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Comment from evesayshi
In my opinion, a stunning and "Exceptional" write in smoothly illustrative and fluid free verse - the read carried me to distant lands easily and with feelings of warm enjoyment. It is a captivating journey without physical limitation - you achieved your objective in this beautiful free verse poem...
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In my opinion, a stunning and "Exceptional" write in smoothly illustrative and fluid free verse - the read carried me to distant lands easily and with feelings of warm enjoyment. It is a captivating journey without physical limitation - you achieved your objective in this beautiful free verse poem...
Comment Written 13-May-2019
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Thanks again for all the support; I appreciate it! Write on! estory
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You are very welcome...Eve
Comment from Janice Canerdy
From the first line, your fine poem captured me and whisked me away to
places of mystery and beauty. You have made excellent use of specific details and enhanced your theme with the element of daydreaming.
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From the first line, your fine poem captured me and whisked me away to
places of mystery and beauty. You have made excellent use of specific details and enhanced your theme with the element of daydreaming.
Comment Written 13-May-2019
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Thanks so much for the excellent review and all your wonderful encouraging remarks. Its great to know this poem resonated with so many people in so many ways estory
Comment from dragonpoet
You can go anywhere and feel anything in your imagination. It is great to be able to travel in reality too. Traveling teaches you so much about others and yourselves. But wherever you go, it is always great to be home again.
Keep writing
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You can go anywhere and feel anything in your imagination. It is great to be able to travel in reality too. Traveling teaches you so much about others and yourselves. But wherever you go, it is always great to be home again.
Keep writing
dp
Comment Written 12-May-2019
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Thanks again for the excellent review and for your wonderful perspective on the poem and your experience of it estory
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You're very welcome.
dp
Comment from Ulla
Hi estory, I loved this free verse poem about travelling to remote places and dreaming about it. As you know by now, I've been fortunate to have been to all those places, and what your poem did for me was to give me a journey through all those memories. Thanks so much for doing that.
You are a master of the free verse with its pace and the imagery. All the best. Ulla:))
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Hi estory, I loved this free verse poem about travelling to remote places and dreaming about it. As you know by now, I've been fortunate to have been to all those places, and what your poem did for me was to give me a journey through all those memories. Thanks so much for doing that.
You are a master of the free verse with its pace and the imagery. All the best. Ulla:))
Comment Written 12-May-2019
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Thanks again for all the support and enjoying this poem estory
Comment from LisaMay
I held off reviewing this wonderful poem of yours until I had a 6. I love it for its imagination and its sweep of understanding that so resonates with me: the fragments of remembered images like postcards; the desire to step aside for contemplation and daydreaming.
Favourite lines:
We find ourselves here,
There, everywhere.
And nowhere.
(and many other lines to savour)
When I read this line (Stars studding the skies of the outback / Like castaways) I initially thought the castaways image spoke of a coastal environment and was not the right choice of word, but then I realised how even more appropriate a choice it was, because of the dislocation and desolation of the metaphoric 'inland sea' of the outback.
Perhaps this should be 'past'? - Passed the bearded men of Ipanema
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I held off reviewing this wonderful poem of yours until I had a 6. I love it for its imagination and its sweep of understanding that so resonates with me: the fragments of remembered images like postcards; the desire to step aside for contemplation and daydreaming.
Favourite lines:
We find ourselves here,
There, everywhere.
And nowhere.
(and many other lines to savour)
When I read this line (Stars studding the skies of the outback / Like castaways) I initially thought the castaways image spoke of a coastal environment and was not the right choice of word, but then I realised how even more appropriate a choice it was, because of the dislocation and desolation of the metaphoric 'inland sea' of the outback.
Perhaps this should be 'past'? - Passed the bearded men of Ipanema
Comment Written 12-May-2019
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Thanks so much again for the exceptional review and your specific comments on what worked so well for you in the poem estory
Comment from Tootsie55
This was a great meandering kind of poem. Well done. Mesmerising as well. Only one little correction suggested. Pas(t)[sed] the bearded men of Ipanema
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This was a great meandering kind of poem. Well done. Mesmerising as well. Only one little correction suggested. Pas(t)[sed] the bearded men of Ipanema
Comment Written 11-May-2019
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Thanks so much for the excellent review and for your wonderful comments supporting the poem estory
Comment from Irish Rain
Just beautiful estory.
My favorite line...
'like castaways.' I can
picture that in the vast
Australian skies.
I LOVE the thought of
travel. Unfortunately,
it's not financially
feasible...BUT...I travel
every night through my books.
Tonight...Texas...'The Last
Picture Show.'
LOVED THIS...but out of sixes!
Blessings...
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Just beautiful estory.
My favorite line...
'like castaways.' I can
picture that in the vast
Australian skies.
I LOVE the thought of
travel. Unfortunately,
it's not financially
feasible...BUT...I travel
every night through my books.
Tonight...Texas...'The Last
Picture Show.'
LOVED THIS...but out of sixes!
Blessings...
Comment Written 11-May-2019
reply by the author on 14-May-2019
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Thanks for the excellent review and for your wonderful perspective on the poem estory
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You're welcome!
Comment from C. Gale Burnett
As I read this wonderful three-part poem, I began to daydream. It was just today, more so than ever, that I was yearning for opportunities to travel, experience, touch, feel, taste all the unknowns of my dreams. I had to console myself, acknowledging it wouldn't likely happen here on this earthly plane (for me, anyway), but I would definitely see it all on the other side.
Part I was my absolute favorite, and, of course, the very last verse.
So much to ponder in this beautiful poem!
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As I read this wonderful three-part poem, I began to daydream. It was just today, more so than ever, that I was yearning for opportunities to travel, experience, touch, feel, taste all the unknowns of my dreams. I had to console myself, acknowledging it wouldn't likely happen here on this earthly plane (for me, anyway), but I would definitely see it all on the other side.
Part I was my absolute favorite, and, of course, the very last verse.
So much to ponder in this beautiful poem!
Comment Written 11-May-2019
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Thanks so much for the excellent review and for your perspective on the poem; glad it could take you away on the wings of imagination to all those places you dream of estory
Comment from Alcreator Litt Dear
Life is fulfilled and satisfactory if we appreciate the value of travelling and travel or visit new places, and or spend our time in Nature at different places, leaving our routine life; well said, well done. Write to inspire, readable for years -- DR ALCREATOR
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Life is fulfilled and satisfactory if we appreciate the value of travelling and travel or visit new places, and or spend our time in Nature at different places, leaving our routine life; well said, well done. Write to inspire, readable for years -- DR ALCREATOR
Comment Written 11-May-2019
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Thanks for the excellent review and all your support for this poem estory
Comment from royowen
I have traveled fairly extensively, and the euphoria you've created in your fine freestyle is coming close, of course, like pain, one can't really share the emotion, the aromas, the sounds, the visual impression that one captures, just hints of it. And it's best shared with a companion(s) But beautifully written, I felt some of the the parts highlighted. Good job, blessings, Roy
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I have traveled fairly extensively, and the euphoria you've created in your fine freestyle is coming close, of course, like pain, one can't really share the emotion, the aromas, the sounds, the visual impression that one captures, just hints of it. And it's best shared with a companion(s) But beautifully written, I felt some of the the parts highlighted. Good job, blessings, Roy
Comment Written 11-May-2019
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Thanks for the excellent review and for your wonderful perspective on the poem; it's not where you are at, but who you are with! estory
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Most welcome
