The Last Laugh
It just takes time.22 total reviews
Comment from strandregs
I love your wording and furious tempo/ temper.
I love your advice be your best and fuck the rest.
I agree looking after your yourself regardless of the world.
The tailor had to take in my dresses
and take out penny's - best day of my life.
from "the big bang theory". :-))Z.
reply by the author on 25-May-2019
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I love your wording and furious tempo/ temper.
I love your advice be your best and fuck the rest.
I agree looking after your yourself regardless of the world.
The tailor had to take in my dresses
and take out penny's - best day of my life.
from "the big bang theory". :-))Z.
Comment Written 25-May-2019
reply by the author on 25-May-2019
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Great review! Thanks for that. I am sooo going to miss the big bang theory, boo hoo.
Comment from heavenempress
hi, so lovely piece of poetry. Rich vocabulary and good English command. Good rhyming too and clearly laid out stanzas. Easy to follow poetry. Your image is excellent. All the best.
reply by the author on 14-May-2019
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hi, so lovely piece of poetry. Rich vocabulary and good English command. Good rhyming too and clearly laid out stanzas. Easy to follow poetry. Your image is excellent. All the best.
Comment Written 14-May-2019
reply by the author on 14-May-2019
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Thank you for this review and your nice comments about it. I appreciate that!
Comment from C. Gale Burnett
This is an excellent contest entry; beautifully eye-appealing; really like the font and font size you chose; and your author notes are exceptional. You did a great job describing 'envy' as one of the seven deadly sins. I wish you the very best in the contest :)
reply by the author on 13-May-2019
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This is an excellent contest entry; beautifully eye-appealing; really like the font and font size you chose; and your author notes are exceptional. You did a great job describing 'envy' as one of the seven deadly sins. I wish you the very best in the contest :)
Comment Written 13-May-2019
reply by the author on 13-May-2019
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Thank you so much for this wonderful review and for your good wishes. I hope it does well; I put a lot of thought into it and my instinct tells me I made a good one.
Comment from WryWriter
This poem is very well done to express the deadly sin of envy. I agree wholeheartedly with your author notes. I've heard the old cliché so true, "What goes around, comes around." Great artwork choice for theme. Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 13-May-2019
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This poem is very well done to express the deadly sin of envy. I agree wholeheartedly with your author notes. I've heard the old cliché so true, "What goes around, comes around." Great artwork choice for theme. Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 13-May-2019
reply by the author on 13-May-2019
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Thanks for reviewing my poem. There is certainly a feeling of Karma in this poem; what we do will come back to bite us. I was delighted when I found that oh-so-suitable photo.
Comment from Debra White
Hi :)
I thoroughly enjoyed your poem.
It's cleverly crafted and I've read and re-read it just because I'm getting pleasure from your word play and alliteration and the connections between the different components.
There's plenty of sharp but subtle humour and astute character observation here too.
Loved it (the last couple of lines in particular, tickled me!)
Good Luck in the voting booth :)
Best wishes, Debra
reply by the author on 13-May-2019
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Hi :)
I thoroughly enjoyed your poem.
It's cleverly crafted and I've read and re-read it just because I'm getting pleasure from your word play and alliteration and the connections between the different components.
There's plenty of sharp but subtle humour and astute character observation here too.
Loved it (the last couple of lines in particular, tickled me!)
Good Luck in the voting booth :)
Best wishes, Debra
Comment Written 13-May-2019
reply by the author on 13-May-2019
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Woohoo! I love your generous bestowal of a 6!
The poem is getting beaten in the poll but I know I have written a good one here. You have mentioned all the aspects that I concentrated on including, so here's a pretend 6 for your astute review. In fact, your reviews of my work are always spot on. Thanks for being thorough in your comments.
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You're very welcome, and when I voted about a half hour ago, you were in the lead...you definitely deserve 1st place x
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oooh, I just checked and you are right!
fingers crossed it lasts.
Comment from Liz O'Neill
This has a wonderful tone of satisfaction. I like the cadence of the lines. Your hard sounding alliteration effects the mood of disgust or anger. There's almost an onomatopoetic seething sound and then a chuckle at the end. This is a strong cautionary tale. Your imagery is very vivid and at times amusing.
The reader will be drawn in to join you in your revery or to shrivel in their regret for their illusions of grandeur. I used to work at the abused women's network. It was amazing how one abuse woman felt she could do better than her abused acquaintance so she hooked up with the other abuser. Within the year she returning for being abused by the new boyfriend. This is well written. I am voting for this one. I also give this A+
reply by the author on 13-May-2019
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This has a wonderful tone of satisfaction. I like the cadence of the lines. Your hard sounding alliteration effects the mood of disgust or anger. There's almost an onomatopoetic seething sound and then a chuckle at the end. This is a strong cautionary tale. Your imagery is very vivid and at times amusing.
The reader will be drawn in to join you in your revery or to shrivel in their regret for their illusions of grandeur. I used to work at the abused women's network. It was amazing how one abuse woman felt she could do better than her abused acquaintance so she hooked up with the other abuser. Within the year she returning for being abused by the new boyfriend. This is well written. I am voting for this one. I also give this A+
Comment Written 13-May-2019
reply by the author on 13-May-2019
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Thanks so much for your very thorough review and support. I appreciate your effort. If I had a review nomination left it would be yours.
What a silly sad woman, to bring down on her life the suffering caused by the pattern of that boyfriend abuser's behaviour.
Comment from L. A. Stanley
I like that you didn't come right out and entitle your poem to name your deadly sin. I had to read in order to figure it out. At first, I thought you were going for wrath, then I saw the word envy twice and realized that is the one you chose. Having the last laugh is, to me, also a little of pride. This was well written and you used really good words to convey your envy and the fact that you got the last laugh. I especially like your first, fifth and last stanza. Good luck with the contest!
reply by the author on 13-May-2019
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I like that you didn't come right out and entitle your poem to name your deadly sin. I had to read in order to figure it out. At first, I thought you were going for wrath, then I saw the word envy twice and realized that is the one you chose. Having the last laugh is, to me, also a little of pride. This was well written and you used really good words to convey your envy and the fact that you got the last laugh. I especially like your first, fifth and last stanza. Good luck with the contest!
Comment Written 13-May-2019
reply by the author on 13-May-2019
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Thanks for your comments. I was a bit torn, too, concerning which sin I was actually writing about. It would seem that a few sins get tangled together in real life.
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That's actually what I like about it. It kept me guessing because it could be either or!
Comment from susand3022
Hello Author, Your offering on Envy is certainly unique, and I saw lots of sin in here! Aside from Envy, there was a ton of Lust going on and most of that was on the man... (it's always the man! lol) He started the whole thing!!! LOL ;)
reply by the author on 13-May-2019
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Hello Author, Your offering on Envy is certainly unique, and I saw lots of sin in here! Aside from Envy, there was a ton of Lust going on and most of that was on the man... (it's always the man! lol) He started the whole thing!!! LOL ;)
Comment Written 13-May-2019
reply by the author on 13-May-2019
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Yep, those men are responsible for a lot of pain (and lust).
Thanks for your review.
Comment from Raffaelina Lowcock
What goes around comes around. This is a very good poem and of course the ending is perfect. We have all been witness to these situations and we know if you wait long enough the shoe finally ends up on the other's foot. Love your post notes.
reply by the author on 13-May-2019
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What goes around comes around. This is a very good poem and of course the ending is perfect. We have all been witness to these situations and we know if you wait long enough the shoe finally ends up on the other's foot. Love your post notes.
Comment Written 13-May-2019
reply by the author on 13-May-2019
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Thanks for reviewing my poem. Your observations are very accurate.
Quite a few women will relate to this scenario. I had fun writing it.
Comment from davisr (Rhonda)
I love the message and delivery of your poem on the deadly sin on envy. It is, indeed, a terrible waste of time and energy, but I loved the last laugh. The man did to the temptress what was done to the one writing the poem.
My favorite line, "you feathered your nest
at the expense of mine."
Been there!
Great job,
Rhonda
reply by the author on 13-May-2019
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I love the message and delivery of your poem on the deadly sin on envy. It is, indeed, a terrible waste of time and energy, but I loved the last laugh. The man did to the temptress what was done to the one writing the poem.
My favorite line, "you feathered your nest
at the expense of mine."
Been there!
Great job,
Rhonda
Comment Written 13-May-2019
reply by the author on 13-May-2019
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I think this poem is resonating with a few women. There's a few guys who think they are 'trading up' but it doesn't work out for them, and man-stealers get the same treatment. HAAAHAAAHAAA!! And she got fat enough she had to waddle. HAAAHAAAHAAA!!
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Yay!!!
