Nature Beats Humans
Nature takes over humanity.28 total reviews
Comment from Freeflying
Well...It had to be written about one day. Plants eating people. This could evolve in many different ways. You have my attention. Great idea.
Flyfree
reply by the author on 18-May-2019
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Well...It had to be written about one day. Plants eating people. This could evolve in many different ways. You have my attention. Great idea.
Flyfree
Comment Written 18-May-2019
reply by the author on 18-May-2019
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Thank you!
Comment from poetwatch
Hey RaĆºl are those chocolate chip looking things inside that gooey whatever the remains of the humans? :0 Your story is good for a start. Are you going to develop it into a much bigger piece of horror? If you do I would like to read it. Good entry for the Dribble Flash Fiction.
reply by the author on 18-May-2019
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Hey RaĆºl are those chocolate chip looking things inside that gooey whatever the remains of the humans? :0 Your story is good for a start. Are you going to develop it into a much bigger piece of horror? If you do I would like to read it. Good entry for the Dribble Flash Fiction.
Comment Written 17-May-2019
reply by the author on 18-May-2019
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Thank you!
Comment from Lori S.
Really interesting idea. Are you actually writing this or is it just a contest entry idea? My mind is already wondering if you're being figurative about taking bites of us - maybe they spray pods or poison pollen to finish us off, or do they literally eat us one by one...? Either way I love science fiction, so I'm in!
The only thing I questioned is did you mean "taken bites" or should that be "taking bites"?
reply by the author on 17-May-2019
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Really interesting idea. Are you actually writing this or is it just a contest entry idea? My mind is already wondering if you're being figurative about taking bites of us - maybe they spray pods or poison pollen to finish us off, or do they literally eat us one by one...? Either way I love science fiction, so I'm in!
The only thing I questioned is did you mean "taken bites" or should that be "taking bites"?
Comment Written 17-May-2019
reply by the author on 17-May-2019
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It is 'taken bites'. The story is meant to be in past tense. Thank you! I am so happy that you enjoyed my story!
Comment from Regal Bellford
Nice story. I will look at your profile to see if you have any horror writing now =)
The only thing I can see is maybe eliminating the word "However" to make it sound more intense... just a thought =P
reply by the author on 16-May-2019
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Nice story. I will look at your profile to see if you have any horror writing now =)
The only thing I can see is maybe eliminating the word "However" to make it sound more intense... just a thought =P
Comment Written 15-May-2019
reply by the author on 16-May-2019
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Thank you! I am so happy that you enjoyed my story!
Comment from Robert Zimmerman
A creative little story describing what happens when the plants decide to eat the beings that eat their fruit , mow them and harvest them. Those beings also provide the CO2 for the plants.
reply by the author on 15-May-2019
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A creative little story describing what happens when the plants decide to eat the beings that eat their fruit , mow them and harvest them. Those beings also provide the CO2 for the plants.
Comment Written 15-May-2019
reply by the author on 15-May-2019
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Thanks! I am so happy that you have enjoyed my story.
Comment from Gloria ....
Hi Raul. All I have to say is uh oh, it looks like the plants and trees have finally dispatched with humanity once and for all.
Excellent theme and I wish you much luck with the Contest Committee. :)
Gloria
reply by the author on 15-May-2019
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Hi Raul. All I have to say is uh oh, it looks like the plants and trees have finally dispatched with humanity once and for all.
Excellent theme and I wish you much luck with the Contest Committee. :)
Gloria
Comment Written 15-May-2019
reply by the author on 15-May-2019
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Thank you!
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No problem. :))
Comment from heavenempress
hi, so lovely piece of poetry. As you have written: disturbing story but it's worth reflecting on. Good rhyming and good English command. Easy to follow poetry and well laid out stanzas. Your image is excellent. All the best.
reply by the author on 14-May-2019
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hi, so lovely piece of poetry. As you have written: disturbing story but it's worth reflecting on. Good rhyming and good English command. Easy to follow poetry and well laid out stanzas. Your image is excellent. All the best.
Comment Written 14-May-2019
reply by the author on 14-May-2019
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Thank you!
Comment from Hitcher
A teeny tiny little slice of flash fiction. They are Extremely difficult to write and I can appreciate the constraints you are shackled with.
That said your take on a possible course of evolution... the decimation of man and the success all things green is food for thought, good luck!
reply by the author on 14-May-2019
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A teeny tiny little slice of flash fiction. They are Extremely difficult to write and I can appreciate the constraints you are shackled with.
That said your take on a possible course of evolution... the decimation of man and the success all things green is food for thought, good luck!
Comment Written 14-May-2019
reply by the author on 14-May-2019
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Thank you!
Comment from Tpa
I wasn't able to approach this story, which you wanted to convey. I do realize that in flash fiction, the words must be condensed to bring about a complete story, yet I felt yours entailed a missing link.
I do however wish you the best and hope the judges are not as harsh as I am.
reply by the author on 13-May-2019
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I wasn't able to approach this story, which you wanted to convey. I do realize that in flash fiction, the words must be condensed to bring about a complete story, yet I felt yours entailed a missing link.
I do however wish you the best and hope the judges are not as harsh as I am.
Comment Written 13-May-2019
reply by the author on 13-May-2019
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Thank you!
Comment from Bill Schott
This dribble, Nature Beats Humans, has the required word count, but only has a story in two sentences.
The plants and trees have eaten all the humans. They have grown while (taking) bites of humans one by one.
Half of this story is taken up with filler, which is antithetical to the purpose of a dribble format.
reply by the author on 11-May-2019
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This dribble, Nature Beats Humans, has the required word count, but only has a story in two sentences.
The plants and trees have eaten all the humans. They have grown while (taking) bites of humans one by one.
Half of this story is taken up with filler, which is antithetical to the purpose of a dribble format.
Comment Written 11-May-2019
reply by the author on 11-May-2019
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Thank you!
