Boy at the Baggage Carousel
A carousel contest entry9 total reviews
Comment from Darlene Franklin
I like the different take on carousel, and you describe the frustrations of waiting for your luggage--and trying to get at it - so perfectly. Well done.
reply by the author on 19-Jun-2019
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I like the different take on carousel, and you describe the frustrations of waiting for your luggage--and trying to get at it - so perfectly. Well done.
Comment Written 18-Jun-2019
reply by the author on 19-Jun-2019
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I figured that everyone might write about flying horses and merry-go-rounds so I did not want to be predictable. Thanks for your nice review.
Comment from moongirlwriter
We've all been there. . . it even prompted me to design and develop a tag of my own. They are cute, 5 in all and actually for pre-school children but they work on my luggage at the carsousel. Good luck with your rendition of the carousel. :)
reply by the author on 19-Jun-2019
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We've all been there. . . it even prompted me to design and develop a tag of my own. They are cute, 5 in all and actually for pre-school children but they work on my luggage at the carsousel. Good luck with your rendition of the carousel. :)
Comment Written 17-Jun-2019
reply by the author on 19-Jun-2019
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That is such a sensible idea to have identifiable tags. My bag is black and I hardly ever recognise it when it passes me the first time.
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Thanks, wish I could download a glimpse for you. I think you'd enjoy them. :)
Comment from RodG
I really like the TOPIC chosen for your entry--a baggage carousel. I can imagine baggage claim would be hellish at an airport like Heathrow. Having a child as your Speaker was also novel as we can easily imagine her many attempts to retrieve her bag. A fun read that should appeal to all ages. Rod
reply by the author on 29-May-2019
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I really like the TOPIC chosen for your entry--a baggage carousel. I can imagine baggage claim would be hellish at an airport like Heathrow. Having a child as your Speaker was also novel as we can easily imagine her many attempts to retrieve her bag. A fun read that should appeal to all ages. Rod
Comment Written 29-May-2019
reply by the author on 29-May-2019
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The topic for the contest just said 'write about a carousel' so I think most will write about the merry-go-round kind of carousel. Too predictable, so I went for the other definition of a carousel.
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I think you were wise to choose a different kind. Rod
Comment from Rachelle Allen
Very clever variation on the theme! I never would have thought of this type of carousel (mostly because I don't go to airports anymore...) but this was fun...and even a bit dizzying with the repetition of the "round and round." I bet this will do well in the contest!! Good luck to you. xo
reply by the author on 29-May-2019
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Very clever variation on the theme! I never would have thought of this type of carousel (mostly because I don't go to airports anymore...) but this was fun...and even a bit dizzying with the repetition of the "round and round." I bet this will do well in the contest!! Good luck to you. xo
Comment Written 29-May-2019
reply by the author on 29-May-2019
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I thought that everyone else in the contest would think about merry-go-rounds so I, as per usual, wanted to be different.
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That makes you smart and savvy!
Comment from Earl Corp
What a very odd prompt for a poem, but you did very well. Your poem rhymed, made sense, and is entertaining. The only editing thing I saw was till should be spelled til. Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 29-May-2019
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What a very odd prompt for a poem, but you did very well. Your poem rhymed, made sense, and is entertaining. The only editing thing I saw was till should be spelled til. Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 29-May-2019
reply by the author on 29-May-2019
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Thanks for the comment about 'til'... I know it is an abbreviation of 'until' so I guess my finger did a double hit on the key.
Comment from Debra White
Hello :)
This is a unique take on the writing prompt. I would never have thought of a baggage carousel!
I've been in that frustrating situation that you describe so well, a few times!
Great punch line - that 'you' are not to blame THIS TIME for something going wrong!
Good luck in the voting booth.
Best wishes, Debra :)
reply by the author on 29-May-2019
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Hello :)
This is a unique take on the writing prompt. I would never have thought of a baggage carousel!
I've been in that frustrating situation that you describe so well, a few times!
Great punch line - that 'you' are not to blame THIS TIME for something going wrong!
Good luck in the voting booth.
Best wishes, Debra :)
Comment Written 29-May-2019
reply by the author on 29-May-2019
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I wanted to have a point of difference as I thought most folks would write about a merry-go-round.
I hate airports; finger crossed for getting baggage ok.
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:)
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
This is a unique write and this is the part of travel I hate the most, I can never retrieve my bag successfully and this is why I travel light these days! A fun write, much enjoyed, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 29-May-2019
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This is a unique write and this is the part of travel I hate the most, I can never retrieve my bag successfully and this is why I travel light these days! A fun write, much enjoyed, love Dolly x
Comment Written 29-May-2019
reply by the author on 29-May-2019
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It would be wonderful if we could have a personal baggage handler and not have to even think about it!
Comment from Alcreator Litt Dear
The story of the boy at a baggage carousel merry-go-round is a fun story how the boy gets fun, and there are old, bad, odd and sad bags; dad's bag was broken, badly wrecked and lost, but you were not to blame; well said, well done. Write to inspire, change -- DR ALCREATOR
reply by the author on 29-May-2019
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The story of the boy at a baggage carousel merry-go-round is a fun story how the boy gets fun, and there are old, bad, odd and sad bags; dad's bag was broken, badly wrecked and lost, but you were not to blame; well said, well done. Write to inspire, change -- DR ALCREATOR
Comment Written 29-May-2019
reply by the author on 29-May-2019
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It seems to be a matter of huge luck if baggage arrives safely at destination. Thanks for you review.
Comment from Patty Palmer
.......Bags! Around that crazy circle. I'm out of my element running stupidly after my bag. Usually, by the time I get there, it belongs to somebody else. I like how you portrayed it in your poem
reply by the author on 29-May-2019
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.......Bags! Around that crazy circle. I'm out of my element running stupidly after my bag. Usually, by the time I get there, it belongs to somebody else. I like how you portrayed it in your poem
Comment Written 29-May-2019
reply by the author on 29-May-2019
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I hate airports, especially waiting and hoping and praying that the bag turns up unscathed.
Thanks for your review Patricia.
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you're welcome!
