The Dragonfly and I
An unexpected distraction.28 total reviews
Comment from Pam (respa)
-Very nice artwork and
presentation, Tina.
-Your notes are appreciated.
-This is an excellent story
in a poem.
-It flows effortlessly with
very good imagery, description,
and message.
-The description of the dragonfly
is very good because you show
the immediate effects of it
landing on you.
-It is a bit of a distraction,
especially for others,
but you wanted to sing!
-You also listened to
what the teacher was
saying, and that made
the biggest difference in your life.
-A strong entry; good luck.
reply by the author on 05-May-2019
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-Very nice artwork and
presentation, Tina.
-Your notes are appreciated.
-This is an excellent story
in a poem.
-It flows effortlessly with
very good imagery, description,
and message.
-The description of the dragonfly
is very good because you show
the immediate effects of it
landing on you.
-It is a bit of a distraction,
especially for others,
but you wanted to sing!
-You also listened to
what the teacher was
saying, and that made
the biggest difference in your life.
-A strong entry; good luck.
Comment Written 05-May-2019
reply by the author on 05-May-2019
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Wow, thank you so so much! You totally got what I was saying. I do think the dragonfly had a purpose, because I have thought of it so many times over the years, how I was not distracted with something that should have been a distraction. You have made my night and I really appreciate this vote of confidence and encouragement :-)
Best to you!
Tina
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Wow, thank you so so much! You totally got what I was saying. I do think the dragonfly had a purpose, because I have thought of it so many times over the years, how I was not distracted with something that should have been a distraction. You have made my night and I really appreciate this vote of confidence and encouragement :-)
Best to you!
Tina
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You are very welcome and deserving, Tina. From your poem, I would say you are right about the dragonfly not being a distraction. I am glad I made your night, too🙂
Comment from Randa Dayle
I am glad you had the dragonfly experience. I think you have written a great story in a poem, and you have shared a very special experience with us. Thanks!!
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I am glad you had the dragonfly experience. I think you have written a great story in a poem, and you have shared a very special experience with us. Thanks!!
Comment Written 05-May-2019
reply by the author on 05-May-2019
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Thank you Randa! I appreciate you taking time to review my story!
Blessings, new friend!
Tina
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Thank you Randa! I appreciate you taking time to review my story!
Blessings, new friend!
Tina
Comment from Janice Canerdy
This beautiful, skillfully-written autobiographical narrative poem has a smoothly-flowing, moving plot that conveys the absolute truth about the
power of Jesus to save.
reply by the author on 05-May-2019
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This beautiful, skillfully-written autobiographical narrative poem has a smoothly-flowing, moving plot that conveys the absolute truth about the
power of Jesus to save.
Comment Written 05-May-2019
reply by the author on 05-May-2019
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Thank you so much Janet! I am awed and humbled at this. Yes, He has power that saves!
Blessings to you:)
Janet
Comment from Ross E Silke
This is beautiful and rhythmic, but most of all, it tells the story of your finding the best gift life can give -- our LORD Jesus. What a wonderful tribute and celebration in the dragonfly which I believe is quite symbolic of Him; I'll have to look up more but there's something about it that speaks of salvation--the robustness and agility of the dragonfly maybe. I'm happy to have had a chance to review your work at last and reward it so, as it is deserving for this elegant write. I might bold the font and increase its size more for an even easier read. Overall, I'd highly recommend and would make a wonderful ode in a church setting with children in Sunday school, and in school, at a secular world if they'd allow it?--Sadly. I found Jesus too in school as a child at a young age
reply by the author on 05-May-2019
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This is beautiful and rhythmic, but most of all, it tells the story of your finding the best gift life can give -- our LORD Jesus. What a wonderful tribute and celebration in the dragonfly which I believe is quite symbolic of Him; I'll have to look up more but there's something about it that speaks of salvation--the robustness and agility of the dragonfly maybe. I'm happy to have had a chance to review your work at last and reward it so, as it is deserving for this elegant write. I might bold the font and increase its size more for an even easier read. Overall, I'd highly recommend and would make a wonderful ode in a church setting with children in Sunday school, and in school, at a secular world if they'd allow it?--Sadly. I found Jesus too in school as a child at a young age
Comment Written 05-May-2019
reply by the author on 05-May-2019
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I'm happy to hear that you found Jesus at a young age also. That's great! Thank you for reviewing this and I will definitely go look at the font and maybe make it a little bigger. It was so long that I didn't know if I should make the font bigger but I will look at it. I appreciate your love you so much!
Comment from Joan E.
Thank you for sharing your reminiscences about your spiritual experience with the dragonfly. I enjoyed your storytelling and your rhymes. Your addition of the picture and color presentation reinforced your theme. Best wishes in the contest- Joan
reply by the author on 04-May-2019
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Thank you for sharing your reminiscences about your spiritual experience with the dragonfly. I enjoyed your storytelling and your rhymes. Your addition of the picture and color presentation reinforced your theme. Best wishes in the contest- Joan
Comment Written 04-May-2019
reply by the author on 04-May-2019
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Thank you Joan:) I appreciate your words!
Tina
Comment from Gail Denham
A real good poem - and a good look at your conversion. I was nine also when dear old Mrs. Sherlock, my Sunday School Teacher, asked me if I wanted to ask Jesus into my heart. Right there I knelt on the linolium of that SS room and asked Jesus in. Ups and downs since then, but Jesus does draw us - and place burdens on us that only He can lift.
reply by the author on 04-May-2019
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A real good poem - and a good look at your conversion. I was nine also when dear old Mrs. Sherlock, my Sunday School Teacher, asked me if I wanted to ask Jesus into my heart. Right there I knelt on the linolium of that SS room and asked Jesus in. Ups and downs since then, but Jesus does draw us - and place burdens on us that only He can lift.
Comment Written 04-May-2019
reply by the author on 04-May-2019
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Gail, thank you so much for telling me about when you accepted Jesus. That's so cool that we were the same age :-) yes, he does give us burdens and he expects us to use him to carry them. I'm okay with that as long as I keep needing Him ! I appreciate the review and compliments :-)
Have a great weekend!
Tina
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Gail, thank you so much for telling me about when you accepted Jesus. That's so cool that we were the same age :-) yes, he does give us burdens and he expects us to use him to carry them. I'm okay with that as long as I keep needing Him ! I appreciate the review and compliments :-)
Have a great weekend!
Tina
Comment from Y. M. Roger
Such a beautiful and heart-felt offering for this contest, Tina -- love the thought of the dragonfly as a 'reminder' to you....or maybe he was just letting you know that you've always got friend, you just never know what form that friend will take...but you'll never be alone as long as you believe!! ;) ;) **Sorry so far behind....gave up trying to catch my tail 'cuz I got too dizzy....now I'm just trying to get through the days (got to add 'family emergency to the list of life...ugh). Take care! :) ;) Yvette
reply by the author on 04-May-2019
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Such a beautiful and heart-felt offering for this contest, Tina -- love the thought of the dragonfly as a 'reminder' to you....or maybe he was just letting you know that you've always got friend, you just never know what form that friend will take...but you'll never be alone as long as you believe!! ;) ;) **Sorry so far behind....gave up trying to catch my tail 'cuz I got too dizzy....now I'm just trying to get through the days (got to add 'family emergency to the list of life...ugh). Take care! :) ;) Yvette
Comment Written 04-May-2019
reply by the author on 04-May-2019
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You never know what life is going to throw at you, do you? I hope everything's okay with your family! I will say a prayer but you were doing okay :-) take care, and don't get too dizzy LOL. I'm glad you like the poem. It was hard to write about something so personal but I got it done!
I appreciate you! Have a great day :-) find some time to rest if you
Tina💗
Comment from beizanten
you should divided this long poetry into smaller paragraphs, like this it is hard to comment on. Anyway very beautiful picture. a very interesting and well written poetry. keep up the great work
reply by the author on 04-May-2019
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you should divided this long poetry into smaller paragraphs, like this it is hard to comment on. Anyway very beautiful picture. a very interesting and well written poetry. keep up the great work
Comment Written 04-May-2019
reply by the author on 04-May-2019
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Thank you for your review and comment. I will go take a look at it and see what I think. I appreciate you taking the time and I'm glad you liked it :-)
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When I read your review at first I wasn't sure what you were talking about because I had separated the stanzas. Somehow, they got put back together, not the way I intended. Thank you so much for bringing that to my attention because you're right it does make a big difference in being able to comprehend the poem and for it to flow smoothly.
I appreciate you mentioning that :-)
Comment from Alcreator Litt Dear
This poem speaks an incredible feeling and experience of having Jesus changed poet's heart and made it white at the unexpected distraction of a dragonfly; well said, well done. Thanks for sharing; write legible to inspire, readable for years -- DR ALCREATOR
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This poem speaks an incredible feeling and experience of having Jesus changed poet's heart and made it white at the unexpected distraction of a dragonfly; well said, well done. Thanks for sharing; write legible to inspire, readable for years -- DR ALCREATOR
Comment Written 04-May-2019
reply by the author on 04-May-2019
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Thank you bunches for the review when it is very low on the list so far this morning. I appreciate your input and your encouragement!
Have a beautiful day:)
Tina
Comment from Bill Pinder
That is a great poem about a real life experience that was life-changing. I really like how you incorporated the dragonfly into the story. Thanks for sharing this story of your conversion.
Bill
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That is a great poem about a real life experience that was life-changing. I really like how you incorporated the dragonfly into the story. Thanks for sharing this story of your conversion.
Bill
Comment Written 04-May-2019
reply by the author on 04-May-2019
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It is tough to write personal and real, I find. Thank you so much for the review, and I am glad you liked the dragongfly part. It really happened. I was so annoyed at my friends because I couldn't hear the teacher over their yelling. I appreciate you taking the time to review when this is down on the list:)
Tina
