Heartfelt
75 Word Flash Contest17 total reviews
Comment from Mrs. KT
And thus, her donor's heart beats the poetry of a new life.
Well-executed, Chip.
Held my attention and told a wonderful story in just 75 words! Not an easy feat!
Kudos!
And best wishes!
diane
reply by the author on 24-May-2019
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And thus, her donor's heart beats the poetry of a new life.
Well-executed, Chip.
Held my attention and told a wonderful story in just 75 words! Not an easy feat!
Kudos!
And best wishes!
diane
Comment Written 24-May-2019
reply by the author on 24-May-2019
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Thank you, Diane!
Comment from Gail Denham
Oh my - that would be such a strange sensation - to know that someone else's heart - a heart which has created poetry or written a striking novel, now beats in your chest. Or perhaps it was a mill worker, an executive, etc. A strange feeling.
Good job.
reply by the author on 24-May-2019
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Oh my - that would be such a strange sensation - to know that someone else's heart - a heart which has created poetry or written a striking novel, now beats in your chest. Or perhaps it was a mill worker, an executive, etc. A strange feeling.
Good job.
Comment Written 24-May-2019
reply by the author on 24-May-2019
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Thanks, Gail.
Comment from Lori S.
Oh, well done! I didn't see that coming, and it was such a sweet surprise. It seemed so natural for her to look for her donor, and I was expecting her to find some wonderful poem that spoke of sharing or living on... This was so much better. Great job!
reply by the author on 23-May-2019
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Oh, well done! I didn't see that coming, and it was such a sweet surprise. It seemed so natural for her to look for her donor, and I was expecting her to find some wonderful poem that spoke of sharing or living on... This was so much better. Great job!
Comment Written 23-May-2019
reply by the author on 23-May-2019
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Thanks, Lori!
Comment from Yuna Akil
Beautiful! Thank you for writing this. I guess this pease was literally a heartfelt one.
I enjoyed how you broke down each sentence and the paragraph. You have a great understanding of pace and impact.
Yuná.
reply by the author on 23-May-2019
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Beautiful! Thank you for writing this. I guess this pease was literally a heartfelt one.
I enjoyed how you broke down each sentence and the paragraph. You have a great understanding of pace and impact.
Yuná.
Comment Written 23-May-2019
reply by the author on 23-May-2019
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Thank you, Yuna!
Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell
That was brilliant! What a clever 75 word flash fiction story. I love the way the husband used the beat and steady rhythm of the new heart to allow his wife to listen to perfect poetry. Superb! Good luck in the contest. :)) Sandra xx
reply by the author on 23-May-2019
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That was brilliant! What a clever 75 word flash fiction story. I love the way the husband used the beat and steady rhythm of the new heart to allow his wife to listen to perfect poetry. Superb! Good luck in the contest. :)) Sandra xx
Comment Written 23-May-2019
reply by the author on 23-May-2019
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Thank you, Sandra!
Comment from shaffer40
I guess the contest is closed already, but this is a good entry. Written with the notion that an extended life is rhythmic and a poetic gift from the donor. Good premise and delivery.
reply by the author on 23-May-2019
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I guess the contest is closed already, but this is a good entry. Written with the notion that an extended life is rhythmic and a poetic gift from the donor. Good premise and delivery.
Comment Written 22-May-2019
reply by the author on 23-May-2019
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Thanks, Shaffer!
Comment from Rmocruz
I find this brief flash-fiction to be a cleverly entertaining analogy.
The art-work selection works well to complement your written word.
This is a promising contest entry.
Best wishes!
reply by the author on 21-May-2019
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I find this brief flash-fiction to be a cleverly entertaining analogy.
The art-work selection works well to complement your written word.
This is a promising contest entry.
Best wishes!
Comment Written 21-May-2019
reply by the author on 21-May-2019
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Thanks, Rmocruz.
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You're welcome Chip.
Comment from LisaMay
Indeed, poetry will always live on, and in some cases it will contain life-saving messages. You have penned a delightful story in a most skilful manner here.
reply by the author on 21-May-2019
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Indeed, poetry will always live on, and in some cases it will contain life-saving messages. You have penned a delightful story in a most skilful manner here.
Comment Written 20-May-2019
reply by the author on 21-May-2019
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Many thanks, LisaMay!
Comment from karenina
I am becoming amazed at the skill it takes to truly write an emotionally riveting 75 word story. I am NOT (having recently been introduced to your skill as a writer)---surprised at all that you would master this...but I loved it right to my own heart just the same.--Karenina
reply by the author on 21-May-2019
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I am becoming amazed at the skill it takes to truly write an emotionally riveting 75 word story. I am NOT (having recently been introduced to your skill as a writer)---surprised at all that you would master this...but I loved it right to my own heart just the same.--Karenina
Comment Written 20-May-2019
reply by the author on 21-May-2019
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Thank you so much for the kind review, Karenina! Given that your Winter piece is brilliant, I am humbled by your words!
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Don't be--I think I got lucky with that write. Your writing is twenty miles ahead of mine! Let ME be humbled!--Karenina
Comment from Mastery
Hi, Chip. very well done entry for the contest
A "heartfelt" story (pardon the pun) LOL
Suggestions: Always put a person's thoughts in italics unless you want to add on "I thought" or "he thought" instead.
Also, break this apart for a more "reader-friendly" post by paragraphing twice within the body of the piece. (for a total of three paragraphs) Bless you and good luck, Chip. Bob
reply by the author on 21-May-2019
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Hi, Chip. very well done entry for the contest
A "heartfelt" story (pardon the pun) LOL
Suggestions: Always put a person's thoughts in italics unless you want to add on "I thought" or "he thought" instead.
Also, break this apart for a more "reader-friendly" post by paragraphing twice within the body of the piece. (for a total of three paragraphs) Bless you and good luck, Chip. Bob
Comment Written 20-May-2019
reply by the author on 21-May-2019
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Thanks, Bob. That was actual, not inner, dialogue (unattributed).
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