Comment from BethShelby

Excellent

This is a very neat poem about love that had faltered but been renewed by a trip to sea and the renewal was reason for many more happy years. It is don't in your signature fomat of the spaceship and it is really a very impressive form on the page.

 Comment Written 24-Jun-2023

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reply by the author on 25-Jun-2023

Thank you Best for your kind review. I appreciate it very much.

Comment from Mary Vigasin

Excellent

This was just lovely. Returning to the ocean to rekindle a romance and memories left
at the seashore.
Beautifully written and charming.
Best wishes
Mary

 Comment Written 23-Jun-2023

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reply by the author on 25-Jun-2023

Thank you so much for your kind review. I appreciate it very much.

Comment from Lisasview

Excellent

Interesting format Patricia...and a loving poem...
Yes rekindling love is important in a marriage...especially if the marriage has been for many many years!
Lisasview, new to this site................

 Comment Written 23-Jun-2023

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reply by the author on 23-Jun-2023

Thank you so very much for your kind review. I appreciate it very much.

Comment from Debbie D'Arcy

Excellent

I love the idea that the sandcastle is a metaphor for our dreams and that, after so much energy, they can be so cruelly washed away by the sea (please note 'exist' in the first stanza). But then returning to the seashore can be an opportunity to resume and revive where one left off. Thanks for sharing this fine, evocative verse. Take care Debbie

 Comment Written 22-Jun-2023

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reply by the author on 22-Jun-2023

Thank you for your lovely review. I made the correction that you talked about.

Comment from JSD

Excellent

Lovely. The real trick would be to make the thin part of the poem describe the thin moments and then for its theme or meaning to grow in importance as the lines get bigger. Check out George Herbert's 'Easter Wings'. (They didn't have spaceships in the 1620s.) x

 Comment Written 22-Jun-2023

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reply by the author on 22-Jun-2023

Thank you so much for reviewing my work. I appreciate it.

Comment from misscookie

Excellent

I always thought it was amaze how a young child could build such a beautiful castle tower what ever out of sand the picture that you choose is perfect for your write
Thank you for sharing
Cookie

 Comment Written 02-May-2019

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reply by the author on 06-May-2019

Thank you for your kind review.

reply by misscookie on 07-May-2019

Your welcome
Stay on praying ground.
Cookie

Comment from Raffaelina Lowcock

Exceptional

Wow! You do have a way with words. Lovely, well done, extremely enjoyable perspective. I love it. Yes there are so many Sand Castles we can build; the prospects are endless. We are so blessed to be able to build again and again.

 Comment Written 30-Apr-2019

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reply by the author on 30-Apr-2019

Thanks for you nice review.

Comment from susand3022

Excellent

Hi Patricia, I really liked your spaceship poem. I like the images that you built with the sand and the waves... the building of the castles, washing them away, rebuilding from the wreckage. It's life... (after a hurricane!) ;)

 Comment Written 30-Apr-2019

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reply by the author on 30-Apr-2019

Thanks for you nice review.

Comment from Joan E.

Excellent

I am glad you were inspired by judiverse and responded with one of your spaceship formats. I enjoyed your parallel photograph and your "sand castles" metaphor along with your rhymes. Thanks for your encouragement to try your form. Smiles- Joan

 Comment Written 29-Apr-2019

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reply by the author on 30-Apr-2019

Thanks for you nice review.

Comment from Treischel

Excellent

A wonderful expression of about dreams. I like the sandcastle Simile. You Spaceship Format is a good one. And I have written a few myself. However, I think you have 13 syllables in that middle line.

 Comment Written 28-Apr-2019

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reply by the author on 30-Apr-2019

Thanks for you nice review.