Comment from sunnilicious

Excellent

Hahahahaha that was funny. Well thought out and clearly written. Playful with alliterations on C-words and F-words. Great artwork choice. Good presentation too.

 Comment Written 28-Apr-2019

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reply by the author on 02-May-2019

Hi Alicia,
I am happy that you enjoyed this bit of fun!
Kim

Comment from Pantygynt

Excellent

Plenty of alliteration on the 'F' here. Did you know that the 'lune' form got its name frome being shaped like a crescent? But of course this only happens if you flush the thing left or right, so they should not really be centred on the page.

 Comment Written 27-Apr-2019

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reply by the author on 03-May-2019

It is now left justified :) mission accomplished... thanks for all the fine suggestions!

Comment from Sandra du Plessis

Excellent

A very well-written lune poem. Make a wish and flip a coin when it lands on its head tails up your wish is not granted, the other way when heads are on top you may start packing your bags for a change.

 Comment Written 26-Apr-2019

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reply by the author on 26-Apr-2019

Hi Sandra,
Thank you so much for your time and comments.
Kim

Comment from dovemarie

Excellent

Dear Kim, Fun poem and funny to read, I like your form of lettering, and I hope you have good luck in the contest. We're rivals in NaPoWriMo, and I appreciate all your help and your great reviews! Donna

 Comment Written 26-Apr-2019

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reply by the author on 26-Apr-2019

Thank you, Donna.

Comment from Barb Hensongispsaca

Excellent

Fifty-fifty, that brought out a chuckle from me. Nicely done lune for the contest and I love the chance odds. LOL I remember doing this to find a ratio for math class

 Comment Written 26-Apr-2019

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reply by the author on 26-Apr-2019

Hi Barb,
I'm so happy you enjoyed this one. Thank you so much!
Kim

Comment from Jannypan (Jan)

Excellent

I enjoyed your contest entry, Kim. Great job with its presentation--the picture choice, the alliteration of 'c' and 'f', the correct syllable count, and your message which is true.

I know many use the left margin for the 3 lines and end up with a kind of crescent moon shape.

Thanks for sharing and best wishes. Jan

 Comment Written 26-Apr-2019

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reply by the author on 26-Apr-2019

Hi Jan!
Thank you so much for all your fine comments :) I loved the review and suggestions.

Kim

Comment from Sandra Elizabeth Williams

Excellent

Hi Lovey, I very much like the play on word change in your Line. I think the message is a good one. We cannot just leave life up to chance, we have to make plans.

Best of luck in the contest.

 Comment Written 26-Apr-2019

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reply by the author on 03-May-2019

Thank you so much for taking the time to read and review.
Kim

Comment from BeasPeas

Excellent

This is clever, Kim. I like the play on words with "change." It's hard to write these short ones and have them make "cents." LOL! Good luck in the contest. Marilyn

 Comment Written 25-Apr-2019

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reply by the author on 03-May-2019

Love the review and the "cents" pun lol
Thanks,
Kim

Comment from Earl Corp

Excellent

You wrote an ode to probability and outcome, that's great stuff. You also made a lune poem make sense, which isn't an easy thing to do. Good luck in the contest.

 Comment Written 25-Apr-2019

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reply by the author on 03-May-2019

Thank you so much, Earl. :)

Comment from lyenochka

Excellent

Great job with your lune, Kim. You managed to give us a pun about "flipping coins" and "change' plus a plethora of words that start with 'f' in such a short poem!

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 Comment Written 25-Apr-2019

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reply by the author on 03-May-2019

Thanks, Helen! These short forms are tougher than they look!
Kim