A Fate Uncertain (A Sonnet)
Acrostic Poem Contest Entry22 total reviews
Comment from dragonpoet
I like the short fantasy story in a rhyming acrostic. It tells of time travel to rewrite history to erase problems caused. She chooses to die so everyone else can live
Good luck in the contest and keep writing
dragonpoet
reply by the author on 06-May-2019
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I like the short fantasy story in a rhyming acrostic. It tells of time travel to rewrite history to erase problems caused. She chooses to die so everyone else can live
Good luck in the contest and keep writing
dragonpoet
Comment Written 06-May-2019
reply by the author on 06-May-2019
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Much appreciated Mr. DragonPoet! (Love the profile name) Time travel and the prime directive are tricky at best. I thought if I only messed with one lineage I could get away with it. Lol! Thank you so much for these great comments and for taking the time to read and review this. Lynda
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You're welcome.
Can you tell me why everyone assumes I'm male from my screen name?
Joan
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A thousand pardons! That was so ignorant of me. Soooo sorry. Probably because I know Dragonskulls he is definitely a boy thing. Maybe because dragons are perceived as fierce, warrior beasts. You know...male. LOL I should know better. One of the first things I posted here was of a female dragon going back to her old lair to beg for forgiveness from her mate who she had left. I don't see a profile pic for you so I just assumed your were a man. And when you assume, you make an ASS of U and ME. Very sorry. Other people think you are a man? Oddly, that doesn't make me feel any better. Apologies. Lynda
Comment from Gail Denham
Hmmm interesting thought about wiping out the plague before it began - by going back in time. It's certainly held the interest of millions of folks for centuries. And one would wish they could un-born Hitler for example and save all those Jews and others who suffered. But...
reply by the author on 05-May-2019
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Hmmm interesting thought about wiping out the plague before it began - by going back in time. It's certainly held the interest of millions of folks for centuries. And one would wish they could un-born Hitler for example and save all those Jews and others who suffered. But...
Comment Written 05-May-2019
reply by the author on 05-May-2019
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Wow! That's what I was thinking of while I was creating this. I tried to tamper with history and fate as little as possible so I had her ancestor be the one who created this virus. Maybe the damage would stick to one lineage.
That being said, I thank you for "getting it" and for taking the time to send your insightful comments. Much appreciated. Lynda
PS. I received 2 duplicate reviews from you just now. Let's see what happens when I send this reply.
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Why does this happen. I only sent one review - why on earth do two appear. This has happened several times. and I know for sure I only read your poem once. it was interesting.
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Thanks again! Twice! LOL!!
Comment from Randa Dayle
I love science fiction fantasy, and how you put it in a poem is great! I can see why it got recognized. Good job! May you continue to share your talents with us!
reply by the author on 05-May-2019
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I love science fiction fantasy, and how you put it in a poem is great! I can see why it got recognized. Good job! May you continue to share your talents with us!
Comment Written 05-May-2019
reply by the author on 05-May-2019
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Thank you Randa! I'm so glad you liked this. This is my genre as well. Great place to dive into. Thanks for taking the time to read and review. Lovely comments. Much appreciated! Lynda
Comment from Heather Knight
Hi,
Is Celdon a made-up name?
I found your poem interesting and very original. The rhyme is fluid and natural.
Thanks for sharing and good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 05-May-2019
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Hi,
Is Celdon a made-up name?
I found your poem interesting and very original. The rhyme is fluid and natural.
Thanks for sharing and good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 05-May-2019
reply by the author on 05-May-2019
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Yes, this whole write was fictional including the name of this doomed and domed city. I appreciate your lovey comments very much, Maria, and thank you for your time to read and review this. Lynda
PS. Love your animated profile pic!
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I'm glad you like the pic.
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I'm a Grandma of eight. Things like this are delightful to me even though my grandkids are much older now and could care less about animated toys. But I still love them. It's soooo cute!
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Me too. I think I never grew up...
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Copy that. LOL!
Comment from Ross E Silke
A very interesting picture and presentation. I like how you build an acrostic within the sonnet for an extra bonus. It flows radically well and is insightful and meaningful, and valuable to both the reader and the writer it appears. A lovely gem that shines bright like the picture. A solid entry. It's complex and might take a second read to absorb it all, but it's intricate and detailed with lots of descriptions as should be in a worthy poem. Great
reply by the author on 05-May-2019
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A very interesting picture and presentation. I like how you build an acrostic within the sonnet for an extra bonus. It flows radically well and is insightful and meaningful, and valuable to both the reader and the writer it appears. A lovely gem that shines bright like the picture. A solid entry. It's complex and might take a second read to absorb it all, but it's intricate and detailed with lots of descriptions as should be in a worthy poem. Great
Comment Written 05-May-2019
reply by the author on 05-May-2019
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Wow. Thank you, Ross. There is no higher compliment than to receive a beautiful review like this. Can't tell you how much I appreciate it. It was a strenuous write but comments like this make it all worth it. I thank you again. Lynda
Comment from duchessofdrumborg
"A Fate Uncertain" (A Sonnet), is an extremely well-written and thought-provoking piece. To me, this is a six, but unfortunately I only have fives left. You KEEP WRITING and I'll KEEP READING. I look forward to seeing your next post.
reply by the author on 05-May-2019
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"A Fate Uncertain" (A Sonnet), is an extremely well-written and thought-provoking piece. To me, this is a six, but unfortunately I only have fives left. You KEEP WRITING and I'll KEEP READING. I look forward to seeing your next post.
Comment Written 05-May-2019
reply by the author on 05-May-2019
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Duchess of Drumborg? LOVE IT!!
Thank you, My Lady, for these lovely comments. And I thank you for taking the time to read and review this poem. Much appreciated! Lynda
Dear Lynda,
Thank you for your very kind review.
I'm pleased you LOVED IT!
Take care and God bless you,
the Duchess :))) :)))
Comment from Possummagic
I don't know much about sonnets but this is beautifully written Arcrostic poetry and I really enjoyed it. Good luck in the contest I wish you well. PM
reply by the author on 05-May-2019
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I don't know much about sonnets but this is beautifully written Arcrostic poetry and I really enjoyed it. Good luck in the contest I wish you well. PM
Comment Written 04-May-2019
reply by the author on 05-May-2019
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Thank you so much, PM, for this lovely review! Much appreciated and I'm glad you like it. Lynda
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It was lovely.PM
Comment from Bill Schott
This acrostic sonnet, A FATE UNCERTAIN, has both the proper format for the Shakespearean sonnet and the vertical theme representative of the titular acrostic. Through the poem we here a tale of time travel and global disease, which seems to have a solution requiring severe personal sacrifice. Interesting.
reply by the author on 05-May-2019
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This acrostic sonnet, A FATE UNCERTAIN, has both the proper format for the Shakespearean sonnet and the vertical theme representative of the titular acrostic. Through the poem we here a tale of time travel and global disease, which seems to have a solution requiring severe personal sacrifice. Interesting.
Comment Written 04-May-2019
reply by the author on 05-May-2019
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Thank you, Mr. Schott, for "getting it"! Your comments have captured the essence of what I posted. There is no greater compliment than this. I appreciate this immensely. Lynda
Comment from Gypsymooncat
No sixes left sadly :( This just flowed and undulated down the page and I enjoyed every word. I don't know the story of celdon, so will Google it rather than make a dumbass comment that could either make me sound intelligent or incredibly dense lol.
For structure and flow, as said above, this is definitely worth a six!
reply by the author on 05-May-2019
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No sixes left sadly :( This just flowed and undulated down the page and I enjoyed every word. I don't know the story of celdon, so will Google it rather than make a dumbass comment that could either make me sound intelligent or incredibly dense lol.
For structure and flow, as said above, this is definitely worth a six!
Comment Written 04-May-2019
reply by the author on 05-May-2019
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It was very late last night (rather early this morning) when I first read this. Tired and tipsy. I loved this review!! I started laughing and couldn't stop. This is now my favorite review ever! No, Celdon has no story or history because it's not real. You're not going to get any results googling it. Jeez, maybe you will. Who knows? Loved the "sound intelligent or incredibly dense". I feel like I'm reviewing your review. LOL!!!
Thank you, Miss Gypsy! I'm sooooo glad that you liked this. And 5 stars is just fine when accompanied by a review like this. THANK YOU. Lynda
Comment from Jeffrey L. Michaux
I like this futuristic work that you've penned here. I believe that this can be developed into a continuing saga, or perhaps a book. I like what you've done with this and enjoyed reading this well written work. Well done!
reply by the author on 05-May-2019
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I like this futuristic work that you've penned here. I believe that this can be developed into a continuing saga, or perhaps a book. I like what you've done with this and enjoyed reading this well written work. Well done!
Comment Written 04-May-2019
reply by the author on 05-May-2019
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Thank you, Jeffrey! Yes, it was a struggle to keep this huge story in my head pared down to 14 lines. So glad you liked this. I appreciate your time and these lovely comments. Lynda
