Mirrors, Reflection or Refractio
Any reason I can't finish my title?64 total reviews
Comment from Janet Foor
A thought provoking piece of poetry. You convey so little and yet so much in these short lines. I feel a sense of struggle with oneself.
Great picture and presentation to add to the story.
Well done
Blessings
Janet
reply by the author on 15-Apr-2019
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A thought provoking piece of poetry. You convey so little and yet so much in these short lines. I feel a sense of struggle with oneself.
Great picture and presentation to add to the story.
Well done
Blessings
Janet
Comment Written 14-Apr-2019
reply by the author on 15-Apr-2019
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Thank you, Janet.
Comment from susand3022
Hi Victor, you always find a way to say so much while at the same time saying so little. Little pieces of me left all over the floor. I can feel that I can totally feel that. Like someone chipping away at you, trying to carve you into something they want you to be instead of someone you are.
reply by the author on 15-Apr-2019
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Hi Victor, you always find a way to say so much while at the same time saying so little. Little pieces of me left all over the floor. I can feel that I can totally feel that. Like someone chipping away at you, trying to carve you into something they want you to be instead of someone you are.
Comment Written 14-Apr-2019
reply by the author on 15-Apr-2019
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Yes. A very apt intuition. Thank you.
Comment from Janice Canerdy
This ultra-concise poem conveys the theme of reinventing one's self,
again and again. The snow seems to represent some form of escape the speaker resorts to when weary. Very thought-provoking
reply by the author on 15-Apr-2019
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This ultra-concise poem conveys the theme of reinventing one's self,
again and again. The snow seems to represent some form of escape the speaker resorts to when weary. Very thought-provoking
Comment Written 14-Apr-2019
reply by the author on 15-Apr-2019
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Thank you, Janice.
Comment from Gloria ....
This is really good, Victor. My guess is you can't finish the title because the mirror is broken. Exceptional free verse and the imagery pieces together with an emotional shattering ending with frozen in cold.
A fine poem.
Gloria
reply by the author on 15-Apr-2019
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This is really good, Victor. My guess is you can't finish the title because the mirror is broken. Exceptional free verse and the imagery pieces together with an emotional shattering ending with frozen in cold.
A fine poem.
Gloria
Comment Written 14-Apr-2019
reply by the author on 15-Apr-2019
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Smile. What a nice review. I thank you, Gloria.
Comment from kiwijenny
This was an intriguing read...I am an artist ...this was a still life portrait but instead of paint it was made with words...snow to cover for a do over maybe?
Colours
Contours
Scattered
Little pieces
I thought were me
God bless
reply by the author on 15-Apr-2019
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This was an intriguing read...I am an artist ...this was a still life portrait but instead of paint it was made with words...snow to cover for a do over maybe?
Colours
Contours
Scattered
Little pieces
I thought were me
God bless
Comment Written 14-Apr-2019
reply by the author on 15-Apr-2019
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Thank you for reading me, and...reviewing. LOL Doug
Comment from catch22
Hello Poet, I really like the metaphor of time and experience being a lens (or prism) through which you perceive your self. Very clever and insightful comment on Oates's "phantasmagoria of personality". The snow is a metaphor for a polite façade that is cold and pretty but not substantial or truthful. Very cool free verse piece.
reply by the author on 15-Apr-2019
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Hello Poet, I really like the metaphor of time and experience being a lens (or prism) through which you perceive your self. Very clever and insightful comment on Oates's "phantasmagoria of personality". The snow is a metaphor for a polite façade that is cold and pretty but not substantial or truthful. Very cool free verse piece.
Comment Written 14-Apr-2019
reply by the author on 15-Apr-2019
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A very thoughtful review. One, which I am honored to receive. And, so would any poet be so ingratiated. Thank you.
Comment from LIJ Red
FS is nitpicky about titles now...you used up your spaces...is the play on words, reflector or refractor(astronomical telescopes) essential...looks like a fine free verse to me...
reply by the author on 15-Apr-2019
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FS is nitpicky about titles now...you used up your spaces...is the play on words, reflector or refractor(astronomical telescopes) essential...looks like a fine free verse to me...
Comment Written 14-Apr-2019
reply by the author on 15-Apr-2019
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Thank you.
Comment from Mrs. KT
Hello Victor!
What a moving rendering - filled with just enough spaces of information to make the reader contemplate "why?" My favorite lines are the following:
I'm good
at puzzles
Not so much
with glue...
or you...
Your thoughts and words flow seamlessly, and the reader arrives at the end of your offering desiring more...
Thank you for sharing!
diane
reply by the author on 15-Apr-2019
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Hello Victor!
What a moving rendering - filled with just enough spaces of information to make the reader contemplate "why?" My favorite lines are the following:
I'm good
at puzzles
Not so much
with glue...
or you...
Your thoughts and words flow seamlessly, and the reader arrives at the end of your offering desiring more...
Thank you for sharing!
diane
Comment Written 14-Apr-2019
reply by the author on 15-Apr-2019
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Thank you, Diane. I really enjoy your reviews. Please continue to read me when you have time. I do so enjoy your comments. Doug
Comment from Marjorie Burghdoff-Banks
there they lay, my yesterdays...we all miss and wonder about and over all our yesterdays. love the flow, love the story you tell and the sense of lost days, hopes and dreams... Great writing!!!
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there they lay, my yesterdays...we all miss and wonder about and over all our yesterdays. love the flow, love the story you tell and the sense of lost days, hopes and dreams... Great writing!!!
Comment Written 14-Apr-2019
reply by the author on 15-Apr-2019
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Thank you. I appreciate your reading of me. Doug
Comment from PriscillaAdelleCordell
Hey Poet, nice to catch a work of yours today at FS. I liked this and I'm not one to dish out five stars willy-nilly, as most do in this elderly friend club, so my stars are actually worth something, hehe
The writing is classically poetic, interesting and not preachy, and it has a splash of the enigmatic. My type of poem, so well done. I love elusive works, and it is a refreshing change from the political would-be poets here that really need a soap box and not a quill, so they can speak their limited truth from on high, hahaah
I wonder if you can't finish the title because of the meaning of the word refraction. And what a lovely way to talk about snow.
Have a great day, Deb.
reply by the author on 14-Apr-2019
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Hey Poet, nice to catch a work of yours today at FS. I liked this and I'm not one to dish out five stars willy-nilly, as most do in this elderly friend club, so my stars are actually worth something, hehe
The writing is classically poetic, interesting and not preachy, and it has a splash of the enigmatic. My type of poem, so well done. I love elusive works, and it is a refreshing change from the political would-be poets here that really need a soap box and not a quill, so they can speak their limited truth from on high, hahaah
I wonder if you can't finish the title because of the meaning of the word refraction. And what a lovely way to talk about snow.
Have a great day, Deb.
Comment Written 14-Apr-2019
reply by the author on 14-Apr-2019
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A wondereful review to receive. Thank you.
