I Stand Forgotten
A Sad Horse19 total reviews
Comment from Gail Denham
Very well done - the rhyming is good. And the subject universal. With any luck, they'll have a yard sale and this poor rocking horse will have a new group of kids who will appreciate him.
Nice poem, good luck with the contest.
reply by the author on 02-May-2019
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Very well done - the rhyming is good. And the subject universal. With any luck, they'll have a yard sale and this poor rocking horse will have a new group of kids who will appreciate him.
Nice poem, good luck with the contest.
Comment Written 02-May-2019
reply by the author on 02-May-2019
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Thank you. I appreciate your time in reviewing.
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
A very well-written rhyming poem about the history of the rocking horse that gives the children of the house great delight but now they are all gone and rocking horse is alone, nobody comes to ride him anymore.
reply by the author on 02-May-2019
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A very well-written rhyming poem about the history of the rocking horse that gives the children of the house great delight but now they are all gone and rocking horse is alone, nobody comes to ride him anymore.
Comment Written 02-May-2019
reply by the author on 02-May-2019
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Thank you. I'm glad you saw what I was trying to say.
Comment from Pearl Edwards
I always wanted a rocking horse when I was young and not so young, and I love your poem in well rhymed couplets about this rocking horse that sits alone and still. Nice one
cheers,
valda
reply by the author on 02-May-2019
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I always wanted a rocking horse when I was young and not so young, and I love your poem in well rhymed couplets about this rocking horse that sits alone and still. Nice one
cheers,
valda
Comment Written 02-May-2019
reply by the author on 02-May-2019
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It's not too late for us to have a rocking horse. I say let's get us one. Thank you for reviewing.
Comment from Beri Bee
This is a sweet and mournful little lament by a toy! It reminds me so much of the skin horse in the Velveteen Rabit. If you don't know the story, that's a huge compliment! Well done! A wonderful take on the prompt!
reply by the author on 02-May-2019
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This is a sweet and mournful little lament by a toy! It reminds me so much of the skin horse in the Velveteen Rabit. If you don't know the story, that's a huge compliment! Well done! A wonderful take on the prompt!
Comment Written 02-May-2019
reply by the author on 02-May-2019
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It is indeed a wonderful compliment. I love the Velveteen Rabbit! Thank you so much.
Comment from Jannypan (Jan)
You did a great job, Mystery Author, with the contest prompt. I could 'see' the little rocking horse even if no picture had been included. Your words are descriptive and create great imagery. Great job, on the super rhymes. Your lines flow smoothly and tell a great ,but poignant, little story. Thanks for sharing and best wishes in the contest. Jan
reply by the author on 01-May-2019
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You did a great job, Mystery Author, with the contest prompt. I could 'see' the little rocking horse even if no picture had been included. Your words are descriptive and create great imagery. Great job, on the super rhymes. Your lines flow smoothly and tell a great ,but poignant, little story. Thanks for sharing and best wishes in the contest. Jan
Comment Written 01-May-2019
reply by the author on 01-May-2019
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Thank you for such a wonderful review.
Comment from BeasPeas
Fabulous poem written in rhyming couplets. Definitely a sixer, but I'm out right now. Your piece reads smoothly with great word choices and nostalgic theme--sad actually. Best of luck in the contest. Marilyn
reply by the author on 01-May-2019
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Fabulous poem written in rhyming couplets. Definitely a sixer, but I'm out right now. Your piece reads smoothly with great word choices and nostalgic theme--sad actually. Best of luck in the contest. Marilyn
Comment Written 01-May-2019
reply by the author on 01-May-2019
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Thank you for reviewing.
Comment from Coco Jane
Neat ode to a toy rocking horse.
Line 2 of stanza 7 seems too long for the meter. Maybe I am reading it wrong? To me it fits better without the word "over."
In the last line, "goes" should be "go" to agree with the subject (days).
I hope grandchildren come soon to play on that horse!
reply by the author on 01-May-2019
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Neat ode to a toy rocking horse.
Line 2 of stanza 7 seems too long for the meter. Maybe I am reading it wrong? To me it fits better without the word "over."
In the last line, "goes" should be "go" to agree with the subject (days).
I hope grandchildren come soon to play on that horse!
Comment Written 01-May-2019
reply by the author on 01-May-2019
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Thank you for the suggestion. I will take a look.
Comment from Earl Corp
If I still had a six star rating left this poem would have earned it. As far as I am concerned this poem gets my vote. Your poem rhymed, makes sense, and it invokes emotions within the reader. Very nice job.
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reply by the author on 01-May-2019
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If I still had a six star rating left this poem would have earned it. As far as I am concerned this poem gets my vote. Your poem rhymed, makes sense, and it invokes emotions within the reader. Very nice job.
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Comment Written 01-May-2019
reply by the author on 01-May-2019
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Thank you so much. I appreciate that.
Comment from tfawcus
There's nothing so forlorn as a forgotten childhood toy. This reminds me of the story of the Velveteen Rabbit. Just lovely. Here's hoping for some grandchildren to come and save the day.
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reply by the author on 01-May-2019
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There's nothing so forlorn as a forgotten childhood toy. This reminds me of the story of the Velveteen Rabbit. Just lovely. Here's hoping for some grandchildren to come and save the day.
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Comment Written 01-May-2019
reply by the author on 01-May-2019
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Thank you, Tony. I love The Velveteen Rabbit.
