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Damsel Spring

a sonnet

41 total reviews 
Comment from robyn corum
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Rod,

I'm so curious as to when this sonnet contest ends (ended) and how you may have done. This poem is just so stinking pretty!! *smile*

You may think this is totally inappropriate -- and, if so, I apologize already -- but if you follow much of my stuff at all, you'll know I have my two grandgirls most of the time. One of the movies we watch over and over (and over and over and... !!!) is Moana.

The lead character, a very young Polynesian girl, (Moana) is tasked with a very special and dangerous mission. A demigod named Maui stole 'The Heart of Tafiti' a thousand years before and now there's environmental catastrophe spreading across Moana's island home.

Most of the movie is about the difficulties and roadblocks Moana and Maui face togetherr in this journey to restore things. The biggest hurdle they face is Te KÄ?, a volcanic demon - who does NOT play nice.

Anyway, all this to say -- the following is the moment in the movie that your poem reminded me of:

https://www.bing.com/videos/search?q=Te+Ka+Moana&&view=detail&mid=4988AA6E860D9805F8614988AA6E860D9805F861&&FORM=VRDGAR

A very powerful and moving moment, indeed.

There's a good possibility you don't care about any of that. *smile*
But I thought I'd share. This was cool. Thank you.


 Comment Written 24-May-2019


reply by the author on 24-May-2019
    Thank you so much for sharing DAMSEL SPRING, Robyn, and your kind praise. I truly appreciate your summary of the movie MOANA which I have not seen. I will look for it. The contest is over and this poem won no awards. Rod
Comment from Ric Myworld
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Well, I haven't been around for quite some time now and I'm only around for a few minutes. But lucky for me, I found your poem in my list of notifications and couldn't help but stop to read it. And I'm glad I took the time, as I always enjoy anything you post. Great job!

 Comment Written 22-May-2019


reply by the author on 22-May-2019
    I am delighted you spent those few minutes with my poem, Ric. Thank you so much for your kind praise of DAMSEL SPRING and those six bright stars. Rod
Comment from Jannypan (Jan)
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I enjoyed reading your sonnet contest entry, Rod. Great job with its presentation--the picture is perfect, the personification is done well and adds interest, the style of the sonnet is adhered too, and your message is clear. Thanks for sharing and best wishes. Jan

 Comment Written 18-May-2019


reply by the author on 18-May-2019
    I am delighted you enjoyed my personification of Spring, Jan. This sonnet was fun to write and I am very pleased you like my style. Rod
Comment from seken58
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A stunning image which complements the flawless poetry to perfection.
Just the thought of spring is music to my aching bones as winter lurches closer here in Australia.
The Sonnet style is executed perfectly and creates a re very competitive contest entry.
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Blessings
Shirley

 Comment Written 18-May-2019


reply by the author on 18-May-2019
    I am very pleased you enjoyed the image and my sonnet, Shirley. I keep forgetting that you folks Down Under are approaching Winter. Thanks so much for sharing DAMSEL SPRING. Rod
Comment from Sugarray77
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This is a beautiful verse about the arrival of Spring. Your descriptions are lovely and make me think of vibrant new growth and a soft sheen of green growing things. Well done, Rod.

Melissa

 Comment Written 18-May-2019


reply by the author on 18-May-2019
    Hi Melissa. I am so pleased you enjoyed DAMSEL SPRING. Many thanks for your kind praise. Rod
Comment from Violet WolfChild
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Oh, how I love Spring I love the way you speak of her. Here in Montucky, Old Man Winter seems to be fighting to stay awhile. But this is a beautiful piece you have penned. I love the imagery of your words and they go perfectly with the picture you chose to accompany it. Wonderful job, thank you for sharing.

 Comment Written 18-May-2019


reply by the author on 18-May-2019
    I am very flattered--and honored--by your high praise of DAMSEL SPRING, Violet. I only wish she was visiting you folks in Montucky. Rod
Comment from karenina
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This is simply a delightful sonnet. So full of imagery and masterful language I have read it several times for the pure pleasure of your offering!--Karenina

 Comment Written 18-May-2019


reply by the author on 18-May-2019
    I love it when a reviewer tells me she has read my poem "several times." Many thanks, karenina, for doing so and your high praise of DAMSEL SPRING. Rod
reply by karenina on 19-May-2019
    I love it when I find a poem that delights me enough to read it again and again!--Karenina
Comment from Aussie
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Wonderful and unique subject, most enjoyable for the reader. Many other-worldly folk are out and about during the change of seasons. I thought your Sonnet was just beautiful. Putting an image to Spring was a clever move. She brings wealth, is playful with the magpie and moves quickly. Loved it!

 Comment Written 18-May-2019


reply by the author on 18-May-2019
    I am delighted you enjoyed meeting Damsel Spring, Aussie. She was fun to personify in sonnet form. Rod
reply by Aussie on 18-May-2019
    Keep writing in that vein and you can be assured of a great response! XX
Comment from Pam (respa)
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-Very nice image and
presentation, Rod.
-A well written sonnet
with good imagery and rhyme.
-I like the personification of
in verses one and two.
-The volta is effective
with "Old Man Winter"
being "a surly guest."
-But he didn't last long
with the welcome, "carefree sprite."
-A good concluding couplet, too.
-Good luck in the contest.

 Comment Written 17-May-2019


reply by the author on 18-May-2019
    Hi Pam. I truly appreciate your taking the time to tell me all the aspects of DAMSEL SPRING you like. Thank you so much. Rod
reply by Pam (respa) on 18-May-2019
    You are very welcome, Rod.
Comment from rspoet
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Hello Rod,
You've written a wonderful sonnet for the contest with gorgeous art work.
It has all the elements of a fine sonnet: alternating rhymes, iambic pentameter, a good Volta turn and solid reflective couplet.
A purest would probably suggest Old Man Winter has three consecutive stressed syllables, but I doubt the judges will complain.
Well done. This one should be very competitive in the contest.
Robert

 Comment Written 17-May-2019


reply by the author on 18-May-2019
    I am very pleased you enjoyed DAMSEL SPRING so much, Robert. Thank you very much for taking the time to tell me which features you like most. Yes, a purest might find fault with my phrase Old Man Winter, but I am glad you don't. Rod