tanka prose (touchstone)
my mother and me39 total reviews
Comment from lyenochka
What a great time to share about your mother and how wonderful that her treasures are being treasured by you. I like that you didn't stress over the loss of the watering jug but instead felt the nearness of your mom while cleaning it up. Then your tanka shows us the sense of continuance from heaven to earth.
reply by the author on 15-May-2019
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What a great time to share about your mother and how wonderful that her treasures are being treasured by you. I like that you didn't stress over the loss of the watering jug but instead felt the nearness of your mom while cleaning it up. Then your tanka shows us the sense of continuance from heaven to earth.
Comment Written 10-May-2019
reply by the author on 15-May-2019
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Thank you for your thoughtful and encouraging review...
I always appreciate hearing from you.
Blessings
Janet
Comment from Gert sherwood
Category: General Poetry
Posted: May 10, 2019 Views: 12
my mother and me
"tanka prose (touchstone)" by Jmf4119
As I walk through my home this morning, I notice the walnut sewing chest in the den and the exquisite cut-glass vases in the curio cabinet. I sip a cup of tea from one of the delicate china tea cups and pause. I'm surrounded by all these beautiful treasures that my mother enjoyed. I sigh, aware that her treasures are now my treasures too.
Her green thumb is evident in her vast collection of house plants. She took pride in the beautiful hanging Hoya with its delicate scent and her array of dainty African violets that bloom brightly near the window. Her beloved Christmas cactus is full of buds again. I begin to water them with the plastic, maroon colored jug that she always used. I laugh to myself as I think, "this old thing looks like it came from the Dollar Store". Before I could turn around, it slips from my hand. As if in slow motion, it hit the ceramic floor. Its contents spilling and splashing across the room. I pick it up. But, it's too late. It cracks from top to bottom. Grabbing the mop to dry the floor, I remember other times and other messes that she and I cleaned up together. In this moment, I could almost feel her presence and I smile.
puffy clouds drift
across cerulean skies
echoes
life changes everyday
and yet it stays the same
Mother's Day Poetry Contes entry
Smiles mad thank you Lovely tanka prose about your lovely mother
Yes to me your title is very original and how nice
your prose conveys your message on the title and prose in a way that provides closure to your poem. Gert
reply by the author on 11-May-2019
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Category: General Poetry
Posted: May 10, 2019 Views: 12
my mother and me
"tanka prose (touchstone)" by Jmf4119
As I walk through my home this morning, I notice the walnut sewing chest in the den and the exquisite cut-glass vases in the curio cabinet. I sip a cup of tea from one of the delicate china tea cups and pause. I'm surrounded by all these beautiful treasures that my mother enjoyed. I sigh, aware that her treasures are now my treasures too.
Her green thumb is evident in her vast collection of house plants. She took pride in the beautiful hanging Hoya with its delicate scent and her array of dainty African violets that bloom brightly near the window. Her beloved Christmas cactus is full of buds again. I begin to water them with the plastic, maroon colored jug that she always used. I laugh to myself as I think, "this old thing looks like it came from the Dollar Store". Before I could turn around, it slips from my hand. As if in slow motion, it hit the ceramic floor. Its contents spilling and splashing across the room. I pick it up. But, it's too late. It cracks from top to bottom. Grabbing the mop to dry the floor, I remember other times and other messes that she and I cleaned up together. In this moment, I could almost feel her presence and I smile.
puffy clouds drift
across cerulean skies
echoes
life changes everyday
and yet it stays the same
Mother's Day Poetry Contes entry
Smiles mad thank you Lovely tanka prose about your lovely mother
Yes to me your title is very original and how nice
your prose conveys your message on the title and prose in a way that provides closure to your poem. Gert
Comment Written 10-May-2019
reply by the author on 11-May-2019
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Thank you Gert for your lovely review. I am so pleased that you enjoyed this one. It brought back so many memories as I wrote it.
Blessings and Happy Mother?s Day.
Janet
Comment from Earl Corp
So if I read your notes correctly, Touchstone is the name of the poem? I too live in my mother's house surrounded by her treasures. I don't feel nostalgic if I break something of hers, I do feel her presence, but it's not a good thing. Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 15-May-2019
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So if I read your notes correctly, Touchstone is the name of the poem? I too live in my mother's house surrounded by her treasures. I don't feel nostalgic if I break something of hers, I do feel her presence, but it's not a good thing. Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 10-May-2019
reply by the author on 15-May-2019
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Thank you Earl for your thoughtful review. so sorry that your memories of your mom are not happy ones...
I appreciate hearing from you.
Blessings
Janet
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
A very wel-written tanka prose for mother's day on Sunday, remembering your mother and her treasures that became yours to treasure for years to come.
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A very wel-written tanka prose for mother's day on Sunday, remembering your mother and her treasures that became yours to treasure for years to come.
Comment Written 10-May-2019
reply by the author on 11-May-2019
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Thank you Sandra for your thoughtful review. I always appreciate hearing from you.
Blessings and Happy Mother?s Day.
Janet
Comment from misscookie
What a lovely picturer of you and your mother
I could see the love and happiness you shared from the smiles on your face it was truly real
It's nice when memories yesterday are still in your mind when the pot fell to the floor it didn't broke your love fo reach other for it was an objcet
which can be replace not human.
Have a safe and blessed week-end.
Cookie
reply by the author on 11-May-2019
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What a lovely picturer of you and your mother
I could see the love and happiness you shared from the smiles on your face it was truly real
It's nice when memories yesterday are still in your mind when the pot fell to the floor it didn't broke your love fo reach other for it was an objcet
which can be replace not human.
Have a safe and blessed week-end.
Cookie
Comment Written 10-May-2019
reply by the author on 11-May-2019
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Thank you Cookie for your wonderful review.
Blessings and Happy Mother?s Day.
Janet
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Thank you , and do the same okay!
Comment from nancy_e_davis
This is wonderful Janet. Well done. I look at all my favorite things and I wonder if my girls will fight over them. I doubt it, but I know my grandchildren might want their remembrances. My Missy already got hers when she visited from California. Just in case...LOL This is a six, Dear. Nancy
reply by the author on 15-May-2019
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This is wonderful Janet. Well done. I look at all my favorite things and I wonder if my girls will fight over them. I doubt it, but I know my grandchildren might want their remembrances. My Missy already got hers when she visited from California. Just in case...LOL This is a six, Dear. Nancy
Comment Written 10-May-2019
reply by the author on 15-May-2019
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Thank you Nancy for this stellar review and special sixth star. I am so pleased that you liked it.
I was reading the other day about the things that the next generation "doesn't" want. I'm sure some of my remembrances will not be wanted. :)))))
Blessings
Janet
Comment from evesayshi
In my opinion, this is an "Exceptional" write - I care little about the form, only how I felt as I read. It was beautifully written, with the writer's feelings intact and warm enough to engage the reader. I can relate to your mother - I am now 80 years of age too, as of December 13, last year. This is compliant with the prompt, and I wish this writer best of luck in the contest...
reply by the author on 15-May-2019
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In my opinion, this is an "Exceptional" write - I care little about the form, only how I felt as I read. It was beautifully written, with the writer's feelings intact and warm enough to engage the reader. I can relate to your mother - I am now 80 years of age too, as of December 13, last year. This is compliant with the prompt, and I wish this writer best of luck in the contest...
Comment Written 10-May-2019
reply by the author on 15-May-2019
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Thank you for this stellar review and special sixth star. I am so pleased that you liked it.
It's always a pleasure to hear from you.
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Blessings
Janet
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You are very welcome, Janet, my pleasure, as always...Eve
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
This is a wonderful photo of you and your Mother and a lovely tribute you have posted and your words are heartfelt and warm. Your tanka is sad and poignant, life goes on despite our loss, I wish you luck with the Mother's Day contest, love Dolly x
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reply by the author on 11-May-2019
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This is a wonderful photo of you and your Mother and a lovely tribute you have posted and your words are heartfelt and warm. Your tanka is sad and poignant, life goes on despite our loss, I wish you luck with the Mother's Day contest, love Dolly x
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Comment Written 10-May-2019
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Thank you Dolly for the thoughtful review. I always appreciate hearing from you.
Happy Mother?s Day.
Janet
Comment from Sally Law
A beautiful memory and tanka prose of your mother. It's funny how certain cherished possessions evoke memories. I was cleaning out my closet yesterday and came across a scarf my mother gave me years ago because I admired it on her. I could still smell her perfume.
All my best and in the contest,
Sally
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reply by the author on 11-May-2019
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A beautiful memory and tanka prose of your mother. It's funny how certain cherished possessions evoke memories. I was cleaning out my closet yesterday and came across a scarf my mother gave me years ago because I admired it on her. I could still smell her perfume.
All my best and in the contest,
Sally
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Comment Written 10-May-2019
reply by the author on 11-May-2019
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Thank you Sally for the thoughtful review. It is funny how little things can trigger memories.
Blessings and Happy Mother?s Day.
Janet
