Lost in a Cave
Nonet Poetry contest24 total reviews
Comment from country ranch writer
sometimes finding ones way out becomes harder than going in as thigs change as the light becomes dimmer inside the cave making it harder for one to get ones bearings in the right prespective.
reply by the author on 13-May-2019
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sometimes finding ones way out becomes harder than going in as thigs change as the light becomes dimmer inside the cave making it harder for one to get ones bearings in the right prespective.
Comment Written 13-May-2019
reply by the author on 13-May-2019
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Thanks you so much for your intuitive review. Much appreciated.
melissa
Comment from judiverse
You really get across the feeling of being lost in a cave. You mention the darkness and dampness, the dripping sound. It would be frightening, especially when there's no light to guide you and probably creepy-crawly things flying about. "Blanket of damp wool" is a great simile. Best of luck in the contest. judi
reply by the author on 13-May-2019
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You really get across the feeling of being lost in a cave. You mention the darkness and dampness, the dripping sound. It would be frightening, especially when there's no light to guide you and probably creepy-crawly things flying about. "Blanket of damp wool" is a great simile. Best of luck in the contest. judi
Comment Written 13-May-2019
reply by the author on 13-May-2019
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Thank you, Judi. I was trying to relate to the reader the tension and angst of the moment. I am grateful you took the time to review.
Melissa
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You're welcome. Some 4-H friends and I were lost in a park one night many years ago, so I know that feeling of fear. judi
Comment from Sally Law
A fine nonet and entry for the upcoming contest. I think the subject matter was intense and you used well-chosen words for your descriptions. Your syllable count is perfect for the entry and fits the 9-1 countdown.
All my best, and in the contest,
Sal xo
reply by the author on 13-May-2019
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A fine nonet and entry for the upcoming contest. I think the subject matter was intense and you used well-chosen words for your descriptions. Your syllable count is perfect for the entry and fits the 9-1 countdown.
All my best, and in the contest,
Sal xo
Comment Written 13-May-2019
reply by the author on 13-May-2019
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Thanks, Sal... I know this one is a little dark and dramatic, but I was trying to write so the reader could feel the angst and tension of the moment. I appreciate your time and review.
Melissa
Comment from Mistydawn
This is a very vivid poem. A reader can see the surroundings, feel the fear, the possible appending doom. Your artwork is perfect for this poem. Great job as always.
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This is a very vivid poem. A reader can see the surroundings, feel the fear, the possible appending doom. Your artwork is perfect for this poem. Great job as always.
Comment Written 13-May-2019
reply by the author on 13-May-2019
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Thanks so much, Misty!! I really appreciate your insightful review. I was trying to convey to the reader the tension and angst of the moment. Much appreciated.
Melissa
Comment from robyn corum
Melissa,
Well, thanks for that. I can't really image much worse. I'm claustrophobic and I was just trying to decide if this would be horrible in and of itself or if it might also set off my terror, too. *smile* Nice job, buddy. Ack.
Good luck!
reply by the author on 13-May-2019
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Melissa,
Well, thanks for that. I can't really image much worse. I'm claustrophobic and I was just trying to decide if this would be horrible in and of itself or if it might also set off my terror, too. *smile* Nice job, buddy. Ack.
Good luck!
Comment Written 13-May-2019
reply by the author on 13-May-2019
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Hey there, Robyn... Sorry about the trigger... I was trying to share with the reader the angst and tension of the moment. I really appreciate your comments. Helen told me to write another Nonet and get them out of the cave... haha.. may do that!!
Melissa
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Yay, Helen!
haha!
Comment from Heather Knight
You've done a great job here, Melissa. I feel claustrophobic just reading your poem. And I understand what you mean by the drip...
Gorgeous picture as well.
Thanks for sharing and good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 13-May-2019
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You've done a great job here, Melissa. I feel claustrophobic just reading your poem. And I understand what you mean by the drip...
Gorgeous picture as well.
Thanks for sharing and good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 13-May-2019
reply by the author on 13-May-2019
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Thank you Maria. I wanted the reader to feel the angst of the moment. So glad you understand.
Melissa
Comment from Aussie
Good luck with your Nonet contest entry. Great photo to compliment your poem. Honestly, I can't imagine being stuck in a cave, how claustrophobic that would be; unless you were a dedicated 'caver.' Well done friend.
reply by the author on 13-May-2019
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Good luck with your Nonet contest entry. Great photo to compliment your poem. Honestly, I can't imagine being stuck in a cave, how claustrophobic that would be; unless you were a dedicated 'caver.' Well done friend.
Comment Written 13-May-2019
reply by the author on 13-May-2019
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Thanks so much for the great review. I was writing so that the reader could feel the tension and angst of the moment. I had a reviewer ask me to write another Nonet to get the person out of the cave... haha.. I may write it!!
Melissa
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
He he he, I loved the atmospherics here Melissa, you created a dark damp place with he dripping sound that encourages the stalagmites! One suggestion and that is to put (one) in full and not numerical, it would read much better and help with the shape too, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 13-May-2019
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He he he, I loved the atmospherics here Melissa, you created a dark damp place with he dripping sound that encourages the stalagmites! One suggestion and that is to put (one) in full and not numerical, it would read much better and help with the shape too, love Dolly x
Comment Written 13-May-2019
reply by the author on 13-May-2019
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Thanks so much, Dolly. Much appreciated.
Melissa
Comment from LovnPeace
I know nothing of Nonet poetry, but I know your writing and I 'm sure it fits in the criteria. It is good poetry and a worthy entry. Good luck in the contest. Blessings. Barbara
reply by the author on 13-May-2019
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I know nothing of Nonet poetry, but I know your writing and I 'm sure it fits in the criteria. It is good poetry and a worthy entry. Good luck in the contest. Blessings. Barbara
Comment Written 12-May-2019
reply by the author on 13-May-2019
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Thanks so much, Barbara. I really appreciate your confidence and encouragement!!
Melissa
Comment from Janice Canerdy
Your skillfully-written nonet vividly conveys the themes of desperation
and inescapable depression. The overall effect is enhanced by the use of figurative language.
reply by the author on 13-May-2019
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Your skillfully-written nonet vividly conveys the themes of desperation
and inescapable depression. The overall effect is enhanced by the use of figurative language.
Comment Written 12-May-2019
reply by the author on 13-May-2019
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Thanks so much for your astute review, Janice. I was writing so that the reader could feel the tension and angst of the moment... much appreciated.
Melissa
