A Fate Uncertain (A Sonnet)
Acrostic Poem Contest Entry22 total reviews
Comment from LisaMay
This is deep and beautiful. A tale of self-sacrifice for the greater cause, breaching personal values to achieve it. The sonnet flow has an olde world feel to it, with a futuristic storyline... an interesting blend that works really well. And to make it an acrostic as well, my gosh, what a challenge so successfully met.
(Very suitable picture, but I hope we never have to live in domes.)
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This is deep and beautiful. A tale of self-sacrifice for the greater cause, breaching personal values to achieve it. The sonnet flow has an olde world feel to it, with a futuristic storyline... an interesting blend that works really well. And to make it an acrostic as well, my gosh, what a challenge so successfully met.
(Very suitable picture, but I hope we never have to live in domes.)
Comment Written 04-May-2019
reply by the author on 05-May-2019
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Thank you, Lisa, for this awesome review. Yes, this was challenging but I had a little farmer on my shoulder guiding me through this. An acrostic sonnet. Not difficult enough. I had to pile on time travel as well. LOL!! I am happy you liked it! Lynda
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I loved it and I was impressed. Great mentor you have.
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He's a task master but he makes me laugh so I'm keeping him for the time being. We need a BS session soon. Miss you.
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It's coming up for 2am here so I'm off to bed. Let's have a rant tomorrow. xx
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Copy that. It's a date.
Comment from Coco Jane
Acrostic AND a sonnet-- that's quite a challenge!
It all works except "Each traveler of time cannot return." Somehow "each" seems out of place. Consider using "Earth's" instead; or, is the narrator on Celdon? Maybe say that each time traveler faces extinction (yeah, you will need to make it fit the rhyme and meter.
Powerful story.
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Acrostic AND a sonnet-- that's quite a challenge!
It all works except "Each traveler of time cannot return." Somehow "each" seems out of place. Consider using "Earth's" instead; or, is the narrator on Celdon? Maybe say that each time traveler faces extinction (yeah, you will need to make it fit the rhyme and meter.
Powerful story.
Comment Written 04-May-2019
reply by the author on 05-May-2019
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Thanks, Coco. Every word and syllable and thought (not to mention even the letter) has to be considered along with story. You are right. Big challenge. Thanks for the detailed comments. I will consider your suggestions. Much appreciated. Lynda
Comment from royowen
I suspect this poem is dedicated to a writing theme you either have planned, or indeed, have already written. A Beautfully written sonnet, tetrametrically timed nicely, with appropriate meter, rhyming and language to suit the theme. Beautifully and skilfully scribed to accomadate the sonnet format, well done, blessings, Roy
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I suspect this poem is dedicated to a writing theme you either have planned, or indeed, have already written. A Beautfully written sonnet, tetrametrically timed nicely, with appropriate meter, rhyming and language to suit the theme. Beautifully and skilfully scribed to accomadate the sonnet format, well done, blessings, Roy
Comment Written 04-May-2019
reply by the author on 05-May-2019
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Thank you, Roy, for your detailed comments. They are lovely and I appreciate you taking the time to read this. Thanks for this awesome review! Lynda
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Well done
Comment from evesayshi
In my opinion, a dramatic write, well constructed and rendered in fluid rhyming verse, in perfect compliance with the prompt - best of luck in the contest...
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In my opinion, a dramatic write, well constructed and rendered in fluid rhyming verse, in perfect compliance with the prompt - best of luck in the contest...
Comment Written 04-May-2019
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Thank you so much for this great review! I appreciate you taking the time to read and comment on this. I'm glad you liked it. Lynda
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You are very welcome, Lynda, my pleasure...Eve
Comment from misscookie
Wow!
This is deep I like the artwork you choose to go with write
I think your work is out of sight
You captured my attention from the first line to the last
this is what I call a food for thought write
Thank you for sharing
Cookie
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Wow!
This is deep I like the artwork you choose to go with write
I think your work is out of sight
You captured my attention from the first line to the last
this is what I call a food for thought write
Thank you for sharing
Cookie
Comment Written 04-May-2019
reply by the author on 05-May-2019
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Wow! Thank you so much for this. I appreciate your detailed comments and I'm so glad you liked this! Lynda
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It was my pleasure
Cookie
Comment from Beri Bee
I love this sonnet! Celdon is protected! The picture helps the reader have a sense of Celdon, but the sonnet is beautiful and works with or without it! Well done! Choose destiny without regret!
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I love this sonnet! Celdon is protected! The picture helps the reader have a sense of Celdon, but the sonnet is beautiful and works with or without it! Well done! Choose destiny without regret!
Comment Written 04-May-2019
reply by the author on 05-May-2019
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Thank you, Beri Bee (so cute!) for this great review. I appreciate you taking the time to read and comment on this. Many thanks. Lynda
Comment from DragonSkulls
Wow, excellent piece, Lynda. I've done a few of these myself and find them quite challenging. (Acrostic Sonnet) Let alone the fact that it tells a whole little intriguing story. There's even a turn in the third stanza, nice. She gives her life by killing her bloodline because he creates this killing virus. I loved it. Great work. I wish you the very best in the contest. Have a great day. Oh, plus the killer pic is perfect.
DS
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Wow, excellent piece, Lynda. I've done a few of these myself and find them quite challenging. (Acrostic Sonnet) Let alone the fact that it tells a whole little intriguing story. There's even a turn in the third stanza, nice. She gives her life by killing her bloodline because he creates this killing virus. I loved it. Great work. I wish you the very best in the contest. Have a great day. Oh, plus the killer pic is perfect.
DS
Comment Written 04-May-2019
reply by the author on 05-May-2019
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Thank you Mr. Skulls for this killer review. Your comments and stars are greatly appreciated. As I was highly inspired (and motivated) to post this, it is of great delight to me that you enjoyed this. All credit is due to my own personal thesaurus, rhymer and artist. These things and I work well together. I'm glad (and relieved) that you are pleased. Thanks again. Lynda
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
A very well-written acrostic poem about an uncertain fate that will be met somehow. We will only know it us here when it starts to affect all of us, then there is nothing left we can do to stop its course.
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A very well-written acrostic poem about an uncertain fate that will be met somehow. We will only know it us here when it starts to affect all of us, then there is nothing left we can do to stop its course.
Comment Written 04-May-2019
reply by the author on 05-May-2019
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Well said. Thank you so much, Sandra, for this great review! I appreciate you taking the time to read and comment on this. I'm glad you liked it. Lynda
Comment from Alcreator Litt Dear
Informative, educative and thoughtful is this acrostic poem; reasoned is the taletelling, concept of the story has clarity, fate is ever uncertain; we do not live in isolation but in others; well said, well done. Thanks for sharing; write legible to inspire, readable for years -- DR ALCREATOR
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Informative, educative and thoughtful is this acrostic poem; reasoned is the taletelling, concept of the story has clarity, fate is ever uncertain; we do not live in isolation but in others; well said, well done. Thanks for sharing; write legible to inspire, readable for years -- DR ALCREATOR
Comment Written 04-May-2019
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Thank you so much, Doctor, for this great review! Your detailed notes are lovely. I appreciate you taking the time to read and comment on this. I'm glad you liked it. Lynda
Comment from 24chas
This was really a good read, Lyndas. I think the sonnet form was the perfect one to use for telling this tale. Nice job on the acrostic as well. The use of the letters wasn't forced and it made sense. Good job and good luck in the contest.
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This was really a good read, Lyndas. I think the sonnet form was the perfect one to use for telling this tale. Nice job on the acrostic as well. The use of the letters wasn't forced and it made sense. Good job and good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 04-May-2019
reply by the author on 05-May-2019
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Thank you so much for this great review! I appreciate you taking the time to read and comment on this. I'm glad you liked it. Lynda
