Little Poems
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Comment from Sandra du Plessis
A very wel-written CinqTroisDecaLa poem about the flooded path at the water edge that happens when there are much snow that is melting and the water just rise and need somewhere to go. A great photograph as well.
reply by the author on 29-Apr-2019
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A very wel-written CinqTroisDecaLa poem about the flooded path at the water edge that happens when there are much snow that is melting and the water just rise and need somewhere to go. A great photograph as well.
Comment Written 29-Apr-2019
reply by the author on 29-Apr-2019
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Thank you Sandra. I appreciate your review and comments. Have a great day.
Comment from Joan E.
I certainly hope the river will be back to normal in a week or so. Thank you for capturing the drama in your photograph and the special form. I admired your internal and end rhymes, plus your use of alliteration. Cheers and best wishes- Joan
reply by the author on 29-Apr-2019
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I certainly hope the river will be back to normal in a week or so. Thank you for capturing the drama in your photograph and the special form. I admired your internal and end rhymes, plus your use of alliteration. Cheers and best wishes- Joan
Comment Written 28-Apr-2019
reply by the author on 29-Apr-2019
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Thank you Joan for this very astute appraisal.
Comment from Carla Trinklein
I live along a river, so I see sights like this one every spring. That being said, they never fail to startle me. Rivers are bold and uncompromising. Well done on this poem!
reply by the author on 29-Apr-2019
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I live along a river, so I see sights like this one every spring. That being said, they never fail to startle me. Rivers are bold and uncompromising. Well done on this poem!
Comment Written 28-Apr-2019
reply by the author on 29-Apr-2019
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Thank you Carla. Yes, indeed they have a natural cycle, but always different. Plus you must respect their strength.
Comment from Beri Bee
This is an absolutely stellar poem! BRAVO! It's funny, when I read the words, A fluent, I heard the word, Effluent! Thankfully that was not the case in your walk by the river! I do not live where it floods, and have only seen this on the news, but you have made it a visceral experience through your well-crafted use of words! Well done!
reply by the author on 29-Apr-2019
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This is an absolutely stellar poem! BRAVO! It's funny, when I read the words, A fluent, I heard the word, Effluent! Thankfully that was not the case in your walk by the river! I do not live where it floods, and have only seen this on the news, but you have made it a visceral experience through your well-crafted use of words! Well done!
Comment Written 28-Apr-2019
reply by the author on 29-Apr-2019
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Thank you BeriBee. I'm glad you could join me on the flooded plain, vicariously. I appreciate your review and comments. I like your cure nickname. My mother's name was Bea, and my daughter has a tatoo just like that one you have here, on here angle.
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How sweet! Thank you for telling me!
Comment from damommy
You chose some big words to rhyme and did it very successfully. You make this form look easy. We had considered it for Potlatch at one time and decided it was too hard, but now you've inspired me to give it a go.
The melted snow is a real problem in your area.
reply by the author on 29-Apr-2019
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You chose some big words to rhyme and did it very successfully. You make this form look easy. We had considered it for Potlatch at one time and decided it was too hard, but now you've inspired me to give it a go.
The melted snow is a real problem in your area.
Comment Written 28-Apr-2019
reply by the author on 29-Apr-2019
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thank you damommy. I'm glad you are trying it out again. Happy Potlatching!
Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell
I enjoyed your poem, Tom, very much. The internal rhyme added to the pleasure of reading. I see from your photo how bad it was. That is the trouble with a mountain of snow that has to melt. But, Nature does these things for a reason, although I sometimes think we have pushed her to the limit. Well done, my friend, it was a delight to read. :) Sandra x
reply by the author on 28-Apr-2019
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I enjoyed your poem, Tom, very much. The internal rhyme added to the pleasure of reading. I see from your photo how bad it was. That is the trouble with a mountain of snow that has to melt. But, Nature does these things for a reason, although I sometimes think we have pushed her to the limit. Well done, my friend, it was a delight to read. :) Sandra x
Comment Written 28-Apr-2019
reply by the author on 28-Apr-2019
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Thank you Sandra. Well said.
Comment from Pantygynt
To which you have added a plethora of internal rhyme at exactly the time the end rhyme is most prolific the cccb element of the rhyme scheme.
This results in nine instances of the rhyme on the 'ow sound. Is this perhaps over-egging the pudding somewhat? Also the final abc rhyme in my opinion weakens the ending. Perhaps one of the couplets should be placed towards the end and the abcd placed in the middle.
Laura seems to love churning out form for the sake of form, it seems to me.
Whatever, it provides fuel for the potlatch organiser.
reply by the author on 28-Apr-2019
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To which you have added a plethora of internal rhyme at exactly the time the end rhyme is most prolific the cccb element of the rhyme scheme.
This results in nine instances of the rhyme on the 'ow sound. Is this perhaps over-egging the pudding somewhat? Also the final abc rhyme in my opinion weakens the ending. Perhaps one of the couplets should be placed towards the end and the abcd placed in the middle.
Laura seems to love churning out form for the sake of form, it seems to me.
Whatever, it provides fuel for the potlatch organiser.
Comment Written 28-Apr-2019
reply by the author on 28-Apr-2019
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Thank you Jim. You are possibly right about the pudding. I may have gotten a bit carried away. I totally agree with your assessment. The abc at the end does dilute that ending. Might be better at the beginning.
I don't rate this highly as a format
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Well, at least you tried. Lol
Comment from sunnilicious
Well thought out poem. Clearly written. Good verbiage. R-word and S-word alliterations are vibrant, but it all works together nicely. Good flow of rhythm and rhymes. Great work!
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Well thought out poem. Clearly written. Good verbiage. R-word and S-word alliterations are vibrant, but it all works together nicely. Good flow of rhythm and rhymes. Great work!
Comment Written 28-Apr-2019
reply by the author on 28-Apr-2019
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Thank you Alicia. I am delighted with this review and those stars
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
Your brought the river to me in your words and you have passion for the Mississippi River and describe it well and I will never get to see it, so you brought the vision to my eyes and ears here, much enjoyed, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 28-Apr-2019
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Your brought the river to me in your words and you have passion for the Mississippi River and describe it well and I will never get to see it, so you brought the vision to my eyes and ears here, much enjoyed, love Dolly x
Comment Written 28-Apr-2019
reply by the author on 28-Apr-2019
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Thank you Dolly. I am glad you could see it that way.
