Lost in a Cave
Nonet Poetry contest24 total reviews
Comment from patcelaw
One time we as a family visited a dry cave close to the Grand Canyon, At one point he guide turned off the lights for one minute and thee darkness was oppressive and we were all glad when the light came back on.
Patricia
reply by the author on 13-May-2019
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One time we as a family visited a dry cave close to the Grand Canyon, At one point he guide turned off the lights for one minute and thee darkness was oppressive and we were all glad when the light came back on.
Patricia
Comment Written 12-May-2019
reply by the author on 13-May-2019
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I can see you understand what I was trying to convey, Patricia. I wanted everyone to feel the angst and tension... glad you took the time to review.
Melissa
Comment from lyenochka
That does sound very much like being lost in a deep, dark cave. The "abyss of nothingness" and the "constant drip" make it realistic for me. I'm hoping for a reverse nonet that brings the narrrator out of the cave!
Best wishes in the contest.
reply by the author on 13-May-2019
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That does sound very much like being lost in a deep, dark cave. The "abyss of nothingness" and the "constant drip" make it realistic for me. I'm hoping for a reverse nonet that brings the narrrator out of the cave!
Best wishes in the contest.
Comment Written 12-May-2019
reply by the author on 13-May-2019
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Haha.. now I have to rescue them, is that it? I will try to do that before long, but as you see, I was trying to bring the reader into the angst and tension of the moment... glad you commented!! Thank you, Helen.
Comment from Y. M. Roger
Okay, I HATE caves and closed in spaces and especially caves and closed in spaces with no light.... essentially, you've got a great nonet here, Melissa, but I hate the way your chosen phrases make my insides feel - LOL! But, the bright side is that such a reaction means you did a good job! :) ;) thanx for sharing (sortof)... :) ;) Yvette
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reply by the author on 13-May-2019
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Okay, I HATE caves and closed in spaces and especially caves and closed in spaces with no light.... essentially, you've got a great nonet here, Melissa, but I hate the way your chosen phrases make my insides feel - LOL! But, the bright side is that such a reaction means you did a good job! :) ;) thanx for sharing (sortof)... :) ;) Yvette
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Comment Written 12-May-2019
reply by the author on 13-May-2019
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Thanks so much for your astute review, Yvette. I was writing so that the reader could feel the tension and angst of the moment... much appreciated. Haha... Helen asked me to write a reverse Nonet and get the person out of the cave! Haha
Melissa
Comment from Jannypan (Jan)
I enjoyed your contest entry, Melissa. Your words create great imagery. Good job on the syllable count per line. You told an eerie little story. The picture is a nice paring with your words. Thanks for sharing and best wishes. Jan
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I enjoyed your contest entry, Melissa. Your words create great imagery. Good job on the syllable count per line. You told an eerie little story. The picture is a nice paring with your words. Thanks for sharing and best wishes. Jan
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Comment Written 12-May-2019
reply by the author on 13-May-2019
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Thanks so much for your astute review, Jan. I was writing so that the reader could feel the tension and angst of the moment... much appreciated.
Melissa
