The Candle
A Veltanelle for Potlatch Poetry26 total reviews
Comment from Anne B Francis
So lovingly put I felt it was like going into a house once loved then haunted by memories of the past, and once more comes alive with just the flickering of candle light. Well written with such lovee
reply by the author on 15-Apr-2019
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So lovingly put I felt it was like going into a house once loved then haunted by memories of the past, and once more comes alive with just the flickering of candle light. Well written with such lovee
Comment Written 15-Apr-2019
reply by the author on 15-Apr-2019
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Thank you for this lovely review.
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Loved this little poems so perfect
Comment from Pantygynt
Although the requirement for this form requires only the syllabic count to be maintained, by writing this in iambic metre pentameter, trimeter, pentameter, trimeter, pentameter, pentameter, this has a beautiful rhythm to it that would not be nearly so satisfying were it not to be written metrically.
The word choice is also excellent leading to a very pleasant experience overall.
reply by the author on 15-Apr-2019
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Although the requirement for this form requires only the syllabic count to be maintained, by writing this in iambic metre pentameter, trimeter, pentameter, trimeter, pentameter, pentameter, this has a beautiful rhythm to it that would not be nearly so satisfying were it not to be written metrically.
The word choice is also excellent leading to a very pleasant experience overall.
Comment Written 15-Apr-2019
reply by the author on 15-Apr-2019
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Thank you so much, Jim. I'm so glad you like it and truly appreciate the wonderful comments and stars.
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I thought it lovely.
Comment from Nottoway
I am going to surmise that this poem is a reflection on personal loss.
It is filled with the love of a lifetime together and the acknowledgment within the heart of missing the loved one. Carrying the candle of light within the heart to light the way even without a loved one is so moving.
Keep love within the heart as I know you do.
reply by the author on 15-Apr-2019
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I am going to surmise that this poem is a reflection on personal loss.
It is filled with the love of a lifetime together and the acknowledgment within the heart of missing the loved one. Carrying the candle of light within the heart to light the way even without a loved one is so moving.
Keep love within the heart as I know you do.
Comment Written 14-Apr-2019
reply by the author on 15-Apr-2019
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What a lovely review. I'm always glad to hear a reviewer's take on my thoughts. I'm happy you like it, and I'm very appreciative of the six stars. Always good to hear from you.
Comment from Ulla
Hi Yvonne, it's a beautiful poem, which brought home such a visual of a lone candle bringing light to an abandoned place. I don't know the first thing about the form. All I can say is that it was a joy to read. All the best. Ulla:)))
reply by the author on 14-Apr-2019
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Hi Yvonne, it's a beautiful poem, which brought home such a visual of a lone candle bringing light to an abandoned place. I don't know the first thing about the form. All I can say is that it was a joy to read. All the best. Ulla:)))
Comment Written 14-Apr-2019
reply by the author on 14-Apr-2019
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Thank you so much. I'm happy you enjoyed reading it.
Comment from LIJ Red
Between you and me and Bucketlist, we have struck a gloomy chord indeed on this Veltanelle form. Well, it has been a wet and windy night in the heartland...excellent Veltanelle.
reply by the author on 14-Apr-2019
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Between you and me and Bucketlist, we have struck a gloomy chord indeed on this Veltanelle form. Well, it has been a wet and windy night in the heartland...excellent Veltanelle.
Comment Written 14-Apr-2019
reply by the author on 14-Apr-2019
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Thank you, Red. I'll check yours out.
Comment from Pearl Edwards
Loved your Veltanelle about this lone candle shedding light on an abandoned place. Lovely descriptions as the candle light takes us through each verse, then back to the shelf again. Lovely read.
cheers,
valda
reply by the author on 14-Apr-2019
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Loved your Veltanelle about this lone candle shedding light on an abandoned place. Lovely descriptions as the candle light takes us through each verse, then back to the shelf again. Lovely read.
cheers,
valda
Comment Written 14-Apr-2019
reply by the author on 14-Apr-2019
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Thank you so much for this lovely review. I always appreciate your input.
Comment from krys123
Dear, Damommy;
>An absolute delight ff such a gifted writing of your Veltanelle<-(I like).
>The absolute rhyming of perfect time and rhyme was text-book.
>The congeniality and sense of serenity that the context achieves makes reading the poem much like the context, soft, gentle, and pleasingly entertaining.
> I do not see or read anything on my second time around, such of anything to offer assistance.
> Thanks were very entertaining and fun time reading a well-written offtake of the villanelle.
> Take care and have a good one, Damommy.
Alx
reply by the author on 14-Apr-2019
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Dear, Damommy;
>An absolute delight ff such a gifted writing of your Veltanelle<-(I like).
>The absolute rhyming of perfect time and rhyme was text-book.
>The congeniality and sense of serenity that the context achieves makes reading the poem much like the context, soft, gentle, and pleasingly entertaining.
> I do not see or read anything on my second time around, such of anything to offer assistance.
> Thanks were very entertaining and fun time reading a well-written offtake of the villanelle.
> Take care and have a good one, Damommy.
Alx
Comment Written 13-Apr-2019
reply by the author on 14-Apr-2019
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Thank you for this great review!
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You're graciously welcome, Damommy.
Alx
Comment from Y. M. Roger
Ohhhh, such a lonely and just dreary trek through a house that's nobody's home... but the candle will be there for the next explorer, perhaps it is the candle's expectations that we can happily take from this.... that, perhaps, one day, it may light the way to find life inside once again!! :) :) A wonderful, thought provoking write, Yvonne, that has a haunting melody of its own that just stays with the reader long after the candle finds its way back to the shelf! :) ;) thanx for sharing.... If I had a six, ma'am, it would be yours!!! :) ;) Yvette
reply by the author on 14-Apr-2019
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Ohhhh, such a lonely and just dreary trek through a house that's nobody's home... but the candle will be there for the next explorer, perhaps it is the candle's expectations that we can happily take from this.... that, perhaps, one day, it may light the way to find life inside once again!! :) :) A wonderful, thought provoking write, Yvonne, that has a haunting melody of its own that just stays with the reader long after the candle finds its way back to the shelf! :) ;) thanx for sharing.... If I had a six, ma'am, it would be yours!!! :) ;) Yvette
Comment Written 13-Apr-2019
reply by the author on 14-Apr-2019
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Thank you so much, Yvette. I really appreciate your wonderful comments.
Comment from Barb Hensongispsaca
so sad and mornful, like looking for something and it is gone.
This tallow tube sat seemingly in wait
as if it knew someday
someone would come and use it to abate
the edge where shadows play.
My favorite. I do not understand the form but loved the content
reply by the author on 14-Apr-2019
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so sad and mornful, like looking for something and it is gone.
This tallow tube sat seemingly in wait
as if it knew someday
someone would come and use it to abate
the edge where shadows play.
My favorite. I do not understand the form but loved the content
Comment Written 13-Apr-2019
reply by the author on 14-Apr-2019
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Thank you so much, Barb. I'm so happy you like it.
Comment from Gloria ....
This is just lovely Yvonne. The candle exploring the house and to search the shadowy edges is such vivid and sensual imagery.
A fine contribution to the Potlatch Club.
Gloria
reply by the author on 14-Apr-2019
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This is just lovely Yvonne. The candle exploring the house and to search the shadowy edges is such vivid and sensual imagery.
A fine contribution to the Potlatch Club.
Gloria
Comment Written 13-Apr-2019
reply by the author on 14-Apr-2019
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Thank you, Gloria. I always appreciate your comments.
