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2 total reviews
Comment from Sandra Montanino
I think you've written a powerful story here and you delve into the emotions we all face. You have an interesting story here with interesting characters. I also see you are an accomplished novelist and hold the #73 spot. Great job!
reply by the author on 30-May-2019
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I think you've written a powerful story here and you delve into the emotions we all face. You have an interesting story here with interesting characters. I also see you are an accomplished novelist and hold the #73 spot. Great job!
Comment Written 26-May-2019
reply by the author on 30-May-2019
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Hello Sandra: I am grateful for your review. This is my third novel. "Wheel of Samsara-A Complete Circle" is published by Lulu Publishers and is available on their store on my webpage(arunkpotdar.com). "Room No. 420" is coming out this fall. I write for joy of writing and words come together; a divine blessings I feel. I appreciate your comments very much. All my work is available on my profile here. I am also a poet and have an anthology published on fanstory.com on my portfolio. titles, "Random reflections." Best regards and wishes.
Arun
Comment from Janilou
An interesting chapter. I wasn't sure what was going on because it's well advanced into the storyline, but it was easy enough to read.
"Why did he decide to go immediately mom? Isn't he really very sick to take care of himself? There is no one with him when everyone goes to work."
Was this person referring to the other person as Mom?
If so, it should be written:
"Why did he decide to go immediately, Mom? Isn't he really very sick to take care of himself? There is no one with him when everyone goes to work."
All the best,
Jan
reply by the author on 30-May-2019
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An interesting chapter. I wasn't sure what was going on because it's well advanced into the storyline, but it was easy enough to read.
"Why did he decide to go immediately mom? Isn't he really very sick to take care of himself? There is no one with him when everyone goes to work."
Was this person referring to the other person as Mom?
If so, it should be written:
"Why did he decide to go immediately, Mom? Isn't he really very sick to take care of himself? There is no one with him when everyone goes to work."
All the best,
Jan
Comment Written 25-May-2019
reply by the author on 30-May-2019
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This is a conversation between daughter and her mom(Rosie). The daughter is referring to her grand father (Frank) who is sick but decides to return to his own place. To understand this conversation, reader has to have read previous chapters about the interactions between Oldman Frank, his daughter in law Rosie and Alice the granddaughter who mistakenly believes her mother was pushing the Oldman out and based on that suspicion, she is asking her that question- "Why did he decide to go immediately mom?..."
Thanks for your encouraging rating and comment. I am going to revisit that area to see if it can be improved. All the best.
Arun
