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Comment from Gloria ....
Ha, this little prose acrostic is a hoot, Ellijay. Now I shall have to try a story using the alphabet to start each line. Must not be an easy feat.
That said this is zany like a lil Robert Crumb and that means it's terrific.
Most enjoyable.
Gloria
reply by the author on 15-Apr-2019
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Ha, this little prose acrostic is a hoot, Ellijay. Now I shall have to try a story using the alphabet to start each line. Must not be an easy feat.
That said this is zany like a lil Robert Crumb and that means it's terrific.
Most enjoyable.
Gloria
Comment Written 15-Apr-2019
reply by the author on 15-Apr-2019
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Making the prose sound like natural conversation and be acrostic is never easy, for me, anyway. This was kinda fun...reviving old characters and chanting the alphabet...
Comment from Spitfire
LOL. Lutie comes off as a mean old bastard-- the real macho type. No softness in him. Then comes the phone call and his meek, loving response. Love it, but I do think the first paragraph needs to be re-paragraphed. New action deserves a new paragraph.
reply by the author on 14-Apr-2019
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LOL. Lutie comes off as a mean old bastard-- the real macho type. No softness in him. Then comes the phone call and his meek, loving response. Love it, but I do think the first paragraph needs to be re-paragraphed. New action deserves a new paragraph.
Comment Written 14-Apr-2019
reply by the author on 14-Apr-2019
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I jammed the acrostic part into one paragraph, A to Z, deliberately... then couldn't resist adding the phone call...I am just not bright enough
to make an acrostic read like natural prose...thanks for reading and reviewing.
Comment from damommy
I would think Moag dreaded seeing Bert and Lutie come in, knowing there would be no peace with them there.
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Interesting story. I'd like to see more.
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reply by the author on 14-Apr-2019
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I would think Moag dreaded seeing Bert and Lutie come in, knowing there would be no peace with them there.
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Interesting story. I'd like to see more.
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Comment Written 14-Apr-2019
reply by the author on 14-Apr-2019
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The acrostic part was what I was working out...I think I got it fairly smooth....thanks for taking a look at my a through z disaster...
Comment from HealingMuse
Hi Red,
Ha ha ha! This is a really funny write, my friend. It is very well written, with nothing for me to suggest you consider improving upon. Love the ending. Lol Thanks for sharing. Jan :-)
reply by the author on 14-Apr-2019
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Hi Red,
Ha ha ha! This is a really funny write, my friend. It is very well written, with nothing for me to suggest you consider improving upon. Love the ending. Lol Thanks for sharing. Jan :-)
Comment Written 14-Apr-2019
reply by the author on 14-Apr-2019
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Had to use some understood words to make the whole alphabet work, Fun brain teaser. My first acrostic story....
Comment from Marjorie Burghdoff-Banks
I was a little confused at the story line, the character names bring to mind a MC, big biker guys sitting around sharing stories..."Breezes ceased to be southern zephyrs" love this description! Although I was confused, I'm intrigued and would love to see the whole story.
reply by the author on 14-Apr-2019
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I was a little confused at the story line, the character names bring to mind a MC, big biker guys sitting around sharing stories..."Breezes ceased to be southern zephyrs" love this description! Although I was confused, I'm intrigued and would love to see the whole story.
Comment Written 14-Apr-2019
reply by the author on 14-Apr-2019
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The main theme was the acrostic-26 sentences starting with a to z...I still haven't mastered a smooth flow acrostic...
