Where Are You?
a six-word poem20 total reviews
Comment from Janice Canerdy
You have made effective use of all your words in this profound, timely advice for everyone. If we want others to truly care for us, we must care for others.
reply by the author on 09-May-2019
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You have made effective use of all your words in this profound, timely advice for everyone. If we want others to truly care for us, we must care for others.
Comment Written 09-May-2019
reply by the author on 09-May-2019
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Thanks, Janice
Comment from susand3022
Hi Bill, sorry it's been taking me so long to get to all this, it's been quite a week! I really like this one a lot! It reminds me of when my son was small, we would read to each other in bed every night, in kindergarten, he began reading to me instead. We did this through most of the 4th grade... almost to the end when he declared that his grandparents would be living there not. A fun write :)
reply by the author on 09-May-2019
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Hi Bill, sorry it's been taking me so long to get to all this, it's been quite a week! I really like this one a lot! It reminds me of when my son was small, we would read to each other in bed every night, in kindergarten, he began reading to me instead. We did this through most of the 4th grade... almost to the end when he declared that his grandparents would be living there not. A fun write :)
Comment Written 09-May-2019
reply by the author on 09-May-2019
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Thanks, Susan. We?re reading with our granddaughter now. Feels good.
Comment from Jeffrey L. Michaux
This is an awesome message and these are definately words to live by. You definately always have to watch out for them share, and be there as you've so eloquently stated. I like this and enjoyed reading it. Well done!
reply by the author on 08-May-2019
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This is an awesome message and these are definately words to live by. You definately always have to watch out for them share, and be there as you've so eloquently stated. I like this and enjoyed reading it. Well done!
Comment Written 08-May-2019
reply by the author on 08-May-2019
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Thank you, Jeffrey.
Comment from brenda faye curtis
You've successfully summed up what every human being needs from every other human being on the planet. Simple words, but powerful and beautiful. I hope you do well in this contest, Bill.
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You've successfully summed up what every human being needs from every other human being on the planet. Simple words, but powerful and beautiful. I hope you do well in this contest, Bill.
Comment Written 08-May-2019
reply by the author on 08-May-2019
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Thank you, Brenda, for the terrific review. Bill
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You're welcome, Bill.
Comment from Willie P. Smith
Excellent six word poem. Your method of rhyme is perfect. You said a lot in six little words. Very good and potent advice for everyone to follow. Good work.
reply by the author on 08-May-2019
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Excellent six word poem. Your method of rhyme is perfect. You said a lot in six little words. Very good and potent advice for everyone to follow. Good work.
Comment Written 08-May-2019
reply by the author on 08-May-2019
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Thank you, Willie, for the excellent review. Bill
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
A very well-written six-word poem about the time that our parents cannot remember who they are anymore, will we care enough to remember how much they cared for us?
reply by the author on 08-May-2019
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A very well-written six-word poem about the time that our parents cannot remember who they are anymore, will we care enough to remember how much they cared for us?
Comment Written 08-May-2019
reply by the author on 08-May-2019
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Thank you, Sandra.
Comment from nancy_e_davis
Good advice. I wonder where I was much of my life.
I can't recall a lot of it. It seems I was always
focusing ahead. Maybe that was a good thing but
later in life I am tormented by some memories.
This is a good entry my friend. Good luck. Nancy:)
reply by the author on 08-May-2019
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Good advice. I wonder where I was much of my life.
I can't recall a lot of it. It seems I was always
focusing ahead. Maybe that was a good thing but
later in life I am tormented by some memories.
This is a good entry my friend. Good luck. Nancy:)
Comment Written 08-May-2019
reply by the author on 08-May-2019
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Thanks, Nancy
Comment from Shirley E Kennedy
Who would have thought six small words with such powerful connotations would need to be written as a reminder to all of just how important keeping in touch with others still is in our modern society.
I like the use of rhyme as it seems to also act as a constant reminder of our responsibilities to each other
A very thoughtful and thought provoking contest entry.
Blessings
Shirley
reply by the author on 08-May-2019
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Who would have thought six small words with such powerful connotations would need to be written as a reminder to all of just how important keeping in touch with others still is in our modern society.
I like the use of rhyme as it seems to also act as a constant reminder of our responsibilities to each other
A very thoughtful and thought provoking contest entry.
Blessings
Shirley
Comment Written 08-May-2019
reply by the author on 08-May-2019
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Thank you, Shirley, for the terrific review.
Comment from LisaMay
Your lines here are deja vu to me. Many years ago I was involved with a local child welfare service and had to come up with a t-shirt slogan. So it was:
Care
Share
Be There
How can I give you anything but positive praise for this!!!
reply by the author on 08-May-2019
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Your lines here are deja vu to me. Many years ago I was involved with a local child welfare service and had to come up with a t-shirt slogan. So it was:
Care
Share
Be There
How can I give you anything but positive praise for this!!!
Comment Written 08-May-2019
reply by the author on 08-May-2019
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Thanks, Lisa. Great minds, right?
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That's it!
Comment from Spitfire
The thought is a significant one, but all that punctuation turns me off, especially the exclamation point. My feeling is that is a quiet poem, not one that shouts. At any rate, I'd change the first semi-colon to a colon and nothing after share and care. Just my take on it. I'm not an expert on this genre.
reply by the author on 07-May-2019
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The thought is a significant one, but all that punctuation turns me off, especially the exclamation point. My feeling is that is a quiet poem, not one that shouts. At any rate, I'd change the first semi-colon to a colon and nothing after share and care. Just my take on it. I'm not an expert on this genre.
Comment Written 07-May-2019
reply by the author on 07-May-2019
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Thanks, Shari. You are the second person to nix the punctuation. I've removed it all and centered the text. It looks better.
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Glad I wasn't the only one.
