The Last Laugh
It just takes time.22 total reviews
Comment from misscookie
This was a hard one to choose and yours won out for I can relate
Yes I have experience the same thing only when I saw my Ex he old o and wore out The swift step was gone his lovely smile on my goodness he had no teeth. I wonder what was going through his head as he look at me raising four kids alone, looking fine as a glass of wine.
.I tell you pay back as ...B
Cookie
reply by the author on 13-May-2019
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This was a hard one to choose and yours won out for I can relate
Yes I have experience the same thing only when I saw my Ex he old o and wore out The swift step was gone his lovely smile on my goodness he had no teeth. I wonder what was going through his head as he look at me raising four kids alone, looking fine as a glass of wine.
.I tell you pay back as ...B
Cookie
Comment Written 13-May-2019
reply by the author on 13-May-2019
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You go girl... I love your energy and sass... your ex he's all washed up and down the drain. You are doing a mighty fine job with those kids.
Thanks for picking my poem.
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I give thanks to Jesus for all the strength He give me
Take care
Cookie
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Amen!! He's our man. He is loyal.
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Until next time.
Cookie
Comment from Shirley E Kennedy
A very captivating and focused poem.
Well planned and concise and cleverly complemented with a great image choice.
I appreciated the author's notes.
Blessings
Shirley
reply by the author on 13-May-2019
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A very captivating and focused poem.
Well planned and concise and cleverly complemented with a great image choice.
I appreciated the author's notes.
Blessings
Shirley
Comment Written 13-May-2019
reply by the author on 13-May-2019
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Thanks so much for appreciating the Last Laugh.
I value your comments.. you made my night with that 6!
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You're very welcome.
:-)
Comment from jenintorre
I am glad your character got the last laugh although it took twenty years of suffering. I think this is a very original and entertaiting poem about a very common and heartbreaking event. Good luck in the competition. Jen.
reply by the author on 13-May-2019
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I am glad your character got the last laugh although it took twenty years of suffering. I think this is a very original and entertaiting poem about a very common and heartbreaking event. Good luck in the competition. Jen.
Comment Written 13-May-2019
reply by the author on 13-May-2019
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Thanks for your review. I hope the woman didn't suffer for 20 years. I'd like to think it happened 20 years ago and she got on with enjoying her life after she realised he wan't worth her tears.
Comment from Janice Canerdy
You have made excellent use of powerful descriptions in this what-goes-
around-comes-around account. The divorce rate for second and third
timers is really HIGH!
reply by the author on 13-May-2019
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You have made excellent use of powerful descriptions in this what-goes-
around-comes-around account. The divorce rate for second and third
timers is really HIGH!
Comment Written 13-May-2019
reply by the author on 13-May-2019
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Thanks for your review. Yes, it's not always 2nd or 3rd time lucky.
Comment from LyndaS
You feathered your nest at the expense of mine. Wow. This is an excellent tribute to envy. Very well crafted and a great story. My favorites.. Heartless harpy - slide over the painful past - divorce's grimace, your plumage grey with grief - EXCELLENT.
This is a killer post and a solid entry into this contest. Very well done, poet. Lynda
reply by the author on 13-May-2019
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You feathered your nest at the expense of mine. Wow. This is an excellent tribute to envy. Very well crafted and a great story. My favorites.. Heartless harpy - slide over the painful past - divorce's grimace, your plumage grey with grief - EXCELLENT.
This is a killer post and a solid entry into this contest. Very well done, poet. Lynda
Comment Written 12-May-2019
reply by the author on 13-May-2019
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It would appear that you approve of this poem.
As I am such a calmly controlled person I will just say thanks.
Of course, my inner child is ricocheting off the walls with delight that you gave me a 6.
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I'm binge replying. I really liked this entry. You live in my head sometimes. Well done.
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I take up a bit of space... I wouldn't want to diminish your brainpower!
Comment from RodG
Why don't we sympathize with the Speaker who list her husband to another woman? Probably because she's bitchy. She WAS also envious for awhile until she realized she was better off now without him.
I like some of her insults: Heartless harpy, brassy trumpet. A fun read. Rod
reply by the author on 12-May-2019
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Why don't we sympathize with the Speaker who list her husband to another woman? Probably because she's bitchy. She WAS also envious for awhile until she realized she was better off now without him.
I like some of her insults: Heartless harpy, brassy trumpet. A fun read. Rod
Comment Written 12-May-2019
reply by the author on 12-May-2019
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She's definitely bitchy! gloating about her rival's fading looks and expanding waistline. I might too if it was really me in that situation. In fact, I did see my husband's 2nd partner recently which is possibly what triggered this poem. We were very civil to each other. She looked nice still.
Comment from Joan E.
What an amazing picture you selected to reinforce your theme! I admired your framing "jealously" so articulately in this poem. Your "river" and "nest" metaphors are very effective, and your use of the alliteration of "b's" and "c's" add to the work's intensity. Your final stanza is quite compelling. Best wishes in the contest and thanks for your wise advice in your notes- Joan
reply by the author on 12-May-2019
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What an amazing picture you selected to reinforce your theme! I admired your framing "jealously" so articulately in this poem. Your "river" and "nest" metaphors are very effective, and your use of the alliteration of "b's" and "c's" add to the work's intensity. Your final stanza is quite compelling. Best wishes in the contest and thanks for your wise advice in your notes- Joan
Comment Written 12-May-2019
reply by the author on 12-May-2019
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Thanks so much Joan for this outstanding review with your thorough comments. That picture was a lucky find.
Comment from Katelynn Barnett
Fantastic job. Your flow is seamless. Your story clear. You paint such a great picture but using almost all symbolism. It's smarts. I really like it. Best of luck.
reply by the author on 12-May-2019
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Fantastic job. Your flow is seamless. Your story clear. You paint such a great picture but using almost all symbolism. It's smarts. I really like it. Best of luck.
Comment Written 12-May-2019
reply by the author on 12-May-2019
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Hi there Katelynn, thanks for stopping by. I appreciate your review and am pleased that you liked my nasty little story-poem.
Comment from DragonSkulls
Hello, mystery author. This is a great entry into this contest. Loved the picture you topped it off with. I could have done without climbing down the mountain of author notes to get to the rating though. Haha. Yep, that's pretty well where it started, Cain and Able. I wish you the best of luck in the booth, Author. Have a great night or day, whatever it is where you are.
;)
Ron
reply by the author on 12-May-2019
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Hello, mystery author. This is a great entry into this contest. Loved the picture you topped it off with. I could have done without climbing down the mountain of author notes to get to the rating though. Haha. Yep, that's pretty well where it started, Cain and Able. I wish you the best of luck in the booth, Author. Have a great night or day, whatever it is where you are.
;)
Ron
Comment Written 12-May-2019
reply by the author on 12-May-2019
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I was giving you some finger exercise with all that scrolling.
I wish I was that 'flying fuck' (in the picture, not in my poem).
Thanks for reviewing.
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Hahaha. Yeah, we all do.
Comment from giraffmang
Hi there,
Oh, this one is just vibrant with pride and aggression, never mind the subject matter of envy. What is they say... revenge is a dish best served in the face of those who pissed us off! or something like that.
good stuff. emotive word choices . nice
GMG
reply by the author on 12-May-2019
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Hi there,
Oh, this one is just vibrant with pride and aggression, never mind the subject matter of envy. What is they say... revenge is a dish best served in the face of those who pissed us off! or something like that.
good stuff. emotive word choices . nice
GMG
Comment Written 12-May-2019
reply by the author on 12-May-2019
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I started out with it being about Envy, but possibly the poem got into territory of other 'sins', even wrath and lust as well as pride as you mention, so I hope it still fits the contest. Why settle for one sin when you can have several? I might as well add gluttony to the list!
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Nah, it's fine. the envy is really there, but these things are always interlinked. I liked it. it's direct and powerful.
