A Boy's Spring - 1957
Spring awakens a boy's thoughts, old and new.10 total reviews
Comment from LIJ Red
I was thirteen in 1957 and you have no idea how close this hits to home.
Do you have any idea how far America has traveled since then or in which direction? Damn that sputnik. Excellent post.
reply by the author on 18-Apr-2019
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I was thirteen in 1957 and you have no idea how close this hits to home.
Do you have any idea how far America has traveled since then or in which direction? Damn that sputnik. Excellent post.
Comment Written 18-Apr-2019
reply by the author on 18-Apr-2019
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A very long, twisting road, with many amazing stops...I was nine in 1957. I still remember rubbing my new ball glove with oil, and the strange feeling of seeing the blond tomboy down the street when first seeing her in a colorful breezy dress. Thank you for the nice words and fine rating. Good luck with your writing!
Comment from A Little Bird
Congratulations on a great piece of work. The image you've selected complements the poem well. Children these days would probably be better off engaging more in the simple pleasures of sport, nature and girls hey. Good luck with the competition!
reply by the author on 17-Apr-2019
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Congratulations on a great piece of work. The image you've selected complements the poem well. Children these days would probably be better off engaging more in the simple pleasures of sport, nature and girls hey. Good luck with the competition!
Comment Written 17-Apr-2019
reply by the author on 17-Apr-2019
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Thank you for your nice thoughts and fine rating. Good luck with your writing.
Comment from Joanna S. Blue
This is a lovely description of spring, the rituals of every spring. I especially like the second stanza. The attention to the sports gear is a shortcut way of conveying the excitement and pride of kids on their teams. I think of my brother and years later, my son, immaculate in their uniforms. And the sounds in the third line. You notice sounds that have been absent for a while, including playing outside until dark. Should there be an apostrophe after shorts? ( the fit of shorts)
reply by the author on 17-Apr-2019
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This is a lovely description of spring, the rituals of every spring. I especially like the second stanza. The attention to the sports gear is a shortcut way of conveying the excitement and pride of kids on their teams. I think of my brother and years later, my son, immaculate in their uniforms. And the sounds in the third line. You notice sounds that have been absent for a while, including playing outside until dark. Should there be an apostrophe after shorts? ( the fit of shorts)
Comment Written 17-Apr-2019
reply by the author on 17-Apr-2019
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Glad you appreciated my effort, and thank you for the nice rating and associated thoughts. Best wishes with your own writing efforts.
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
A mixture of spring arriving and the sporting season all rolled into one here in this poem, I expect this has something to do with baseball? He he he, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 17-Apr-2019
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A mixture of spring arriving and the sporting season all rolled into one here in this poem, I expect this has something to do with baseball? He he he, love Dolly x
Comment Written 17-Apr-2019
reply by the author on 17-Apr-2019
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Glad you liked it, and thank you for the stars. Congratulations on your recent win.
Comment from James Upshaw
This is a beautiful contest entry! I love the imagery and the way you say "'Play ball' punctuates newborn bird songs." That is my favorite line. I am not sure if "oiled" is two syllables. I think it may be one. I do not know if that matters, but just wanted to point that out. Love the poem!
reply by the author on 17-Apr-2019
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This is a beautiful contest entry! I love the imagery and the way you say "'Play ball' punctuates newborn bird songs." That is my favorite line. I am not sure if "oiled" is two syllables. I think it may be one. I do not know if that matters, but just wanted to point that out. Love the poem!
Comment Written 17-Apr-2019
reply by the author on 17-Apr-2019
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Glad you liked it, and thank you for your appreciation. I think the 'oiled' syllable(s) has a lot to do with how you say it in varied locations. Good luck with your own writings.
Comment from Karen Payton Holt
You capture the way warm weather makes us return to pleasures we enjoyed last year.
I particularly liked the third verse. Bright dresses spotlighting beauty is an engaging take on it.
reply by the author on 17-Apr-2019
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You capture the way warm weather makes us return to pleasures we enjoyed last year.
I particularly liked the third verse. Bright dresses spotlighting beauty is an engaging take on it.
Comment Written 17-Apr-2019
reply by the author on 17-Apr-2019
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Many thanks for your kind words and fine rating. Wishing you success with your own writing efforts.
Comment from Regal Bellford
at first I rated it 4 stars. I liked the first two parts. Then I thought about the last part. I actually like it most of all after realizing what it meant. The more and more I reread it, the more I enjoy it. It brings such nice feelings.
reply by the author on 17-Apr-2019
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at first I rated it 4 stars. I liked the first two parts. Then I thought about the last part. I actually like it most of all after realizing what it meant. The more and more I reread it, the more I enjoy it. It brings such nice feelings.
Comment Written 17-Apr-2019
reply by the author on 17-Apr-2019
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Thank you for not rushing to judgement. Appreciate the kind words and nice rating. Good luck with your own writings.
Comment from country ranch writer
Time once again to bring out the spring finery once again time for fun and once again to begin. Excitement is in the air for what is yet to come. Spring break for one and all.let the games begin!
reply by the author on 17-Apr-2019
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Time once again to bring out the spring finery once again time for fun and once again to begin. Excitement is in the air for what is yet to come. Spring break for one and all.let the games begin!
Comment Written 17-Apr-2019
reply by the author on 17-Apr-2019
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Thank you so much for your appreciation and associated stars. Wishing you success in your own writing.
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Smiles!
Comment from humpwhistle
A very nice suite of vignettes to herald the advent of Spring.
I can personify and visualize all of the participants.
Well done.
Best of luck with the Committee.
Peace, Lee
reply by the author on 17-Apr-2019
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A very nice suite of vignettes to herald the advent of Spring.
I can personify and visualize all of the participants.
Well done.
Best of luck with the Committee.
Peace, Lee
Comment Written 17-Apr-2019
reply by the author on 17-Apr-2019
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Thank you much for your kind words and nice rating. Continued success with your own writing.
Comment from Possummagic
I really enjoyed your poem. We don't have a lot of baseball here in Australia. Well we have it, and softball but the more dominant sports are Aussie rules football, and rugby ( grid iron without all the body armour) well written. Happy Easter.PM
reply by the author on 17-Apr-2019
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I really enjoyed your poem. We don't have a lot of baseball here in Australia. Well we have it, and softball but the more dominant sports are Aussie rules football, and rugby ( grid iron without all the body armour) well written. Happy Easter.PM
Comment Written 17-Apr-2019
reply by the author on 17-Apr-2019
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Glad you enjoyed my effort. Good luck with your writing. (Rugby looks pretty rough!)
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Grid iron looks rough! Lol PM
