NaPoWriMo 2019
Viewing comments for Chapter 25 "Happy Hour"National Poetry Writing Month
12 total reviews
Comment from BeasPeas
This is a well composed poem, called an Idyl. Another interesting form that is intriguing. Poem is illustrated festively and speaks of gathering for lighthearted fun (with responsibility.) Great job. Marilyn
reply by the author on 30-Apr-2019
  |
This is a well composed poem, called an Idyl. Another interesting form that is intriguing. Poem is illustrated festively and speaks of gathering for lighthearted fun (with responsibility.) Great job. Marilyn
Comment Written 29-Apr-2019
reply by the author on 30-Apr-2019
-
Thank you :)
Comment from Joan E.
Thank you for sharing your idyl about the contemporary activity of celebrating happy hour. I enjoyed your addition of alliteration to intensify the theme. Your wise advice in your notes is much appreciated as well. Cheers--literally! -Joan
reply by the author on 06-May-2019
|
Thank you for sharing your idyl about the contemporary activity of celebrating happy hour. I enjoyed your addition of alliteration to intensify the theme. Your wise advice in your notes is much appreciated as well. Cheers--literally! -Joan
Comment Written 29-Apr-2019
reply by the author on 06-May-2019
-
Hi Joan! You're nice. Thank you. Hugs, Alicia :)
Comment from Treischel
It is well written. It certainly is fine narrative. but I agree that it doesn't quite carry the "High Language" aspect. For example, that firsts line:
Friday afternoon at five o'clock brings freedom
would be more like:
Friday, as bells toll five O'clock's eager freedom
reply by the author on 28-Apr-2019
|
It is well written. It certainly is fine narrative. but I agree that it doesn't quite carry the "High Language" aspect. For example, that firsts line:
Friday afternoon at five o'clock brings freedom
would be more like:
Friday, as bells toll five O'clock's eager freedom
Comment Written 28-Apr-2019
reply by the author on 28-Apr-2019
-
Hi Tom! That's a great edit note. Thank you. Hugs, Alicia :)
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
A very well-written idyll poem about the things that make you happy and make you feel to be a person. After a long week, many people need some time with friends to relax.
reply by the author on 28-Apr-2019
|
A very well-written idyll poem about the things that make you happy and make you feel to be a person. After a long week, many people need some time with friends to relax.
Comment Written 27-Apr-2019
reply by the author on 28-Apr-2019
-
Hi Sandra! Thank you. Hugs, Alicia :)
Comment from bichonfrisegirl
Hi Alicia,
Your poems are always refreshingly unique. This one is no exception. "First and foremost do not expect too much." (my fave line). "A few drinks and these beasts are ready for the wild." ... luv it! You have a way of expressing your thoughts as they come (honest and from the heart).
Yes Friday nights were always welcomed when working full time ... a much needed release from the pressures of the weekly grind.
Hugs,
Connie
reply by the author on 28-Apr-2019
|
Hi Alicia,
Your poems are always refreshingly unique. This one is no exception. "First and foremost do not expect too much." (my fave line). "A few drinks and these beasts are ready for the wild." ... luv it! You have a way of expressing your thoughts as they come (honest and from the heart).
Yes Friday nights were always welcomed when working full time ... a much needed release from the pressures of the weekly grind.
Hugs,
Connie
Comment Written 27-Apr-2019
reply by the author on 28-Apr-2019
-
Thank you. God bless you :)
Comment from Bill Schott
This poem, Happy Hour, brings us all the a familiar spot where the end of the work week is acknowledged with laughter and a couple beers. Nice.
reply by the author on 28-Apr-2019
|
This poem, Happy Hour, brings us all the a familiar spot where the end of the work week is acknowledged with laughter and a couple beers. Nice.
Comment Written 27-Apr-2019
reply by the author on 28-Apr-2019
-
Thank you. Hope your weekend is going great :)
Comment from royowen
Some excellent advice dear Alicia, an excellent work, as a reformed drunk, I agree with you wholeheartedly, it's not sound judgement to drink and drive, and of course there's a new kid on the block, drugs. Beautufully written my friend, Roy
reply by the author on 28-Apr-2019
|
Some excellent advice dear Alicia, an excellent work, as a reformed drunk, I agree with you wholeheartedly, it's not sound judgement to drink and drive, and of course there's a new kid on the block, drugs. Beautufully written my friend, Roy
Comment Written 27-Apr-2019
reply by the author on 28-Apr-2019
-
Hi Roy! For some reason, people that drink aren't the people on drugs. At least around me in California. I didn't think about drugs, but you're right we must be careful in many ways now. I'm glad you're doing great. God bless you. And thank you. Hugs, Alicia :)
-
Well done
Comment from 24chas
This was a good read, sunnilicious. I liked the way you capture the reader's attention at the beginning and really do a good job with relating the atmosphere during this time at happy hour. Well done.
reply by the author on 28-Apr-2019
|
This was a good read, sunnilicious. I liked the way you capture the reader's attention at the beginning and really do a good job with relating the atmosphere during this time at happy hour. Well done.
Comment Written 27-Apr-2019
reply by the author on 28-Apr-2019
-
You're nice. Thank you :)
Comment from Earl Corp
According to what you wrote an idyll is supposed to have a romantic tone, I don't really find this to have a particularly romantic tone. I don't know what you mean by high language, is that words we wouldn't know off hand?
reply by the author on 28-Apr-2019
|
According to what you wrote an idyll is supposed to have a romantic tone, I don't really find this to have a particularly romantic tone. I don't know what you mean by high language, is that words we wouldn't know off hand?
Comment Written 27-Apr-2019
reply by the author on 28-Apr-2019
-
Hi! Boastful verbiage I suppose. I'm a fun gal, but single. Maybe, I'm terrible at romance. Thank you :)
Comment from lyenochka
You make it sound fun. It's always good to be able to hangout together with friends and workmates outside of work and in a comfortable, casual environment.
reply by the author on 28-Apr-2019
|
You make it sound fun. It's always good to be able to hangout together with friends and workmates outside of work and in a comfortable, casual environment.
Comment Written 27-Apr-2019
reply by the author on 28-Apr-2019
-
Thank you. God bless you :)
