Seaside Reverie
Trinet Poetry24 total reviews
Comment from Roxanna Andrews
I love this picture, such cuties and I love their castle. =} I loved the beach as a kid, we would vacation close enough to walk and I did all by myself at 9 &10! I can't believe I did that, you would never let your kids do that today. This is another great poem about seaside activities.
If you are a beach person, there is nothing like it. I lived in Huntington Bch in CA for 25yrs and moving is the hardest thing, beside sitting at my sis's death bed that I have ever had to do. My sis died young of cancer. Think of her everyday. Well done as always my dear. Rox
reply by the author on 23-May-2019
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I love this picture, such cuties and I love their castle. =} I loved the beach as a kid, we would vacation close enough to walk and I did all by myself at 9 &10! I can't believe I did that, you would never let your kids do that today. This is another great poem about seaside activities.
If you are a beach person, there is nothing like it. I lived in Huntington Bch in CA for 25yrs and moving is the hardest thing, beside sitting at my sis's death bed that I have ever had to do. My sis died young of cancer. Think of her everyday. Well done as always my dear. Rox
Comment Written 23-May-2019
reply by the author on 23-May-2019
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Thank you very much, Roxanna. I do love going to the beach and just sitting there listening to the waves. It soothes me. I really appreciate your comments.
Melissa
Comment from June Sargent
Sounds like you really enjoyed your days at the beach! There is so much to enjoy - from the sunshine, sand castles and salty breezes. And at the end of the day - seafood calls. That's the best part! Thanks for sharing your moments on the seashore.
reply by the author on 23-May-2019
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Sounds like you really enjoyed your days at the beach! There is so much to enjoy - from the sunshine, sand castles and salty breezes. And at the end of the day - seafood calls. That's the best part! Thanks for sharing your moments on the seashore.
Comment Written 22-May-2019
reply by the author on 23-May-2019
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Thanks, June!!!
Melissa
Comment from poetwatch
Virginia Beach must be beautiful this time of year, Melissa. I'm glad you had fun and really enjoyed yourself by soaking up the sun. After being coop-up like chickens in the henhouse cause of the weather everyone wants to go to the beach. Thank you for sharing.
reply by the author on 23-May-2019
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Virginia Beach must be beautiful this time of year, Melissa. I'm glad you had fun and really enjoyed yourself by soaking up the sun. After being coop-up like chickens in the henhouse cause of the weather everyone wants to go to the beach. Thank you for sharing.
Comment Written 22-May-2019
reply by the author on 23-May-2019
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Hello! Thanks so much for your great review!!!
We really had a good time on our getaway last week... just had to share.
Melissa
Comment from kahpot
Excellent, ( children wiggle, teenage giggle) now that must stir memories for all, what a wonderful read and poem, it sounds like you had a great time, very well written****kahpot
reply by the author on 22-May-2019
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Excellent, ( children wiggle, teenage giggle) now that must stir memories for all, what a wonderful read and poem, it sounds like you had a great time, very well written****kahpot
Comment Written 22-May-2019
reply by the author on 22-May-2019
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Thanks so much, Kahpot. I am delighted that you liked this one.
Melissa
Comment from LIJ Red
I assume the stanzas are true to form for the style, I don't know and I am too lazy to look it up...looks right, reads easy and brings the atmosphere to the reader...excellent post
reply by the author on 22-May-2019
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I assume the stanzas are true to form for the style, I don't know and I am too lazy to look it up...looks right, reads easy and brings the atmosphere to the reader...excellent post
Comment Written 22-May-2019
reply by the author on 22-May-2019
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Thanks so I much, Red.... I am glad you enjoyed it.
Melissa
Comment from Bleeshor
Well first, I just love the refrain, seaside reverie. When I say it, I can smell the salt water, feel the slight breeze that brings the grit into every pore and see every word in this we'll constructed poem
reply by the author on 22-May-2019
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Well first, I just love the refrain, seaside reverie. When I say it, I can smell the salt water, feel the slight breeze that brings the grit into every pore and see every word in this we'll constructed poem
Comment Written 22-May-2019
reply by the author on 22-May-2019
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Thanks so much for the great review. I am glad you like it!!
Melissa
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Comment from RodG
This Trinet gives us a series of snapshots of a day at the beach. I like how you appeal to almost all our senses. I find that last stanza especially appealing as it whets my appetite for seafood. Rod
reply by the author on 22-May-2019
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This Trinet gives us a series of snapshots of a day at the beach. I like how you appeal to almost all our senses. I find that last stanza especially appealing as it whets my appetite for seafood. Rod
Comment Written 22-May-2019
reply by the author on 22-May-2019
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Thank you, Rod.. we had a blast last week. I hope you get a bit of seafood soon to whet that appetite. LOL
Melissa
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You are very welcome. Rod
Comment from lyenochka
How fun! You bring out all the ways to enjoy the beach and then have seafood, too! I like the peppy beat and the snippets of the mostly four-syllable descriptions.
I was so used to syllable counts that I first saw your notes as 2266222 syllables but I see now it is WORD counts. Thanks for sharing your vacation memories!
reply by the author on 22-May-2019
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How fun! You bring out all the ways to enjoy the beach and then have seafood, too! I like the peppy beat and the snippets of the mostly four-syllable descriptions.
I was so used to syllable counts that I first saw your notes as 2266222 syllables but I see now it is WORD counts. Thanks for sharing your vacation memories!
Comment Written 22-May-2019
reply by the author on 22-May-2019
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Hey Helen. I could not resist posting another beach poem... probably my last for a while, but we had a blast last week and I wanted to share. Thanks for the fun review.
Melissa
Comment from Pantygynt
Word count format is very hit and miss because words vary in syllable number so much. This leads to a wide variety of rhythms that can result in a lack of cohesion within the poem as a whole. I get the feel that mere adherence to the word count is not enough. The two word lines work well here probabably because, apart from the refrain line of five syllables, all the others consist of two syllable words.
I believe that if you chose your six word lines to have the same number of syllables each time the result would be more rhythmically pleasing overall.
reply by the author on 22-May-2019
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Word count format is very hit and miss because words vary in syllable number so much. This leads to a wide variety of rhythms that can result in a lack of cohesion within the poem as a whole. I get the feel that mere adherence to the word count is not enough. The two word lines work well here probabably because, apart from the refrain line of five syllables, all the others consist of two syllable words.
I believe that if you chose your six word lines to have the same number of syllables each time the result would be more rhythmically pleasing overall.
Comment Written 22-May-2019
reply by the author on 22-May-2019
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I think I see... so instead of focusing on using the most eloquent words (which was my goal in the longer lines), I should focus on the rhythm by choosing the same number of syllables. I intentionally chose a rhyme scheme for the short lines, except for the refrain, but did not use that same criteria for the two long lines. I will try a Trinet again very soon and put your theory to work.
Thanks so much, Jim.
Melissa
Comment from Teri7
Melissa, This is a very well written poem about a very good time you had at the beach. You used great descriptive words and perfect art work. Thanks for sharing. Blessings, Teri
reply by the author on 22-May-2019
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Melissa, This is a very well written poem about a very good time you had at the beach. You used great descriptive words and perfect art work. Thanks for sharing. Blessings, Teri
Comment Written 22-May-2019
reply by the author on 22-May-2019
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Thanks so much, Teri. I am delighted you like this one. We really had a lot of fun last week.
Melissa
