The Golden Rule
A sonnet of choice for one and all11 total reviews
Comment from LisaMay
I really like how you have combined a relatively solemn treatise on love and partnership with a humorous ending. It is good advice to not let "tongue tears us apart" but to "hold my tongue, in cheek, when with my wife."
reply by the author on 19-May-2019
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I really like how you have combined a relatively solemn treatise on love and partnership with a humorous ending. It is good advice to not let "tongue tears us apart" but to "hold my tongue, in cheek, when with my wife."
Comment Written 19-May-2019
reply by the author on 19-May-2019
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Thank you LisaMay. The last four words should read, "when with THE wife, so it includes everyone. :) Glad you liked it.
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I'm glad it says 'my wife' not 'the wife'. Most women don't like being referred to as 'the wife', even though I see what you mean about it making your poem more inclusive than personal.
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
A very well-written sonnet about the golden rule in marriage, actually there are two. No one is to always agree with the wife, no two is if in doubt go back to rule no one.
reply by the author on 17-May-2019
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A very well-written sonnet about the golden rule in marriage, actually there are two. No one is to always agree with the wife, no two is if in doubt go back to rule no one.
Comment Written 16-May-2019
reply by the author on 17-May-2019
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Thank you Sandra. I'm glad I got you to smile. :)
Comment from Earl Corp
I don't know if this qualifies as a Shakesperean sonnet either, but I do know it's a great tribute to your wife. I hope she has gotten to read this. Very nice job.
reply by the author on 17-May-2019
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I don't know if this qualifies as a Shakesperean sonnet either, but I do know it's a great tribute to your wife. I hope she has gotten to read this. Very nice job.
Comment Written 16-May-2019
reply by the author on 17-May-2019
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Thank you Earl. I'm glad you liked it.
Comment from rspoet
Hello Poetwatch,
I think you have a solid Shakespearean sonnet here.
The rhymes are excellent, the meter is very good,
you have a nice Volta turn in stanza three
and a perfect reflective couplet to finish the poem.
The theme is consistent and there's a nice touch of humor.
Good luck in the contest
Robert
reply by the author on 17-May-2019
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Hello Poetwatch,
I think you have a solid Shakespearean sonnet here.
The rhymes are excellent, the meter is very good,
you have a nice Volta turn in stanza three
and a perfect reflective couplet to finish the poem.
The theme is consistent and there's a nice touch of humor.
Good luck in the contest
Robert
Comment Written 16-May-2019
reply by the author on 17-May-2019
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Thank you Robert. Your comments mean a lot to me. :)
Comment from Patty Palmer
I really liked your sonnet! Very pretty! The only sonnet I'd ever be able to write would be to copy a sonnet at an Easter parade LOL But that's already taken! LOL I also don't know what I'm going to write about ahead of time. An idea pops into my head and it takes the lead! Most of the time, once I get started it usually takes me anywhere from 10 to 20 minutes to write a poem.
reply by the author on 17-May-2019
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I really liked your sonnet! Very pretty! The only sonnet I'd ever be able to write would be to copy a sonnet at an Easter parade LOL But that's already taken! LOL I also don't know what I'm going to write about ahead of time. An idea pops into my head and it takes the lead! Most of the time, once I get started it usually takes me anywhere from 10 to 20 minutes to write a poem.
Comment Written 16-May-2019
reply by the author on 17-May-2019
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Thank you Patricia. I'm glad you liked it. :) I wrote this one in about 20 minutes, but I put it away, picked it up late, changed it, changed it, changed it and this came up. Completely different. :)
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Isn't that the way it goes? You change one thing and it turns out completely different
Comment from Sally Law
You are both a wise man and a fine poet.ma wife is a valued possession. The fruit of your restraint will be rewarded. I enjoyed your Sonnet and lovely artwork depicting your bride.
Always my best, dear poet, and in the contest,
Sal :+)
reply by the author on 15-May-2019
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You are both a wise man and a fine poet.ma wife is a valued possession. The fruit of your restraint will be rewarded. I enjoyed your Sonnet and lovely artwork depicting your bride.
Always my best, dear poet, and in the contest,
Sal :+)
Comment Written 15-May-2019
reply by the author on 15-May-2019
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Thank you Sally. I try to bring a smile as well as a message in every poem I write. Hope Jake got it. :)
Comment from aryr
Good luck in the poetry contest, Jose. I really enjoyed reading this and it did indeed made me smile or rather most of it. The worm part was a definite reminder of reality. I liked the concept of the beauty of the words and the freedom of choice. You did very well with this.
reply by the author on 15-May-2019
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Good luck in the poetry contest, Jose. I really enjoyed reading this and it did indeed made me smile or rather most of it. The worm part was a definite reminder of reality. I liked the concept of the beauty of the words and the freedom of choice. You did very well with this.
Comment Written 14-May-2019
reply by the author on 15-May-2019
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The worms are a metaphor, Alie. I'm glad you liked it.
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You are so welcome, but the worms do really relate to reality. lol
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
I adore the sentiments here and I enjoyed your Shakespearean sonnet which has a perfect metre and the required syllables. You made me smile and the last line is an absolute gem, this most definitely deserves a six, a joy to read, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 15-May-2019
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I adore the sentiments here and I enjoyed your Shakespearean sonnet which has a perfect metre and the required syllables. You made me smile and the last line is an absolute gem, this most definitely deserves a six, a joy to read, love Dolly x
Comment Written 14-May-2019
reply by the author on 15-May-2019
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Dolly your comments are a treasure. Thank you. I'm glad you liked it.
Comment from Alcreator Litt Dear
Sometime, in love, keeping relation, one may choose the option, the golden rule, the trick showing love and holding tongue in cheek with wife; well said, well done. Write to inspire, readable for years -- DR ALCREATOR
reply by the author on 15-May-2019
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Sometime, in love, keeping relation, one may choose the option, the golden rule, the trick showing love and holding tongue in cheek with wife; well said, well done. Write to inspire, readable for years -- DR ALCREATOR
Comment Written 13-May-2019
reply by the author on 15-May-2019
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Thanks Al. "To be or not to be" has lasted some will live to see the sun decline from the sky. Some will be shadows of memory. Glad you liked it.
Comment from Bill Schott
This sonnet, The Golden Rule, has the proper formatting and and finds what sounds like a decision to let one's wife feel the love and good spirit of their relationship, by keeping unnecessary opinions and comments in check.
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reply by the author on 15-May-2019
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This sonnet, The Golden Rule, has the proper formatting and and finds what sounds like a decision to let one's wife feel the love and good spirit of their relationship, by keeping unnecessary opinions and comments in check.
This rating does not count towards story rating or author rank.
The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
Comment Written 13-May-2019
reply by the author on 15-May-2019
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You got it Bill. This is for everyone that has a partner in this life. I'm glad you liked it.
