Hello (Haiku)
Month of promise16 total reviews
Comment from Joan E.
I relished your vivid presentation and enthusiasm for the changing seasons. Your alliteration of "s's" adds to the intensity of your message. Best wishes in the Haiku Contest and here's to summer! -Joan
reply by the author on 15-Apr-2019
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I relished your vivid presentation and enthusiasm for the changing seasons. Your alliteration of "s's" adds to the intensity of your message. Best wishes in the Haiku Contest and here's to summer! -Joan
Comment Written 15-Apr-2019
reply by the author on 15-Apr-2019
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Thank you so much Joan for your great review. Jen. X
Comment from June Sargent
We had a lovely spring weekend with temperatures that finally warmed our feet that no longer need woolen socks! Showers are ok - we need the for the flowers. As long as the sun comes out - we can look forward to summer! Lovely sentiments and great imagery.
reply by the author on 15-Apr-2019
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We had a lovely spring weekend with temperatures that finally warmed our feet that no longer need woolen socks! Showers are ok - we need the for the flowers. As long as the sun comes out - we can look forward to summer! Lovely sentiments and great imagery.
Comment Written 14-Apr-2019
reply by the author on 15-Apr-2019
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Thank you so much for your great review. Love Jen. X
Comment from Mark D. R.
A nice welcome to springtime weather.
I know it is Spring when the tulip leaves poke up (never dug up in Fall, they were planted 30 years ago!)
Picked a nice picture and background color for your presentation.
Should your 'spring' be in caps; Summer got top billing (-:
reply by the author on 14-Apr-2019
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A nice welcome to springtime weather.
I know it is Spring when the tulip leaves poke up (never dug up in Fall, they were planted 30 years ago!)
Picked a nice picture and background color for your presentation.
Should your 'spring' be in caps; Summer got top billing (-:
Comment Written 13-Apr-2019
reply by the author on 14-Apr-2019
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Thank you
Comment from Khurram1
The poem is too simple to picture the true essence of a haiku. I believe, the three lines of a haiku should be poignant enough to create an image that is both explicitly condense and implicitly compact.
reply by the author on 14-Apr-2019
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The poem is too simple to picture the true essence of a haiku. I believe, the three lines of a haiku should be poignant enough to create an image that is both explicitly condense and implicitly compact.
Comment Written 13-Apr-2019
reply by the author on 14-Apr-2019
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Tha k you
Comment from Ross E Silke
This is a very colourful presentation and I like your beautiful photograph that all work together well. The poem structurally is sound meeting the requirements of a haiku and is presented well. However, the poem is a bit 'cliche' and lacks in originality as you have chosen a much common phrase to describe spring that we know all too well; it lacks in creativity and originality in that sense. However, it is an inviting message and welcoming sentiment to the onset of spring. This is good but could be better with more of your original thoughts put into it I think.
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reply by the author on 13-Apr-2019
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This is a very colourful presentation and I like your beautiful photograph that all work together well. The poem structurally is sound meeting the requirements of a haiku and is presented well. However, the poem is a bit 'cliche' and lacks in originality as you have chosen a much common phrase to describe spring that we know all too well; it lacks in creativity and originality in that sense. However, it is an inviting message and welcoming sentiment to the onset of spring. This is good but could be better with more of your original thoughts put into it I think.
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The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
Comment Written 13-Apr-2019
reply by the author on 13-Apr-2019
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Thanks for reading.
Comment from lyenochka
Hooray for April showers and her announcement that 'summer's on its way.' Nicely constructed haiku with seasonal reference and an optimism of summer coming.
reply by the author on 13-Apr-2019
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Hooray for April showers and her announcement that 'summer's on its way.' Nicely constructed haiku with seasonal reference and an optimism of summer coming.
Comment Written 13-Apr-2019
reply by the author on 13-Apr-2019
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Thanks Helen. X
Comment from HealingMuse
Hi Jenin,
This is a really beautiful poem with a delightful visual presentation. I think it would be impossible to read this piece and not smile. Thank you for an uplifting read and good luck. Jan :-)
reply by the author on 13-Apr-2019
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Hi Jenin,
This is a really beautiful poem with a delightful visual presentation. I think it would be impossible to read this piece and not smile. Thank you for an uplifting read and good luck. Jan :-)
Comment Written 13-Apr-2019
reply by the author on 13-Apr-2019
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Many thanks Jan.
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Many thankss Jan.
Comment from Rmocruz
Syllable count is correct to haiku format. Flows well when read as a sentence, resents a pleasant message of spring. The photo-art you
selected enhances the nature theme.
Well crafted overall, worthy contest entry.
reply by the author on 13-Apr-2019
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Syllable count is correct to haiku format. Flows well when read as a sentence, resents a pleasant message of spring. The photo-art you
selected enhances the nature theme.
Well crafted overall, worthy contest entry.
Comment Written 13-Apr-2019
reply by the author on 13-Apr-2019
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Many thanks
Comment from Heather Knight
What a lovely, cheerful haiku. Your happy words are reinforced by the background color and the lovely picture.
Thanks for sharing and good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 13-Apr-2019
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What a lovely, cheerful haiku. Your happy words are reinforced by the background color and the lovely picture.
Thanks for sharing and good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 13-Apr-2019
reply by the author on 13-Apr-2019
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Many thanks Maria. X
Comment from BeasPeas
This is a very nicely constructed haiku. Much luck in the contest with this fine entry. It's displayed happily with cheery colors in anticipation of nicer weather. We could use some here in Wisconsin. Marilyn
reply by the author on 13-Apr-2019
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This is a very nicely constructed haiku. Much luck in the contest with this fine entry. It's displayed happily with cheery colors in anticipation of nicer weather. We could use some here in Wisconsin. Marilyn
Comment Written 13-Apr-2019
reply by the author on 13-Apr-2019
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Many thanks Marilyn, my friend. x
