The Convict Train
Viewing comments for Chapter 17 "Badger's Haunted Past"Levi escorts a train full of dangerous convicts
4 total reviews
Comment from Judy Swanson
Mr. Green, I haven't read many western stories in the past few years but my Dad always had a stack of books on the table next to his chair - and most of them were westerns. He had me reading them too, from a fairly young age. This is the first chapter of your book that I have read - but my sense is that there is a solid past behind and a tension filled future ahead of this particular chapter. The dialog is both entertaining and educational and the setting feels realistic. I hope you do continue to write more as you approach your retirement. I also think there is a renewed interest brewing in old west stories.
Judy
reply by the author on 08-May-2019
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Mr. Green, I haven't read many western stories in the past few years but my Dad always had a stack of books on the table next to his chair - and most of them were westerns. He had me reading them too, from a fairly young age. This is the first chapter of your book that I have read - but my sense is that there is a solid past behind and a tension filled future ahead of this particular chapter. The dialog is both entertaining and educational and the setting feels realistic. I hope you do continue to write more as you approach your retirement. I also think there is a renewed interest brewing in old west stories.
Judy
Comment Written 06-May-2019
reply by the author on 08-May-2019
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Hi Judy, thank you very much for your review. This book is the last book of a trilogy. The first two books are on Amazon, and this one will complete the set. I did a lot of research on this event. The Washington Territorial Prison does set just outside of the city of Walla Walla, and the first convicts did arrive by train from the Seatco Prison. Since this is a fictional story, I have taken some artistic privilege. I think you are right, there has always been an ebb and flow with readers, when it comes to western stories. I do hope that you will check out new chapters, as I am a little more than half way through this book, and there is a lot more to come. Mr. Green
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Thank you, Mr. Green, for your thoughtful and thorough response - and details about the writing you are doing.
Judy
Comment from nancy_e_davis
Knowing Badger he will make good on his promise. He will even the score for Spring Rain and Sparrow Hawk. I have a feeling it will be a disastrous decision and he will not survive it. Another interesting chapter Larry. Well done.
Nancy:)
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Knowing Badger he will make good on his promise. He will even the score for Spring Rain and Sparrow Hawk. I have a feeling it will be a disastrous decision and he will not survive it. Another interesting chapter Larry. Well done.
Nancy:)
Comment Written 15-Apr-2019
Comment from Janilou
An interesting chapter.
Notes:
"Casper, you know that James Hawkinburough was the man who took me in. He was the man who made sure that I understood everything that my Pa had taught me. He took me in and showed me how to use the knowledge that would make me the man that I am today."
Because Casper just replied, I don't think you need to have the name, Casper at the beginning of this dialogue. Suggest omitting it.
Same here:
"What are you talking about, Casper?"
"What are you talking about?"
It doesn't feel natural for the name to be used quite so often.
Suggest the same here.
"I don't think I can do this without your help, Casper."
"I don't think I can do this without your help."
"Come-on Badger it's time to make another round, and check on the men. I'll help with this one. Levi you should check-in with Warden Justice."
Add a comma after Levi.
Sounds like an interesting story.
All the best,
Jan
reply by the author on 05-Mar-2021
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An interesting chapter.
Notes:
"Casper, you know that James Hawkinburough was the man who took me in. He was the man who made sure that I understood everything that my Pa had taught me. He took me in and showed me how to use the knowledge that would make me the man that I am today."
Because Casper just replied, I don't think you need to have the name, Casper at the beginning of this dialogue. Suggest omitting it.
Same here:
"What are you talking about, Casper?"
"What are you talking about?"
It doesn't feel natural for the name to be used quite so often.
Suggest the same here.
"I don't think I can do this without your help, Casper."
"I don't think I can do this without your help."
"Come-on Badger it's time to make another round, and check on the men. I'll help with this one. Levi you should check-in with Warden Justice."
Add a comma after Levi.
Sounds like an interesting story.
All the best,
Jan
Comment Written 14-Apr-2019
reply by the author on 05-Mar-2021
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Janilou, I am very sorry for the delay in getting back to you. Life is so unpredictable at times. Reviews such as yours helped me to publish this book and get it on amazon. From Fanstory to getting the final manuscript professionally edited, to working through the publishing faze, and placing it on amazon. Then Covid hit and in the process of adjusting to change, I failed to keep up on my reviews. I would not blame you if you gave up on me. But I owed you an apology, and I am sorry. Thank you for your review. Take Care, and Stay safe. Mr. Green
Comment from Bill Pinder
I like how you wrote this chapter about badgers past and the events that brought him to this juncture in life. I look forward to reading the next chapter. Thanks for sharing.
Bill
reply by the author on 28-Apr-2019
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I like how you wrote this chapter about badgers past and the events that brought him to this juncture in life. I look forward to reading the next chapter. Thanks for sharing.
Bill
Comment Written 14-Apr-2019
reply by the author on 28-Apr-2019
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Thank you Bill, for your kind review. I have considered multiple endings for this story, I am just not sure which one I will end up with. It's interesting how some stories just take a life of their own.
