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Viewing comments for Chapter 6 "A Wooden Horse"Flash Fiction
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Comment from tempeste
Ciao !
Getting old is tough but if one is blessed with caring thoughtful grandchildren all grown up now , it helps to over come the sense of loneliness.
That said I started going to boarding school when I was 6 and stopped at 22.
Due to their travel business , I saw my parents two months a year.
I had my first taste of family life at 22 .. but by then I had learnt to be a loner.
I never married, had kids no relationships.
I have had lots of pets .. now that my parents have passed away ( mamma in 2006 and pa in 2017) I am alone but I had a stroke of luck .. I met Lucia 10 years ago and we are like sisters now.
We are in our 50s now , I hope we can age gracefully together.
reply by the author on 14-Nov-2021
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Ciao !
Getting old is tough but if one is blessed with caring thoughtful grandchildren all grown up now , it helps to over come the sense of loneliness.
That said I started going to boarding school when I was 6 and stopped at 22.
Due to their travel business , I saw my parents two months a year.
I had my first taste of family life at 22 .. but by then I had learnt to be a loner.
I never married, had kids no relationships.
I have had lots of pets .. now that my parents have passed away ( mamma in 2006 and pa in 2017) I am alone but I had a stroke of luck .. I met Lucia 10 years ago and we are like sisters now.
We are in our 50s now , I hope we can age gracefully together.
Comment Written 13-Nov-2021
reply by the author on 14-Nov-2021
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Oh I'm so happy for you. That's great you found someone! Was it hard not seeing your parents? Did it form any depression etc,? Sorry that's too personal. Btw 50s is Not old. ;)
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I have never stopped to think about it.
I do see the glass always half empty and I am addicted to sad country and Greek music and all my favourite films are tragic.
Hamlet is my top favourite. Withering Heights and English Patient follow.
Once my boss asked me why I never smile ..I told her it never occurred to me that I didn?t.
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Aww you are so sweet. I don't know why, I just get that feeling from you so much. I mean you're amazing here and so nice, but the inside of you is genuine. Hmm. Funny I don't usually say that. I like you :)
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I enjoyed meeting you too and look forward to checking out more of your lovely poetry
in the meantime ..
take care Gregory Cody !
Ciao !
Comment from karenina
Now flash fiction is my jam! No messing around... Set the stage, come in slow and then SLAM catch the reader with unexpected emotional impact!
Especially poignant as we isolate against a pandemic!
Loved this one six stars worth!
(And I'm review fifteen!)
Perfect...
This deserves to be recognized!
Karenina
reply by the author on 24-Apr-2021
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Now flash fiction is my jam! No messing around... Set the stage, come in slow and then SLAM catch the reader with unexpected emotional impact!
Especially poignant as we isolate against a pandemic!
Loved this one six stars worth!
(And I'm review fifteen!)
Perfect...
This deserves to be recognized!
Karenina
Comment Written 20-Apr-2021
reply by the author on 24-Apr-2021
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O. M. G.
I'm so incredibly incredibly grateful. YOU are a BRILLIANT writer. I can't believe you took the time to read. And you actually liked it!!
I am insecure about pretty much everything but especially my writing. AND I took a lot of my best writing off here so I could enter some contests. So I'm REALLY proud now.
Truly thank you. I feel HONORED. I do.
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You have reason to be proud! You've got "it"--that indescribable vibe that illuminates talent and transcends the sum of your (well chosen!) words! I LIVE to find writing like yours to follow!--Karenina
Comment from Gypsymooncat
Oh geeze, this was a sad and very short read! It brings home how lonely our elderly can be more often than not; sitting watching the old rocking horse, remembering days of children and family. Those days that tried our tempers and tested our stamina...then we get old and left alone. Which is worse? Certainly being left alone and forgotten is worse, as your short story shows us. I hope they call tomorrow...
reply by the author on 04-May-2019
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Oh geeze, this was a sad and very short read! It brings home how lonely our elderly can be more often than not; sitting watching the old rocking horse, remembering days of children and family. Those days that tried our tempers and tested our stamina...then we get old and left alone. Which is worse? Certainly being left alone and forgotten is worse, as your short story shows us. I hope they call tomorrow...
Comment Written 04-May-2019
reply by the author on 04-May-2019
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Great review. Thank you! I'm honored you read it. Yes I feel the same too btw ;)
Comment from Gail Denham
Oh this is sad. To wait for the kids to call. I have to keep remembering back to when we were raising the four sons - we were so so so busy - so having time to call the parents was hard. Still, we wanted to honor them and we tried. Another poem/story had this theme - I would think it's time to pass the horse on to another family - unless you expect grandchildren.
Blessing s -- good short story
reply by the author on 03-May-2019
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Oh this is sad. To wait for the kids to call. I have to keep remembering back to when we were raising the four sons - we were so so so busy - so having time to call the parents was hard. Still, we wanted to honor them and we tried. Another poem/story had this theme - I would think it's time to pass the horse on to another family - unless you expect grandchildren.
Blessing s -- good short story
Comment Written 03-May-2019
reply by the author on 03-May-2019
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I agree. And thank you for such a thoughtful review :)
Comment from LisaMay
The wistfulness in this story is what strikes me the most. At first I was confused: there is a rocking horse and then Deborah is rocking also. I was wondering if she is on a rocking horse too. And then I wasn't sure if by 'call' you meant to call in for a visit (by removalists clearing the house of old stuff) or to phone. So in the end I worked out that it was a mum whose kids have left home and she is missing them and feeling neglected because they don't phone as much as she'd like to hear from them.
reply by the author on 03-May-2019
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The wistfulness in this story is what strikes me the most. At first I was confused: there is a rocking horse and then Deborah is rocking also. I was wondering if she is on a rocking horse too. And then I wasn't sure if by 'call' you meant to call in for a visit (by removalists clearing the house of old stuff) or to phone. So in the end I worked out that it was a mum whose kids have left home and she is missing them and feeling neglected because they don't phone as much as she'd like to hear from them.
Comment Written 02-May-2019
reply by the author on 03-May-2019
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You got it!! Thank you so much for your thoughtful review!
Comment from Pantygynt
Good to see you back in a flash so to speak. A strange little piece this. It seems somewhat disjointed. I am not quite certain what is happening here to be honest, but it is certainly intriguing.
reply by the author on 01-May-2019
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Good to see you back in a flash so to speak. A strange little piece this. It seems somewhat disjointed. I am not quite certain what is happening here to be honest, but it is certainly intriguing.
Comment Written 01-May-2019
reply by the author on 01-May-2019
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Oh it's just about an older mother missing her kids. Thank you for reading it! Have a really good day :)
Comment from nancy_e_davis
After kids leave the nest they often have such busy lives they ignore the fact their parents love them and want to hear from them. I wonder sometimes if I was one of those. My children have come home to roost, well, two of them. The other one lives a mile up the road. I am one of the lucky ones. LOL Well done. Good Luck. Nancy:)
reply by the author on 01-May-2019
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After kids leave the nest they often have such busy lives they ignore the fact their parents love them and want to hear from them. I wonder sometimes if I was one of those. My children have come home to roost, well, two of them. The other one lives a mile up the road. I am one of the lucky ones. LOL Well done. Good Luck. Nancy:)
Comment Written 01-May-2019
reply by the author on 01-May-2019
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Thank you Nancy! I'm so glad you liked it :)
Comment from Mastery
Wow! Nice entry in the contest, Greg. I haven't seen you around for a long time, my friend. where ya been hiding? LOL ?Good luck in the contest. Bob
reply by the author on 01-May-2019
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Wow! Nice entry in the contest, Greg. I haven't seen you around for a long time, my friend. where ya been hiding? LOL ?Good luck in the contest. Bob
Comment Written 30-Apr-2019
reply by the author on 01-May-2019
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Hey thank you! I've just been jumping on to try these flash fictions. It helps with my prose. I gotta get back to reading now. You're at the top always ;)
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Good to hear from you again, Greg. :) Bob
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Good to hear from you again, Greg. :) Bob
Comment from visionary1234
Oh Greg ... this is lovely! I see my own mother's face when she was very old ... staring at the phone ... NOT wondering if I or my sisters would call, but if the man she loved would call. He gave up on her, stopped calling, but she never stopped waiting. This verges on poetry. :)S
reply by the author on 01-May-2019
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Oh Greg ... this is lovely! I see my own mother's face when she was very old ... staring at the phone ... NOT wondering if I or my sisters would call, but if the man she loved would call. He gave up on her, stopped calling, but she never stopped waiting. This verges on poetry. :)S
Comment Written 30-Apr-2019
reply by the author on 01-May-2019
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Thank you Sharyn. For the SIX! I'm taken aback. I had a feeling it was worthy of a six but then when I actually saw it, I knew I was right. Thank you for letting me realize my talent. You really didn't have to describe it as "genius" but I appreciate it. I'm humbled. Thank you.
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Our own Mutual Admiration Society!
Comment from l.raven
Hi Gregory, what a sad story told my sweet friend...
the sad thing is...this really happens...some kids don't know what they have in their parents until they are gone...sigh...very well written you...and I love this picture...love Linda xxoo
reply by the author on 01-May-2019
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Hi Gregory, what a sad story told my sweet friend...
the sad thing is...this really happens...some kids don't know what they have in their parents until they are gone...sigh...very well written you...and I love this picture...love Linda xxoo
Comment Written 30-Apr-2019
reply by the author on 01-May-2019
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Thank you! I dread that time. Mine are still little ;)
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different strokes for different folks sweet guy...your kids may never leave home...LOL...I know your are still small..and I hope they are doing well...smiling big back at you...love Linda xxoo
