Miscellaneous Poems
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Comment from Jesse James Doty
I love the way you address our need for war, as you so aptly entitle this piece. The stark presentation adds to the tension and commentary, very well. I like how you start out with ancient history, then switch to our present day's misery of xenophobes and closed minded thinking. My favorite stanzas are the fourth and final ones. I especially love the phrase, "then watch it on the nightly news." Then the final stanza sums it up nicely with, the reference to the jester, and the equal absurdity of "our strange need to fight." This is very well written, and I agree with your premise and conclusion. Thank you for sharing.
Take care, Jesse
reply by the author on 25-Apr-2019
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I love the way you address our need for war, as you so aptly entitle this piece. The stark presentation adds to the tension and commentary, very well. I like how you start out with ancient history, then switch to our present day's misery of xenophobes and closed minded thinking. My favorite stanzas are the fourth and final ones. I especially love the phrase, "then watch it on the nightly news." Then the final stanza sums it up nicely with, the reference to the jester, and the equal absurdity of "our strange need to fight." This is very well written, and I agree with your premise and conclusion. Thank you for sharing.
Take care, Jesse
Comment Written 25-Apr-2019
reply by the author on 25-Apr-2019
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Thanks so much, Jesse, for the thoughtful comments and kind words. I appreciate the delightful rating as well. Most grateful -- Craig
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You're welcome, Craig.
The sixth star was well deserved.
Jesse
Comment from Scarbrems
You missed us too much, didn't you? Well, I for one am glad you are back to posting. This is another excellent piece, capturing the inhuman humanity that imaginary-friend inspired war is. Well done, and welcome back.
reply by the author on 25-Apr-2019
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You missed us too much, didn't you? Well, I for one am glad you are back to posting. This is another excellent piece, capturing the inhuman humanity that imaginary-friend inspired war is. Well done, and welcome back.
Comment Written 25-Apr-2019
reply by the author on 25-Apr-2019
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To be honest, I missed the forums -- the cut & thrust, and all that. Can't say I've been dying to post a poem or story again, but I figured membership costs too much not to submit something now and then.
Thanks for the great review, and the kindly welcome, Emma. Cheers, Craig
Comment from DeborahWrite
Dear Author,
Your serious poem's thoughts and verses fit well with your rhyming scheme. Its thought-provoking message is clear and well-worded. Excellent writing!
My best,
Deborah
reply by the author on 25-Apr-2019
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Dear Author,
Your serious poem's thoughts and verses fit well with your rhyming scheme. Its thought-provoking message is clear and well-worded. Excellent writing!
My best,
Deborah
Comment Written 25-Apr-2019
reply by the author on 25-Apr-2019
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Thanks for the kind words, Deborah. They're much appreciated -- Craig
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My pleasure
Comment from lyenochka
Hi Craig! Good to see you again. I feel the pain in your poem about the needless violence surrounding religious extremists. While I myself am guilty of myopic views, I think God would find everyone has missed the view He wanted us to have.
reply by the author on 25-Apr-2019
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Hi Craig! Good to see you again. I feel the pain in your poem about the needless violence surrounding religious extremists. While I myself am guilty of myopic views, I think God would find everyone has missed the view He wanted us to have.
Comment Written 25-Apr-2019
reply by the author on 25-Apr-2019
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Nice to hear from you, Helen. Thanks for checking out my first submission in a while. Kind comments most happily received. Craig
Comment from ~Dovey
Hi Craig -
This explains where you disappeared to earlier. You have excellent rhyme and specific war references on many levels in this piece. As you alluded to, it is ironic to be known as humanity, given the inherent propensity for conflict that is ingrained in the human race. I wish I had the answer, but I don't think anyone does.
Nice job commemorating ANZAC Day. But, I thought you cancelled your subscription here? What's up with that?
Kim
reply by the author on 25-Apr-2019
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Hi Craig -
This explains where you disappeared to earlier. You have excellent rhyme and specific war references on many levels in this piece. As you alluded to, it is ironic to be known as humanity, given the inherent propensity for conflict that is ingrained in the human race. I wish I had the answer, but I don't think anyone does.
Nice job commemorating ANZAC Day. But, I thought you cancelled your subscription here? What's up with that?
Kim
Comment Written 25-Apr-2019
reply by the author on 25-Apr-2019
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I didn't cancel it, I just delayed renewing it. Not exactly sure why I capitulated in the end. I still don't feel a whole lot like writing much. I guess you've been hard at it for NaPoWriMo. Thanks for stopping by, and the kind review :) Craig
Comment from Beri Bee
These are some very profound sentiments presented in a lovely poem. Thank you for expressing your important thoughts in such a beautiful way. Well done!
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reply by the author on 25-Apr-2019
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These are some very profound sentiments presented in a lovely poem. Thank you for expressing your important thoughts in such a beautiful way. Well done!
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Comment Written 25-Apr-2019
reply by the author on 25-Apr-2019
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Thanks for the kind words, and the excellent rating. Both are much appreciated. Craig
Comment from Gloria ....
This has taken a much wider view of Anzac Day and really returns to the beginning, Craig. So many clearly stated thoughts that all return to the same place, we are the masters of our own demise.
A disheartened point of view that is as you so poetically state seen on the nightly news.
Excellent post.
Gloria
reply by the author on 25-Apr-2019
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This has taken a much wider view of Anzac Day and really returns to the beginning, Craig. So many clearly stated thoughts that all return to the same place, we are the masters of our own demise.
A disheartened point of view that is as you so poetically state seen on the nightly news.
Excellent post.
Gloria
Comment Written 25-Apr-2019
reply by the author on 25-Apr-2019
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Thanks so much for the very thoughtful review and the generous rating, Gloria. I appreciate the kindness, and the fact that you appreciated the poem (enjoyed might not be the right word). Most grateful, Craig
Comment from Alcreator Litt Dear
On this ANZAC Day, 2019 this poem is a gift of good thought about our survival that is now in a question because our lives are now beyond fantasy seems absurd; well said, well done. Thank you for sharing. Keep Writing Inspire Changing -- DR ALCREATOR
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reply by the author on 25-Apr-2019
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On this ANZAC Day, 2019 this poem is a gift of good thought about our survival that is now in a question because our lives are now beyond fantasy seems absurd; well said, well done. Thank you for sharing. Keep Writing Inspire Changing -- DR ALCREATOR
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Comment Written 25-Apr-2019
reply by the author on 25-Apr-2019
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Thanks you for the kind comments, they are appreciated :) Craig
Comment from tfawcus
Glad I still have a six left for this. It's a justifiably pessimistic view, for we never seem to learn the lessons of history. Internecine strife and wars in the name of religion don't look like going away any too soon. I'm convinced that man invented gods as a justification for evil deeds just as much as for good ones.
reply by the author on 25-Apr-2019
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Glad I still have a six left for this. It's a justifiably pessimistic view, for we never seem to learn the lessons of history. Internecine strife and wars in the name of religion don't look like going away any too soon. I'm convinced that man invented gods as a justification for evil deeds just as much as for good ones.
Comment Written 25-Apr-2019
reply by the author on 25-Apr-2019
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I'm with you on that score, Tony. Many thanks for the delightful rating and the kind words. You've done well to still be in possession of a shiny extra star this late in the week, and I'm very grateful for the gift. Cheers, Craig
