Freedom From Want
For Yvette.20 total reviews
Comment from A. Willow Bends
What a lovely story. The artwork to match, perfection. What times have been lived through! We sometimes cannot imagine it! This is a warm story and if grandmother only knew what she was bargaining for and with whom! Out of sixes, so sorry. Great job.
Wendy
reply by the author on 22-May-2019
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What a lovely story. The artwork to match, perfection. What times have been lived through! We sometimes cannot imagine it! This is a warm story and if grandmother only knew what she was bargaining for and with whom! Out of sixes, so sorry. Great job.
Wendy
Comment Written 22-May-2019
reply by the author on 22-May-2019
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Thanks for another kind review, Wendy. xxx
Comment from Alex Rosel
This is a pleasant narrative, with a poignant ending. I liked it.
Here is just one thing you might like to consider:
...as if there was no tomorrow - This is sort of cliché. Personally I try to avoid clichés. Maybe look for something more original that will convey attitude and add to the characterisation of the narrator? Something with impact.
reply by the author on 18-May-2019
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This is a pleasant narrative, with a poignant ending. I liked it.
Here is just one thing you might like to consider:
...as if there was no tomorrow - This is sort of cliché. Personally I try to avoid clichés. Maybe look for something more original that will convey attitude and add to the characterisation of the narrator? Something with impact.
Comment Written 18-May-2019
reply by the author on 18-May-2019
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Thanks, Alex. Take care.
Comment from Rikki66
A well told tale of a revered painting. There are many ways this story could have taken place I find your view most interesting and enlightening. Well done.
reply by the author on 18-May-2019
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A well told tale of a revered painting. There are many ways this story could have taken place I find your view most interesting and enlightening. Well done.
Comment Written 17-May-2019
reply by the author on 18-May-2019
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Thanks so much for reading.
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welcome
rikki
Comment from Ulla
Awe,Maria Jose, how bittersweet is that! I loved your story.Everybod was puzzled what was really going on,and only years later did it all become clear. What a lovely wee story. All the best. Ulla:)))
reply by the author on 17-May-2019
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Awe,Maria Jose, how bittersweet is that! I loved your story.Everybod was puzzled what was really going on,and only years later did it all become clear. What a lovely wee story. All the best. Ulla:)))
Comment Written 16-May-2019
reply by the author on 17-May-2019
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Thanks so much, Ulla.
Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell
I see it comes under general fiction, Maria, but you have created a story from that picture that feels so real it left me wondering if it was your grandmother. This is an incredible story, the ending with the grandmother having a lucid moment in her dementia explaining why she allowed the artist to paint the family, was just perfect. These stories of yours are diamonds, my friend, you are so creative with stacks of talent. Well done. :)) Sandra xx
reply by the author on 15-May-2019
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I see it comes under general fiction, Maria, but you have created a story from that picture that feels so real it left me wondering if it was your grandmother. This is an incredible story, the ending with the grandmother having a lucid moment in her dementia explaining why she allowed the artist to paint the family, was just perfect. These stories of yours are diamonds, my friend, you are so creative with stacks of talent. Well done. :)) Sandra xx
Comment Written 15-May-2019
reply by the author on 15-May-2019
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Thanks. I'm glad it sounded so believable. Another reviewer thought it was actually true.
Comment from damommy
This is a great story built around the famous painting. What a creative idea, using it to point out the hardships during WWII. I was a WWII baby, and remember hearing a lot of things that were unavailable for a long time.
reply by the author on 15-May-2019
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This is a great story built around the famous painting. What a creative idea, using it to point out the hardships during WWII. I was a WWII baby, and remember hearing a lot of things that were unavailable for a long time.
Comment Written 15-May-2019
reply by the author on 15-May-2019
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Thanks, Yvonne. xxx
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
A very well-written heartfelt story. Mothers and grandmothers will do anything to make their families happy and to keep them fed, they will go the extra mile.
reply by the author on 15-May-2019
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A very well-written heartfelt story. Mothers and grandmothers will do anything to make their families happy and to keep them fed, they will go the extra mile.
Comment Written 15-May-2019
reply by the author on 15-May-2019
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Thanks, Sandra. xxx
Comment from Y. M. Roger
Wow! You are amazing, Lady Maria!! :) :) What a really cool story ... and to think you actually incorporated ol' Norm himself!! :) :) Hope this provision of a smile for all of us helped you find your own... :) :) Thanx so much for sharing special kind of sunshine! ;) :) Yvette ;)
reply by the author on 15-May-2019
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Wow! You are amazing, Lady Maria!! :) :) What a really cool story ... and to think you actually incorporated ol' Norm himself!! :) :) Hope this provision of a smile for all of us helped you find your own... :) :) Thanx so much for sharing special kind of sunshine! ;) :) Yvette ;)
Comment Written 15-May-2019
reply by the author on 15-May-2019
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I'm glad you liked it, Yvette.
I hope you noticed it was dedicated to you.
Thanks for reading.
Comment from robyn corum
MJ,
What a great story. And who WOULDN'T do such a small thing like that for their family?? And, of course, she had no idea at the time that her family would be immortalized in that painting. *smile*
Some notes:
1.) 'I won't bother you for long(,) he said, as if he had read my thoughts.
2.) she said,(space)'I only did it for the turkey. He gave me the turkey.'
Thanks - I enjoyed!
reply by the author on 15-May-2019
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MJ,
What a great story. And who WOULDN'T do such a small thing like that for their family?? And, of course, she had no idea at the time that her family would be immortalized in that painting. *smile*
Some notes:
1.) 'I won't bother you for long(,) he said, as if he had read my thoughts.
2.) she said,(space)'I only did it for the turkey. He gave me the turkey.'
Thanks - I enjoyed!
Comment Written 15-May-2019
reply by the author on 15-May-2019
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I corrected the typos. Thanks so much.
Comment from 24chas
This was a wonderful story, Maria. I love the way you take these paintings and flesh out stories from them. What a great talent you are and thank you for sharing it with us, the lucky readers.
reply by the author on 15-May-2019
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This was a wonderful story, Maria. I love the way you take these paintings and flesh out stories from them. What a great talent you are and thank you for sharing it with us, the lucky readers.
Comment Written 15-May-2019
reply by the author on 15-May-2019
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Thank YOU for reading. Take care.
