Broken Into Smithereens
A life torn.22 total reviews
Comment from l.raven
Hi Maria, she is one of my favorite writers...
I love your poem my sweet friend... and love your
picture sweet girl...how sad for her...very well
written...and I love your picture...love you...Linda xxoo
reply by the author on 24-Apr-2019
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Hi Maria, she is one of my favorite writers...
I love your poem my sweet friend... and love your
picture sweet girl...how sad for her...very well
written...and I love your picture...love you...Linda xxoo
Comment Written 24-Apr-2019
reply by the author on 24-Apr-2019
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Thanks for reading, Linda. Fortunately, this is just fiction, but I always wonder what happened to her to make her such a recluse.
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your so welcome sweet girl....I know I love her writings...sigh...love xxoo
Comment from Debra White
Hi Maria,
So now you present me with tragedy...!
The simple narrative leaves room for me to add meat to the bones which is nice. Less is sometimes more!
I really like it (although I prefer a happy ending!)
Best wishes, Debra:)
reply by the author on 19-Apr-2019
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Hi Maria,
So now you present me with tragedy...!
The simple narrative leaves room for me to add meat to the bones which is nice. Less is sometimes more!
I really like it (although I prefer a happy ending!)
Best wishes, Debra:)
Comment Written 19-Apr-2019
reply by the author on 19-Apr-2019
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Thanks for reading, Debra. Big hug.
Comment from giraffmang
Hi MJ,
I love this little piece. It's beautifully written and very sad. You hit perfect tones throughout without being maudlin or over-the-top in any way.
Great little story.
G
reply by the author on 18-Apr-2019
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Hi MJ,
I love this little piece. It's beautifully written and very sad. You hit perfect tones throughout without being maudlin or over-the-top in any way.
Great little story.
G
Comment Written 18-Apr-2019
reply by the author on 18-Apr-2019
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Wow! Thanks, Gareth.
You know I value your opinion (you're a great writer), so I'll have to frame this rating.;)
Take care.
Comment from Jannypan (Jan)
I enjoyed reading your story, Maria. Your word choices are super and I like the way your formatted the lines. the picture is a great pairing with your well-chosen words. Thanks for sharing and for the author notes. Jan
reply by the author on 18-Apr-2019
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I enjoyed reading your story, Maria. Your word choices are super and I like the way your formatted the lines. the picture is a great pairing with your well-chosen words. Thanks for sharing and for the author notes. Jan
Comment Written 17-Apr-2019
reply by the author on 18-Apr-2019
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Thanks so much for this kind review, Jan.
Comment from robyn corum
MJ,
How horribly sad and tragic. Some men deserve to be quartered and burned. Of course, that's just my mean and hateful opinion. But there it is. Ugh. Bless her heart. Thanks!
reply by the author on 18-Apr-2019
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MJ,
How horribly sad and tragic. Some men deserve to be quartered and burned. Of course, that's just my mean and hateful opinion. But there it is. Ugh. Bless her heart. Thanks!
Comment Written 17-Apr-2019
reply by the author on 18-Apr-2019
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Not just your opinion. Some of us would agree.
Thanks for reading.
Comment from BeasPeas
A very good story, Maria, as you say based loosely on the life of Emily Dickinson. What a tragedy to give up one's life for the loss of love from another. I like the theory of grieving for the loss, but then just getting on with life and enjoy. Some people can't do that. Marilyn
reply by the author on 18-Apr-2019
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A very good story, Maria, as you say based loosely on the life of Emily Dickinson. What a tragedy to give up one's life for the loss of love from another. I like the theory of grieving for the loss, but then just getting on with life and enjoy. Some people can't do that. Marilyn
Comment Written 17-Apr-2019
reply by the author on 18-Apr-2019
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Thanks so much for reading, Marilyn.
I haven't got a clue why she was such a recluse, so I made this all up.
Comment from miajaffri
Your story is well done. It kept me wanting to read on. With the lines.... because her sadness forced her to become a hermit. To stay upstairs. Forever. My first thought was, like Emily Dickinson. And then I read that you loosely based your writing on Dickinson!
I wondered if your first paragraph should say, her eyes shone with the memories instead of at the memories?
reply by the author on 18-Apr-2019
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Your story is well done. It kept me wanting to read on. With the lines.... because her sadness forced her to become a hermit. To stay upstairs. Forever. My first thought was, like Emily Dickinson. And then I read that you loosely based your writing on Dickinson!
I wondered if your first paragraph should say, her eyes shone with the memories instead of at the memories?
Comment Written 17-Apr-2019
reply by the author on 18-Apr-2019
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Thanks so much for reading.
Comment from royowen
"Stone walls do not a prison make, nor iron bars a cage," I think Lovelace actually wrote these words in prison. But they were perfectly penned for the likes of Emily Dickenson. Beautfully written Maria, a very sad work, trying to grasp what the lady of words.felt. Well done, blessings, Roy
reply by the author on 17-Apr-2019
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"Stone walls do not a prison make, nor iron bars a cage," I think Lovelace actually wrote these words in prison. But they were perfectly penned for the likes of Emily Dickenson. Beautfully written Maria, a very sad work, trying to grasp what the lady of words.felt. Well done, blessings, Roy
Comment Written 17-Apr-2019
reply by the author on 17-Apr-2019
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Thanks so much for reading, Roy. Take care.
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You too
Comment from Ulla
Awe, Maria Jose, this is lovely, yet so very sad. Beautifully written about a young woman ( Emily Dickinson) who's heart was broken, to a callous man who declared his love but conveniently forgot to say he was married. I have a word for a man like that and it stars with a capital B.....d. All best. Ulla:)))
I did read your notes, but it could be true of so many.
reply by the author on 17-Apr-2019
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Awe, Maria Jose, this is lovely, yet so very sad. Beautifully written about a young woman ( Emily Dickinson) who's heart was broken, to a callous man who declared his love but conveniently forgot to say he was married. I have a word for a man like that and it stars with a capital B.....d. All best. Ulla:)))
I did read your notes, but it could be true of so many.
Comment Written 17-Apr-2019
reply by the author on 17-Apr-2019
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I'm glad you liked it, Ulla. Thanks for reading and for the generous rating.
Comment from Dean Kuch
It only takes one heartbreaking experience for some to ruin them for life as it concerns ever daring to love someone again.
Being a fan of Emily Dickinson and having read not just her poetry but her autobiography as well, I know she never married and died an Old Maid.
It wasn't until after her death that her poetry became popular, thanks, in part, to her sister.
Sad story, Maria, but it happens.
I'm living proof of it.
~Dean
reply by the author on 17-Apr-2019
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It only takes one heartbreaking experience for some to ruin them for life as it concerns ever daring to love someone again.
Being a fan of Emily Dickinson and having read not just her poetry but her autobiography as well, I know she never married and died an Old Maid.
It wasn't until after her death that her poetry became popular, thanks, in part, to her sister.
Sad story, Maria, but it happens.
I'm living proof of it.
~Dean
Comment Written 17-Apr-2019
reply by the author on 17-Apr-2019
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You are?
I'm a fan of hers too.
Thanks for your lovely review.
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Miss Dickinson is one of my favorite classical poets, Maria.
You're very welcome.
~Dean
