A Chat With Grandma
Bill talks to his grandmother.30 total reviews
Comment from Chelsea Caffey
I love this glimpse into a powerful life moment between Bill and his grandmother. It gives us a sense of intimacy between the family members. As a reader, nothing is more enjoyable than a moment of connection- even in 75 words or less. Well done. Thank you for sharing.
reply by the author on 15-Jun-2019
  |
I love this glimpse into a powerful life moment between Bill and his grandmother. It gives us a sense of intimacy between the family members. As a reader, nothing is more enjoyable than a moment of connection- even in 75 words or less. Well done. Thank you for sharing.
Comment Written 14-Jun-2019
reply by the author on 15-Jun-2019
-
Thank you! I'm glad you liked it!
Comment from BeasPeas
Nice. Grandmas are the best. I'm one myself and I hope my grandkids think so, too. Your little story is reminiscent of those special moments to share. Marilyn
reply by the author on 07-Jun-2019
|
Nice. Grandmas are the best. I'm one myself and I hope my grandkids think so, too. Your little story is reminiscent of those special moments to share. Marilyn
Comment Written 07-Jun-2019
reply by the author on 07-Jun-2019
-
Thank you so much, Marilyn! I'm glad you enjoyed my story!
Comment from Holly Buss
I feel like this story is a little flat. It's not descriptive. I would like it better if it wasn't so straightforward, though it might be hard in 75 words. I like how the grandmother tells stories, and I think that it would be better to focus on that with less of the buildup. Have a blessed day!
reply by the author on 07-Jun-2019
 |
I feel like this story is a little flat. It's not descriptive. I would like it better if it wasn't so straightforward, though it might be hard in 75 words. I like how the grandmother tells stories, and I think that it would be better to focus on that with less of the buildup. Have a blessed day!
Comment Written 07-Jun-2019
reply by the author on 07-Jun-2019
-
Thank you!
Comment from Lance S. Loria
My grandmother. Was a charmer. Old world, but always a positive word. A great cook including desserts. Good job with only 50 words. No edits or adjustments necessary.
reply by the author on 06-Jun-2019
|
My grandmother. Was a charmer. Old world, but always a positive word. A great cook including desserts. Good job with only 50 words. No edits or adjustments necessary.
Comment Written 06-Jun-2019
reply by the author on 06-Jun-2019
-
Thank you! I'm glad you enjoyed it!
Comment from Sandra Montanino
Even better than telling your children and grandchildren the stories of your life is having them ask you to tell them. Then you know for certain they are listening. You made a very good point. Good luck in your contest!!
reply by the author on 06-Jun-2019
|
Even better than telling your children and grandchildren the stories of your life is having them ask you to tell them. Then you know for certain they are listening. You made a very good point. Good luck in your contest!!
Comment Written 06-Jun-2019
reply by the author on 06-Jun-2019
-
Thank you! I'm glad you liked it!
Comment from Sarah B Tutun
I love this topic, I love your choice of words. very very very well done. The style that you used was magnificent, hats of ton a gret writer with great work.
reply by the author on 06-Jun-2019
|
I love this topic, I love your choice of words. very very very well done. The style that you used was magnificent, hats of ton a gret writer with great work.
Comment Written 06-Jun-2019
reply by the author on 06-Jun-2019
-
Thank you so much! I'm glad you enjoyed it! Thanks for the compliment! Much appreciated!
Comment from kahpot
Yes, Grandmas are the best, I like the way you have made it clear that we must have a sense of humor in and during our life, and I bet her stories are interesting, very well done****kahpot
reply by the author on 04-Jun-2019
|
Yes, Grandmas are the best, I like the way you have made it clear that we must have a sense of humor in and during our life, and I bet her stories are interesting, very well done****kahpot
Comment Written 04-Jun-2019
reply by the author on 04-Jun-2019
-
Thank you! I'm glad you liked it!
Comment from BlueTiger
Good job on this piece, I like the theme you chose for this contest. One suggestion would be the punctuation here:
He believes her; what she is saying is to have a sense of humor.
A semicolon might be better than a comma for that sentence. Otherwise good job, and best of luck on the contest
reply by the author on 04-Jun-2019
|
Good job on this piece, I like the theme you chose for this contest. One suggestion would be the punctuation here:
He believes her; what she is saying is to have a sense of humor.
A semicolon might be better than a comma for that sentence. Otherwise good job, and best of luck on the contest
Comment Written 04-Jun-2019
reply by the author on 04-Jun-2019
-
Thank you! I will fix the mistake. I'm glad you liked it!
Comment from Bill Pinder
Thanks for sharing this story in a flash fiction form. I'm guessing you had a good grandmother who inspired this writing. I'm guessing she was generous with the sweets. Have a great day!
Bill
reply by the author on 04-Jun-2019
|
Thanks for sharing this story in a flash fiction form. I'm guessing you had a good grandmother who inspired this writing. I'm guessing she was generous with the sweets. Have a great day!
Bill
Comment Written 04-Jun-2019
reply by the author on 04-Jun-2019
-
Thank you! I am glad you enjoyed it!
Comment from Robert Zimmerman
I became a little emotional when I saw the title. I was reared by my grandmother and we had those talks all the time. I received orders for Vietnam and was home preparing to leave and we were having a talk at the kitchen table. It was our last talk.
Thank you for that story.
reply by the author on 04-Jun-2019
|
I became a little emotional when I saw the title. I was reared by my grandmother and we had those talks all the time. I received orders for Vietnam and was home preparing to leave and we were having a talk at the kitchen table. It was our last talk.
Thank you for that story.
Comment Written 04-Jun-2019
reply by the author on 04-Jun-2019
-
You're welcome,my friend! I am glad you enjoyed my story!
