
-Great ending line, too!
-I don't know if Jules will
write a "scathing re-write."
-Maybe she will show him
the couch or the door, write
poetry and novels, and
win the Pulitzer Prize!
-At the very least,
you can win this contest!
Comment Written 04-Jun-2019
reply by the author on 05-Jun-2019
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Yes, Pam, a Pulitzer would be a powerful "how do you like them apples" moment. Thanks!
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You are very welcome. It would be a powerful moment, for sure!
