Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell

Excellent

I'd already read the prologue, so now I'm into this part. I'm hoping they are going to the island to find out what happened with Conner, Baker, Joseph and Tim. Hoping that Conner is dead. We now have Kontroz in the play. So let's see what he's up to. :)) Sandra xxx

 Comment Written 14-Feb-2021

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reply by the author on 15-Feb-2021

I liked this new character. He was to be an antihero with a moral side that re@ches as far as a messiah complex.

Comment from Raffaelina Lowcock

Excellent

There seems to be a number of communications here that are not understandable and so I assume they are coded messages of a covert
nature. Until there is the definite delineation of what is happening it is hard
to review other than to say it is all well written.

Ralf

 Comment Written 17-Dec-2020

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reply by the author on 18-Dec-2020

Ultimately the code is irrelevant other than we know they know.

Comment from Shirley E Kennedy

Excellent

It is clear you have a depth of understanding of military language, protocols and expectations and have transferred this well to the story now unfolding.
This book follows on seamlessly from your previous one and offers
intrigue and meticulous detail.
Blessings
Shirley

 Comment Written 16-Jul-2019

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reply by the author on 16-Jul-2019

Thank you so much, Shirley. Bill

Comment from kahpot

Excellent

Yes another great read of intrigue, I got it wrong last review it was uh.. CC addressing Connor not Pipes, I can feel the action coming the more I read****kahpot

 Comment Written 15-Jul-2019

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reply by the author on 15-Jul-2019

Thanks, kahpot

Comment from brenda faye curtis

Excellent

I enjoy all in intrigue and coded language of this type of story, but I guess maybe it's a little too well coded. I'm having just a bit of trouble interpreting what some of the obscure statements might mean. Perhaps it will become clear later.

 Comment Written 08-May-2019

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reply by the author on 08-May-2019

I see what you mean, but I hoped to not have to over-explain some of the jargon that becomes apparent as the action goes along. I?ll try to either comment on, insert notes, or avoid too much coded information.

reply by brenda faye curtis on 11-May-2019

Ok, Bill.

Comment from lyenochka

Excellent

These are interesting characters. The Sam character is a smart one. I can imagine them but could you have a list of the characters in the beginning or at the end like you did before in the Baker's Dozen?

 Comment Written 07-May-2019

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reply by the author on 07-May-2019

Thanks for taking a look. I?ll include a li#t.

Comment from susand3022

Good

Hi Bill, I can't think of anything you have to correct, so far so good... but... This is a very, very short chapter. I realize people seem to frown on length, but I kind of feel like this chapter was over before it began... this is my only criticism. I kind of feel like someone handed me half of a mini-burger bite... and I'm hungry! LOL,
You should really increase this by about 3 to 4 times the length for a decent chapter. Don't be intimidated by people who screech about things being too long... (when they do, ask them when the last time they read a real book was) ;)
I'm looking forward to watching this come to life! :) Happy writing :)

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 Comment Written 06-May-2019

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reply by the author on 06-May-2019

Thanks, Susan. Once I feel a transition point, I go to the next chapter. Longer chapters will emerge as the action rises.

Comment from Shirley McLain

Excellent

Well written chapter. Very cryptic with all the code language used. It was active and held my interest until the end. You did a very good job. Have a great afternoon. Shirley

 Comment Written 06-May-2019

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reply by the author on 06-May-2019

Thank you, Shirley.

Comment from Y. M. Roger

Excellent

Okay, so we're off and running again...Sam a female character and now this Kontroz dude... :) :) :) Bring it on, Sir Bill! :) ;) Look forward to the next installment! :) :) Yvette ;)

 Comment Written 06-May-2019

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reply by the author on 06-May-2019

Hope it goes well.

Comment from Earl Corp

Excellent

So we're looking at an epilogue of Baker's Dozen. It seems that this is going to be full of twists and turns and not as easy to follow as the first one. Can't wait for the next installment.

 Comment Written 05-May-2019

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reply by the author on 05-May-2019

I will attempt to flashback to prequel story line as well as Baker?s Dozen story thaw was unseen.