The Final Tally
A Shakespearan Sonnet for the Sonnet Contest34 total reviews
Comment from Heather Knight
Beautifully written as usual, Yvonne. And what you say about life is true...
I wish I could write sonnets like this.
Thanks for sharing and good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 14-May-2019
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Beautifully written as usual, Yvonne. And what you say about life is true...
I wish I could write sonnets like this.
Thanks for sharing and good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 14-May-2019
reply by the author on 14-May-2019
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Oh, I know you could do it. Give it a try. If you need help, PM me. There's nothing wrong with helping each other. Thank you for this lovely review.
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Thanks!
Comment from lyenochka
Loved your philosophical sonnet, Yvonne. Yes, there is much in life that is absolutely not in our control but it's how we play that counts. Great job with the a rhymes, internal rhymes and even the enjambment in the final couplet.
reply by the author on 14-May-2019
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Loved your philosophical sonnet, Yvonne. Yes, there is much in life that is absolutely not in our control but it's how we play that counts. Great job with the a rhymes, internal rhymes and even the enjambment in the final couplet.
Comment Written 14-May-2019
reply by the author on 14-May-2019
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Thank you for catching the enjambment. I always appreciate your input. Thanks for reviewing.
Comment from LIJ Red
Iambic pentameter to volta and rhyme scheme, just as an English or Shakespearean sonnet should be. It had me looking away and playing
The Gambler which sidetracked me into playing the song that may have ended the Nam war (Ruby). poem causing that much thought must be excellent.
reply by the author on 14-May-2019
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Iambic pentameter to volta and rhyme scheme, just as an English or Shakespearean sonnet should be. It had me looking away and playing
The Gambler which sidetracked me into playing the song that may have ended the Nam war (Ruby). poem causing that much thought must be excellent.
Comment Written 14-May-2019
reply by the author on 14-May-2019
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Why, thank you, Red. What a lovely thing to say.
Comment from Gail Denham
Nice job - reads well. Certainly it brings to mind that we need to "bloom where we're planted" . In Sunday's sermon, the message was clear - "man's life is a vapor" - passes so quickly. Your poem made me think of that.
reply by the author on 13-May-2019
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Nice job - reads well. Certainly it brings to mind that we need to "bloom where we're planted" . In Sunday's sermon, the message was clear - "man's life is a vapor" - passes so quickly. Your poem made me think of that.
Comment Written 13-May-2019
reply by the author on 13-May-2019
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Thank you for those lovely remarks.
Comment from BeasPeas
This sonnet is very well composed and rhymed. The image by Cezanne is one I always admired. The natural pose expressed perfectly and your poem works nicely with it. Best of luck in the contest. Marilyn
reply by the author on 13-May-2019
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This sonnet is very well composed and rhymed. The image by Cezanne is one I always admired. The natural pose expressed perfectly and your poem works nicely with it. Best of luck in the contest. Marilyn
Comment Written 13-May-2019
reply by the author on 13-May-2019
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Thank you, Marilyn, for the review and for the good wishes.
Comment from Louise Michelle
There's a lot of wisdom woven into this poem. I thoroughly enjoyed it from start to finish, but must make special note of: Nature's own ballet I really loved that phrase. Well done. Hugs, Lou
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There's a lot of wisdom woven into this poem. I thoroughly enjoyed it from start to finish, but must make special note of: Nature's own ballet I really loved that phrase. Well done. Hugs, Lou
Comment Written 13-May-2019
reply by the author on 13-May-2019
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Thank you so much for reviewing this. I'm glad you like it.
Comment from Bleeshor
I don't know a lot about Shakespearean sonnet creation, but I know that I like this poem. It appears to follow the rules of sonnet structure. It is a Shakespeare theme as well In that it talks about creating your own destiny...It doesn't matter what the hand that's laid
before us, but the tally when it's played.
reply by the author on 13-May-2019
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I don't know a lot about Shakespearean sonnet creation, but I know that I like this poem. It appears to follow the rules of sonnet structure. It is a Shakespeare theme as well In that it talks about creating your own destiny...It doesn't matter what the hand that's laid
before us, but the tally when it's played.
Comment Written 13-May-2019
reply by the author on 13-May-2019
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Thank you for this wonderful review.
Comment from Gloria ....
Yvonne, you've done a fantastic job with this sonnet. And there is a lot of wisdom in your words. So true ya gotta play the cards you were dealt.
This is a sixer for sure and I wish you much luck with the Contest Committee.
Gloria
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Yvonne, you've done a fantastic job with this sonnet. And there is a lot of wisdom in your words. So true ya gotta play the cards you were dealt.
This is a sixer for sure and I wish you much luck with the Contest Committee.
Gloria
Comment Written 13-May-2019
reply by the author on 13-May-2019
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Oh, wow! Thank you so much, Gloria! I'm tickled pink. 8-) I appreciate this fantastic review!
Comment from Pam (respa)
-Nice artwork and presentation.
-A well penned sonnet that
meets the requirements.
-The topic of life and its
trials is a good one.
-A good comparison:
"and tumble us to craters of despair?"
-A very good volta with the seasons.
-The image of "Nature's own ballet"
is also very good.
-An effective ending couplet, too.
-A very good entry; good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 13-May-2019
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-Nice artwork and presentation.
-A well penned sonnet that
meets the requirements.
-The topic of life and its
trials is a good one.
-A good comparison:
"and tumble us to craters of despair?"
-A very good volta with the seasons.
-The image of "Nature's own ballet"
is also very good.
-An effective ending couplet, too.
-A very good entry; good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 13-May-2019
reply by the author on 13-May-2019
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Thank you for this wonderful review, and for the great comments. Very much appreciated.
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You are very welcome and deserving.
Comment from Thomas Bowling
This is excellent. It reminds me of Forest Gump's mama. Life is like a box of chocolates. You never know what you're gonna get.
We just have to make the best of what comes along.
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This is excellent. It reminds me of Forest Gump's mama. Life is like a box of chocolates. You never know what you're gonna get.
We just have to make the best of what comes along.
Comment Written 13-May-2019
reply by the author on 13-May-2019
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Thank you for that compliment that it reminded you of a very good movie. Much appreciated.
