Frantic Waterfall
Waterfall in a hurry.54 total reviews
Comment from Gert sherwood
Hello livelylinda
I like your natural way of how you write about the beauty of a water fall gushing down a steep hill into a serene lake gives a very vivid picture within ones mind with out your picture
Gert
reply by the author on 25-Feb-2020
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Hello livelylinda
I like your natural way of how you write about the beauty of a water fall gushing down a steep hill into a serene lake gives a very vivid picture within ones mind with out your picture
Gert
Comment Written 03-Jun-2019
reply by the author on 25-Feb-2020
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Thank you Gert. Linda
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You are welcome livelylinda
(Linda)
Gert
Comment from Stephen Force
Nicely done, both artwork and verse worked well together. The meter and rhythm is also well done. overall this is a very nice poem. I think it might have drawn a little more imagery out of a tumbling cascade of water, but it's really nice.
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reply by the author on 10-May-2019
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Nicely done, both artwork and verse worked well together. The meter and rhythm is also well done. overall this is a very nice poem. I think it might have drawn a little more imagery out of a tumbling cascade of water, but it's really nice.
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Comment Written 09-May-2019
reply by the author on 10-May-2019
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Stephen: interesting how you are the only one of 60+ reviews who thinks there should be more imagery. I agree with you, actually. However, others thought it brought a very vivid picture to their minds. Thanks for reading and your input! Linda
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It was a really nice poem. You started with a nice metaphor"She rushes downhill..." I guess I was hoping you would have drawn more imagery along those lines. You know what they say there is one in every...:-)
Comment from L. A. Stanley
Very creative words paint a pretty picture of a waterfall, here. I don't know what pattern you used in your poetry, but it's pretty in that each stanza has a different syllable count, while still belonging with the same amount of lines (3). I also like that you rhymed your first and third lines. It's almost like you sat and watched a waterfall while writing this and these words just flowed out!
reply by the author on 10-May-2019
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Very creative words paint a pretty picture of a waterfall, here. I don't know what pattern you used in your poetry, but it's pretty in that each stanza has a different syllable count, while still belonging with the same amount of lines (3). I also like that you rhymed your first and third lines. It's almost like you sat and watched a waterfall while writing this and these words just flowed out!
Comment Written 09-May-2019
reply by the author on 10-May-2019
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L.A.: I write a lot of free verse so rarely use a 'pattern'. I did sit and watch a video of a waterfall and the words flowed from that. I had to be careful because I already wrote a poem about a waterfall (which had more detail due to being a larger waterfall) and didn't want to duplicate anything. Thanks for reading and sharing your thoughts about this poem with me. I appreciate your time. Linda
Comment from rspoet
Hello Linda,
You've written an excellent poem on the waterfall
with solid rhymes, nice alliteration, and wonderful imagery
to go with the personification.
Water always seeks the the path of least resistance,
no matter who or what is in the way.
Well done
Robert
reply by the author on 10-May-2019
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Hello Linda,
You've written an excellent poem on the waterfall
with solid rhymes, nice alliteration, and wonderful imagery
to go with the personification.
Water always seeks the the path of least resistance,
no matter who or what is in the way.
Well done
Robert
Comment Written 09-May-2019
reply by the author on 10-May-2019
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Thank you my writing friend. Linda
Comment from Pam (respa)
-Very nice image, Linda.
-A very good poem with
effective imagery and rhyme.
-Waterfalls are so beautiful,
yet so powerful, too.
-You paint a vivid word
picture about them.
-The conclusion is excellent
with a very descriptive first line,
and a peaceful resolution with the last.
-Thanks for sharing.
reply by the author on 10-May-2019
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-Very nice image, Linda.
-A very good poem with
effective imagery and rhyme.
-Waterfalls are so beautiful,
yet so powerful, too.
-You paint a vivid word
picture about them.
-The conclusion is excellent
with a very descriptive first line,
and a peaceful resolution with the last.
-Thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 09-May-2019
reply by the author on 10-May-2019
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Pam: thank you for sharing your insights. Linda
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You are welcome, Linda.
Comment from Eric M McChesney
An excellent write! Great imagery was found within your tranquil words. Your smooth tone really resonated with me. The force of the water, the damage caused by the tremendous force, yet, you told the story with such ease, just amazing.
reply by the author on 10-May-2019
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An excellent write! Great imagery was found within your tranquil words. Your smooth tone really resonated with me. The force of the water, the damage caused by the tremendous force, yet, you told the story with such ease, just amazing.
Comment Written 09-May-2019
reply by the author on 10-May-2019
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Thank you, Eric, for reading and commenting. Linda
Comment from Roxanna Andrews
Waterfalls are truly amazing. God has created so many wonderful things for us to enjoy. Well done, I saw no errors and the picture is great. Thanks for sharing you talent with us. Roxie
reply by the author on 10-May-2019
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Waterfalls are truly amazing. God has created so many wonderful things for us to enjoy. Well done, I saw no errors and the picture is great. Thanks for sharing you talent with us. Roxie
Comment Written 09-May-2019
reply by the author on 10-May-2019
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Roxie: thank you for reading and sharing your thoughts with me. Linda
Comment from Tootie
I really like your choice of descriptive words in this poem. It makes me visualize the scene. Great photo chosen. Love the title. Well done!
Blessings, Cathy
reply by the author on 10-May-2019
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I really like your choice of descriptive words in this poem. It makes me visualize the scene. Great photo chosen. Love the title. Well done!
Blessings, Cathy
Comment Written 09-May-2019
reply by the author on 10-May-2019
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Thank you, Cathy. Linda
Comment from Lobber
Hi livelylinda,
You certainly made a waterfall come to life. I love your use of alliteration through the piece...the thin trees tender...frothy frantic foam with few fallen branches...steady spill in a serene home...Thank you. - Lobber
reply by the author on 10-May-2019
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Hi livelylinda,
You certainly made a waterfall come to life. I love your use of alliteration through the piece...the thin trees tender...frothy frantic foam with few fallen branches...steady spill in a serene home...Thank you. - Lobber
Comment Written 09-May-2019
reply by the author on 10-May-2019
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Thank you for reading, commenting and for the six stars. Linda
Comment from Raul1
Excellent poem! I like how you structured this poem. The lines rhyme and are correct. This is how a poem should look like. Excellent work! Thanks for sharing!
reply by the author on 10-May-2019
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Excellent poem! I like how you structured this poem. The lines rhyme and are correct. This is how a poem should look like. Excellent work! Thanks for sharing!
Comment Written 08-May-2019
reply by the author on 10-May-2019
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Raul: I write a lot of free verse and let the words carry the form which is not a neat form. But, sometimes I provide a little structure, only if it fits the poem. Linda
